工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时应更自然简洁，避免重复和语法错误。可以直接说“I'm a second-year university student majoring in pharmaceutical science, which I am passionate about.”

示例: I'm a second-year university student majoring in pharmaceutical science, which I am passionate about.

建议: 回答不够清晰，语法和表达有误。应直接回答工作地点，并用连词连接后续计划。比如：“I study at a university in Nanjing, Jiangsu province, which is well known for its chemistry program. In my fourth year, I will go to Ireland to study abroad.”

示例: I study at a university in Nanjing, Jiangsu province, which is well known for its chemistry program. In my fourth year, I will go to Ireland to study abroad.

建议: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简洁表达并使用连接词。比如：“Yes, the campus is very large, and students can find many places to study, such as classrooms and the library. Moreover, the school has a good atmosphere for studying.”

示例: Yes, the campus is very large, and students can find many places to study, such as classrooms and the library. Moreover, the school has a good atmosphere for studying.

建议: 回答中有重复且表达不够自然。建议使用更自然的表达并用连接词衔接原因。比如：“Yes, I like it because the atmosphere helps me focus on studying, and both students and teachers are very supportive.”

示例: Yes, I like it because the atmosphere helps me focus on studying, and both students and teachers are very supportive.

建议: 回答语法和表达不准确，建议简洁明了并使用连接词。比如：“In my fourth year, I will study abroad on an island. After graduation, I plan to continue my studies in Singapore to gain more knowledge and improve my job prospects.”

示例: In my fourth year, I will study abroad on an island. After graduation, I plan to continue my studies in Singapore to gain more knowledge and improve my job prospects.

× I'm a student in the university and this is the second year since I started studying here.

✓ I'm a student at the university and this is my second year since I started studying here.

介词应使用'at'表示在某个具体地点，'the university'前应加冠词，'second year'前应加物主代词'my'表示所属关系。

× I'm a student in the university and this is the second year since I started studying here.

✓ I'm a student at the university and this is my second year since I started studying here.

介词'in'用于表示在某个范围内，'at'更适合表示在具体的学校或机构。

× I'm now starting at a university in Nanjing, Jiangsu province.

✓ I'm now studying at a university in Nanjing, Jiangsu province.

动词'starting'后不应直接跟地点，应该用'studying at'表示在某地学习。

× Our university is well known for its chemistry measure.

✓ Our university is well known for its chemistry program.

'measure'用法不当，应使用'program'表示课程或专业。

× In the year 4 I will when go I will go to Ireland to study.

✓ In year 4, I will go to Ireland to study.

句子结构混乱，重复使用'will'和'when'，应简化为正确的将来时表达。

× Students can find find many place to study such as the classroom and the library.

✓ Students can find many places to study such as the classrooms and the library.

'place'应使用复数形式'places'，'classroom'也应复数以匹配上下文。

× Our school has a well a good atmosphere for studying.

✓ Our school has a good atmosphere for studying.

'well'和'a'重复且用法错误，应删除多余部分。

× Yes, I like the place where I work because the place has a very good atmosphere to help us immerse in studying.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because it has a very good atmosphere that helps us immerse ourselves in studying.

'the place'重复，改用代词'it'，'immerse'后应使用反身代词'ourselves'。

× Therefore, the students and teachers are very kind to help help me.

✓ Therefore, the students and teachers are very kind to help me.

'help'重复，应删除多余的一个。

× I will go to abroad the island in year 4 for further study.

✓ I will go abroad to the island in year 4 for further study.

'go to abroad'用法错误，应为'go abroad'，'the island'前应加冠词。

× After I graduate, I will go to Singapore for the further study because I want to learn more, learn much knowledge and have a good job.

✓ After I graduate, I will go to Singapore for further study because I want to learn more, gain more knowledge, and get a good job.

'the further study'中冠词'the'多余，'learn much knowledge'表达不自然，应改为'gain more knowledge'，'have a good job'改为'get a good job'更合适。