工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 문법과 발음에 주의하여 자연스럽고 명확한 문장으로 표현하세요. 예를 들어, 'I work at an academy where I teach mathematics to middle and high school students. I have been teaching for four years.'처럼 말하면 더 자연스럽고 정확합니다.

示例: I work at an academy where I teach mathematics to middle and high school students. I have been teaching for four years.

建议: 장소를 정확히 표현하고, 문장 구조를 명확히 하세요. 예를 들어, 'I work at an academy near my house, so it only takes me 10 minutes to get there.'라고 하면 더 자연스럽고 이해하기 쉽습니다.

示例: I work at an academy near my house, so it only takes me 10 minutes to get there.

建议: 중복된 단어를 피하고, 문법과 어휘를 정확히 사용하세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I work with coworkers who are very kind and generous. Also, I receive an incentive bonus during the year.'라고 하면 더 명확합니다.

示例: Yes, I work with coworkers who are very kind and generous. Also, I receive an incentive bonus during the year.

建议: 답변에 좀 더 구체적인 이유를 추가하여 풍부하게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I like my workplace because my coworkers are supportive and I receive extra bonuses, which motivate me.'라고 말할 수 있습니다.

示例: Yes, I like my workplace because my coworkers are supportive and I receive extra bonuses, which motivate me.

建议: 문장을 완성하고 명확한 목표를 표현하세요. 예를 들어, 'I want to become an education policymaker because I want to improve students' happiness and provide better learning opportunities.'라고 하면 더 효과적입니다.

示例: I want to become an education policymaker because I want to improve students' happiness and provide better learning opportunities.

× On I work on Academy.

✓ I work at an academy.

'On' is incorrectly used as a preposition here. The correct preposition to indicate working at a place is 'at'. Also, 'Academy' should be preceded by an article 'an' because it is a singular countable noun. 따라서 'On I work on Academy.'는 'I work at an academy.'로 수정해야 합니다.

× I teach mathematics to middle school and high school student.

✓ I teach mathematics to middle school and high school students.

The noun 'student' should be plural 'students' because it refers to multiple students in both middle and high school. 단수 'student' 대신 복수형 'students'를 사용해야 합니다.

× I have thought for. Four years.

✓ I have taught for four years.

The verb 'thought' is the past tense of 'think', but the intended meaning is 'teach'. The correct past participle is 'taught'. Also, the sentence is fragmented and should be combined properly. 'I have taught for four years.'가 올바른 표현입니다.

× I work on Academy.

✓ I work at an academy.

Same as before, 'on' is incorrect; 'at' is the correct preposition to indicate place of work. 또한 'Academy' 앞에 관사 'an'이 필요합니다.

× It is located near my house, so I can go to your firework by working 10 minutes.

✓ It is located near my house, so I can get there by walking for 10 minutes.

'Your firework' is incorrect and unclear. Likely intended 'walk' instead of 'firework'. Also, 'go to your firework by working 10 minutes' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'get there by walking for 10 minutes.' 'Working' is misused instead of 'walking'. 'Your' is incorrect pronoun here; 'there' is appropriate.

× Yes, I can walk with coworker who coworkers who are very generous and kind.

✓ Yes, I can walk with coworkers who are very generous and kind.

'Coworker who coworkers who' is repetitive and incorrect. 'Coworkers' should be plural to match 'who are'. Also, 'walk with coworkers' is acceptable, but the sentence structure needs correction.

× Also I can get a incentive bonus during house.

✓ Also, I can get an incentive bonus during hours.

'a incentive' should be 'an incentive' because 'incentive' starts with a vowel sound. 'during house' is incorrect; likely intended 'during hours' or 'during work hours'. 문법적으로 'an incentive bonus during hours'가 맞습니다.

× Yes, as I mentioned, my coworkers are very kind and generous.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned, my coworkers are very kind and generous.

No grammatical error in this sentence.

× Also I can receive extra bonus.

✓ Also, I can receive an extra bonus.

'Bonus' is a countable noun and requires an article 'an' before it. 따라서 'extra bonus' 앞에 'an'을 추가해야 합니다.

× I want to be a policemaker about education because I want to make my student be happy and I want to give.

✓ I want to be a policymaker in education because I want to make my students happy and I want to help.

'Policemaker' should be 'policymaker'. The preposition 'about' is incorrect; 'in education' is correct. 'Student' should be plural 'students'. 'Make my students happy' is the correct phrase. The sentence ends abruptly; 'I want to give' is incomplete, so 'I want to help' is a reasonable completion. 문법과 의미상 'policymaker in education', 'students', 그리고 문장 완성이 필요합니다.