工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 다소 중복되고 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 구성하며, 불필요한 반복을 피하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 'I was a student until last year, and now I am preparing for the IELTS test to study abroad in the UK, specifically at the University of Sunderland.'처럼 명확하고 자연스럽게 말하는 것이 좋습니다.

示例: I was a student until last year, and now I am preparing for the IELTS test to study abroad in the UK, specifically at the University of Sunderland.

建议: 답변이 불명확하고 반복이 있습니다. 직장 이름이나 직무를 명확하게 표현하고, 문장을 완성하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 'I am currently working at 30 Copy, a printing company.'처럼 구체적이고 명확하게 말하는 것이 좋습니다.

示例: I am currently working at 30 Copy, a printing company.

建议: 중복된 단어와 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 정확하게 구성하며, 이유를 명확히 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 'Yes, it is a good place to work because it allows me to express my opinions and maintain a good work-life balance, which helps my personal growth.'처럼 말하는 것이 좋습니다.

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work because it allows me to express my opinions and maintain a good work-life balance, which helps my personal growth.

建议: 의미 전달이 불명확하고 반복이 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 구성하며, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 'If I have a chance, I would like to work from home because it saves commuting costs and is more comfortable for me.'처럼 말하는 것이 좋습니다.

示例: If I have a chance, I would like to work from home because it saves commuting costs and is more comfortable for me.

建议: 답변이 매우 불명확하고 문장이 완성되지 않았습니다. 미래 계획을 명확하고 구체적으로 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 'My future plan is to graduate soon and start my own business selling purses.'처럼 간결하고 명확하게 말하는 것이 좋습니다.

示例: My future plan is to graduate soon and start my own business selling purses.

× Well I was a student until last year but now I I'm preparing for IELTS test to study abroad to UK and specifically I want to umm attend the attend in the University of Sunderland in the UK.

✓ Well, I was a student until last year, but now I'm preparing for the IELTS test to study abroad in the UK, and specifically, I want to attend the University of Sunderland in the UK.

The sentence had redundant words and missing articles. 'the IELTS test' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'attend the attend' is a repetition error. 'to UK' should be 'in the UK' because we use 'in' for countries and 'the' before 'UK'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I'm currently working working in 30 copy.

✓ I'm currently working at 30 Copy.

The sentence had a repeated word 'working' and an unclear phrase 'in 30 copy'. Assuming '30 Copy' is a company name, the correct preposition is 'at' to indicate the workplace. Removing repetition and correcting preposition improves sentence structure.

× Yes, my workplace is good for me to to improve my personal growth because they allows me to express my own opinion and ensure my ensure my work life balance.

✓ Yes, my workplace is good for me to improve my personal growth because they allow me to express my own opinion and ensure my work-life balance.

The verb 'allows' does not agree with the plural subject 'they'; it should be 'allow'. Also, repeated words 'to to' and 'ensure my ensure my' are errors. 'work life balance' should be hyphenated as 'work-life balance'. These corrections fix subject-verb agreement and remove redundancy.

× If I have a chance, I would like to work at my home because I don't have to pay umm committing costs and it is it is comfortable for me to while lasting.

✓ If I have a chance, I would like to work at home because I don't have to pay commuting costs and it is comfortable for me to work while resting.

'Committing costs' is incorrect; the correct term is 'commuting costs'. 'At my home' is better as 'at home' for natural expression. 'While lasting' is unclear; likely intended 'while resting' or 'while relaxing'. These corrections improve modal verb usage and word choice.

× Umm, my future work plan is related to umm, running, umm, my own business related to premise, umm, a purse. I I'd like to graduate soon around the university and I make the.

✓ Umm, my future work plan is related to running my own business related to premises, like a purse shop. I'd like to graduate soon from the university and start my business.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Premise' should be 'premises' meaning business location. 'Around the university' is unclear; 'from the university' is correct for graduation. The last part 'and I make the' is incomplete and corrected to 'and start my business' for clarity. These changes fix sentence structure and clarity.