工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid minor grammatical errors. For example, instead of "customer caring," say "customer service." Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: I work as an account manager, and I thoroughly enjoy my job. I have been in this field for five years, and it has been incredibly rewarding. Specifically, my responsibilities include providing excellent customer service and collaborating closely with my team, which keeps me constantly engaged.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains confusing phrases like "12 flower tower" and "forest flower." Try to be more specific and use correct vocabulary to describe your workplace. Also, keep your sentences concise and coherent.

示例: I work in an office located in the city center. The building is a 12-story tower with large glass windows, which allows plenty of natural light inside.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Focus on using correct grammar and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

示例: Yes, it is a great place to work because we have a supportive manager and collaborative colleagues. Moreover, we maintain good relationships with each other, which makes working there enjoyable.

建议: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use present tense consistently and choose clearer expressions. Also, avoid filler words like "uh."

示例: Yes, I really enjoy working in this office because we have many facilities, and the company uses modern technologies that help employees work more efficiently and perform better.

建议: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrasing. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, organize your ideas logically with linking words.

示例: I don't have specific work plans yet, but I have decided to develop my skills by participating in courses and education programs abroad. Eventually, I hope to work at a prestigious university overseas.

× My responsibilities include customer caring and collaborating with my team, which keeps me constantly engaged.

✓ My responsibilities include customer care and collaborating with my team, which keeps me constantly engaged.

The phrase 'customer caring' is incorrect because 'caring' is a verb or adjective, but here a noun is needed to describe the responsibility. The correct noun form is 'customer care.' Using 'customer care' properly describes the responsibility as a noun phrase.

× I work in a company office and it's located in the city center.

✓ I work at a company office and it's located in the city center.

The preposition 'in' is less appropriate when referring to working at a specific place like an office. 'At' is commonly used to indicate the location of work or an office. Therefore, 'I work at a company office' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× It's a 12 flower tower and we're located in the forest flower and it's a really good building with great glasses and large windows.

✓ It's a 12-floor tower and we're located in the Forest Flower building. It's a really good building with great glass and large windows.

The word 'flower' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'floor' to describe the number of levels in a building. Also, 'forest flower' seems to be a proper noun and should be capitalized as 'Forest Flower.' 'Glasses' should be 'glass' when referring to building material. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× We have good relationship between each other in the company and it's make working the.

✓ We have good relationships with each other in the company and it makes working here enjoyable.

The phrase 'good relationship' should be plural 'good relationships' because it refers to multiple interpersonal connections. 'Between each other' is better expressed as 'with each other.' Also, 'it's make' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it.' The sentence was incomplete and unclear, so it was completed for clarity.

× Yes, I really enjoy working in this office because we had a large number of facilities and the company used modern technologies, which helps people and employees to work better and work with, uh, much more performance.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy working in this office because we have a large number of facilities and the company uses modern technologies, which help people and employees to work better and perform much more efficiently.

The original sentence incorrectly uses past tense verbs 'had' and 'used' when the context is present. The correct present tense forms are 'have' and 'uses.' Also, 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with the plural subject 'technologies.' 'Work with much more performance' is awkward; 'perform much more efficiently' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I haven't any plan for work and I decided to develop my skills and work in a great university in abroad and kind of participating in some courses and educations.

✓ I don't have any plans for work yet, and I have decided to develop my skills by working at a great university abroad and participating in some courses and educational programs.

The phrase 'I haven't any plan' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I don't have any plans.' 'In abroad' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'abroad' without 'in.' 'Kind of participating' is informal and unclear; it is better to say 'participating.' 'Educations' is incorrect; the correct plural noun is 'educational programs' or 'education' as an uncountable noun. The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.