工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答较为完整，但表达不够自然，句子结构有些生硬。建议简化句子，避免重复信息，并使用更自然的表达方式。

示例: I'm a second-year university student majoring in pharmaceutical science, a subject I've been passionate about since high school.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误，如介词使用不当，且信息表达不够流畅。建议注意介词的正确使用，并尝试用更连贯的句子表达地点信息。

示例: I study at a university in Nanjing, Jiangsu Province. It's located in the eastern part of the city, close to Lao Shan Mountain.

建议: 回答内容较好，但句子较长且缺少连接词，表达略显重复。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并避免重复表达。

示例: Yes, I think it's a great place to study because the campus environment is pleasant and the academic atmosphere is harmonious, which helps students feel relaxed and focus better on their studies.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，如“the sense of our school is quite beautiful”。建议使用更准确的词汇和简洁的句子表达感情。

示例: Yes, I love my university. The teachers and students have good relationships, and they are always kind and helpful. Besides, the campus is very beautiful, which makes me enjoy studying here.

建议: 回答表达基本清晰，但存在冠词使用错误和句子结构不够自然的问题。建议注意冠词的正确使用，并使句子更流畅。

示例: I plan to study abroad, possibly in Singapore or the United Kingdom. After graduating, I will return to my country to find a job and work hard.

× I'm a student in a university.

✓ I'm a student at a university.

介词使用错误，英语中通常说“at a university”表示在某所大学学习，而不是“in a university”。

× This is the year 2 since I entered the university.

✓ This is my second year since I entered the university.

表达时间时应使用“my second year”更自然，且“year 2”不符合英语习惯表达。

× My major is pharmaceutical science which I am keen on from high school.

✓ My major is pharmaceutical science, which I have been keen on since high school.

“keen on”后面应使用完成时态“have been keen on”，且“from high school”应改为“since high school”表示从过去某时持续到现在。

× Our school is located in the eastern of Nanjing city and near the Lao Shan mountain.

✓ Our school is located in the east of Nanjing city and near Laoshan Mountain.

“in the eastern”应改为“in the east”，且地名“Lao Shan mountain”应写作“Laoshan Mountain”，首字母大写且合并。

× Yes, I believe it is a good place to study because our campus has a good environment and academic atmosphere is very harmonious.

✓ Yes, I believe it is a good place to study because our campus has a good environment and a very harmonious academic atmosphere.

“academic atmosphere is very harmonious”缺少冠词，应为“a very harmonious academic atmosphere”，使句子结构完整。

× The students in our school will feel relaxed and can focus on studying well.

✓ The students in our school feel relaxed and can focus well on studying.

“will feel”不符合习惯表达，描述常态应使用一般现在时“feel”，且“focus on studying well”中“well”位置不当，应为“focus well on studying”。

× We always have good relationships between teachers and students.

✓ We always have good relationships with teachers and students.

“relationships between”通常指两个具体群体之间的关系，这里应使用“relationships with”表示与某人之间的关系。

× They are very kind to help me to solve some problems.

✓ They are very kind to help me solve some problems.

“help me to solve”中“to”可省略，英语中“help”后面接动词不定式时常省略“to”。

× In addition, the sense of our school is quite beautiful, so I like my school very well.

✓ In addition, the scenery of our school is quite beautiful, so I like my school very much.

“the sense of our school”表达不准确，应为“the scenery of our school”；“like my school very well”应改为“like my school very much”，因为“like”后修饰程度用“very much”。

× I will go abroad for further study, maybe the Singapore or the United Kingdom.

✓ I will go abroad for further study, maybe to Singapore or the United Kingdom.

“maybe the Singapore”中“the”不应出现，且“maybe”后应加介词“to”表示目的地。

× Then after I graduate successfully, I will go back to my country to find a job and work hard.

✓ Then after I graduate successfully, I will go back to my country to find a job and work hard.

此句语法正确，无需修改。