工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中存在语法错误，如“was worked”应为“have worked”或“worked”，同时句子结构不够自然。建议使用正确的时态和更流畅的表达方式。

示例: I have worked in the exhibition industry, and at the same time, I am a student at Shanghai International Studies University, majoring in Business Administration.

建议: 回答中缺少冠词和连词，句子不够完整自然。建议使用完整句子并加入适当的连接词，使表达更流畅。

示例: I work in Shanghai, which is the commercial center of China and a dynamic, international city.

建议: 回答中断句不完整，表达不清晰。建议避免断句错误，使用连贯的句子，并具体说明原因。

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work because it has a professional atmosphere and my colleagues are well-educated.

建议: 存在语法错误，如“I'm work”应为“I work”，句子断裂影响流畅度。建议使用正确语法并连接句子。

示例: Yes, I really like the place where I work because it is in the center of Pudong district. It is very convenient, and our company offers various benefits.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰且重复。建议简化句子，使用正确时态，并清楚表达未来计划。

示例: I have worked in the traditional exhibition industry for several years and gained rich experience. In the future, I plan to combine my expertise with art exhibitions.

× I was worked for exhibition industry.

✓ I worked in the exhibition industry.

这里使用了错误的过去时态形式“was worked”，正确的表达应该是简单过去时“worked”，因为“work”是一个动作动词，表示过去的经历。建议去掉“was”，直接用“worked”。

× And at the same time I'm a student of Shanghai International Studies University, major in Business administration.

✓ And at the same time, I'm a student at Shanghai International Studies University, majoring in Business Administration.

句子中缺少逗号分隔，且“major in”用法不完整，应该用“majoring in”表示正在学习的专业。建议加逗号并使用现在分词形式“majoring”。

× My work based on Shanghai, the commercial center of China, which is dynamic and international city.

✓ My work is based in Shanghai, the commercial center of China, which is a dynamic and international city.

缺少系动词“is”，且“based on”应改为“based in”表示地点，“international city”前缺少冠词“a”。建议补充系动词，改正介词和冠词。

× Yes, of course it is a good place to work because there is the professional atmosphere and. High quality educations with my colleagues.

✓ Yes, of course it is a good place to work because there is a professional atmosphere and high-quality education with my colleagues.

句子中断句错误，且“the professional atmosphere”应为不定冠词“a professional atmosphere”，“High quality educations”应为不可数名词“high-quality education”，且不应大写。建议调整断句，冠词和名词形式。

× Yes, I really like the place where I'm work because it is the center of the Pudong district.

✓ Yes, I really like the place where I work because it is the center of the Pudong district.

“I'm work”是错误的现在进行时用法，正确应为一般现在时“I work”，因为描述习惯性动作。建议去掉“'m”。

× It's really convenient and our company have. Different benefits.

✓ It's really convenient and our company has different benefits.

主语“company”是单数，谓语动词应使用单数形式“has”，而不是“have”。建议改正主谓一致。

× Umm, actually I was engaged in this, uh, traditional industry for more than several years and I can gained the rich experience, but in the future, I my my expertise will towards to art exhibition to combine.

✓ Umm, actually I have been engaged in this traditional industry for more than several years and I have gained rich experience, but in the future, my expertise will be directed towards combining with art exhibitions.

“was engaged”改为现在完成时“have been engaged”更符合持续时间表达；“can gained”错误，应该是“have gained”；“will towards to”结构错误，应改为“will be directed towards”；“to combine”应改为“combining with”。建议调整时态和表达方式，使句子通顺。