工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中有较多的语气词（如umm, uh），影响流畅性。建议减少语气词的使用，回答时更自然简洁，避免重复表达。

示例: I currently work at a pharmaceutical company, focusing on vaccine development and research. I am responsible for conducting clinical trials and providing training to the commercial team.

建议: 回答未完成，句子中断，缺乏完整表达。建议回答时确保句子完整，避免中断，同时可以适当丰富细节。

示例: I work at a pharmaceutical company in the city center of Shanghai. My job involves conducting clinical trials and providing training sessions to commercial teams, which I find both challenging and rewarding.

建议: 回答中出现语法错误和句子未完成，影响表达清晰度。建议注意语法准确，句子完整，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work. Firstly, the office is located in the city center, so my commute is very convenient. I usually take the subway, which takes about 20 minutes. Secondly, the working environment is comfortable and well-equipped.

建议: 回答中有语法错误（如“is will equipped”），且细节描述可以更具体。建议注意语法，丰富细节描述，使回答更自然流畅。

示例: Yes, I really like my workplace because the commute is very convenient; it takes me only 20 minutes by subway. Also, the office is well equipped with amenities such as a coffee machine and a pantry, which make the environment comfortable.

建议: 回答表达稍显笨拙，语法和句式结构有待改进。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达方式，并补充具体计划。

示例: Since my current job is closely related to public health and I majored in medicine at university, I plan to pursue further education in public health to enhance my knowledge and skills.

× I'm currently working at a pharmaceutical company, umm, mainly focusing on vaccine development and umm uh, research.

✓ I'm currently working at a pharmaceutical company, mainly focusing on vaccine development and research.

句中“umm”和“uh”是口语中的填充词，不属于语法错误，但在正式书面表达中应去除以提高表达的清晰度。

× Umm, partly in the medical department where I'm in charge of conducting clinical trials and providing trainings for commercial team.

✓ I'm partly in the medical department where I'm in charge of conducting clinical trials and providing training for the commercial team.

“partly”用法不当，应直接说明“I'm in the medical department”。“trainings”是不可数名词，应使用单数形式“training”。“commercial team”前缺少定冠词“the”。

× My job involves conducting clinical trials and providing training sessions to commercial teams. This job is quite challenging and.

✓ My job involves conducting clinical trials and providing training sessions to commercial teams. This job is quite challenging.

句子末尾“and”后缺少内容，导致句子结构不完整，应删除“and”以完成句子。

× I usually take subway to the office and it only takes about 20 minutes to get there.

✓ I usually take the subway to the office and it only takes about 20 minutes to get there.

“subway”前应加定冠词“the”，表示特指的交通工具。

× Secondly, the working environment is comfortable my.

✓ Secondly, the working environment is comfortable.

句尾“my”无意义，导致句子结构错误，应删除。

× I can take a subway to get to your office within 20 minutes.

✓ I can take the subway to get to my office within 20 minutes.

“your office”指代不当，学生应使用“my office”表示自己的办公室。

× Secondly, the office is will equipped with many amenities like coffee machine, pantry.

✓ Secondly, the office is well equipped with many amenities like a coffee machine and a pantry.

“will”应为“well”，表示“良好地”。“coffee machine”和“pantry”前应加不定冠词“a”，并用“and”连接。

× Well as my current job is closely related to public health and my major in university several years ago was a medical, so I plan to pursue a further education in public health which I think it will be helpful.

✓ Well, as my current job is closely related to public health and my major at university several years ago was medicine, I plan to pursue further education in public health, which I think will be helpful.

“a medical”用法错误，应改为“medicine”。“a further education”中“education”是不可数名词，前不加冠词。句中缺少逗号以分隔从句，且“which I think it will be helpful”中“it”多余，应删除。