工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains redundancy. Try to respond directly and clearly, for example, say "I am a student and currently not working." Also, avoid unnecessary details like 'practically unemployment' which is confusing. Keep your answer natural and concise.

示例: I am a student and currently not working. I am 17 years old and study at a CBSE school in Kerala.

建议: Your answer repeats information and is a bit long. Try to answer directly and use linking words to make it coherent. For example, start with 'I don't work currently because I am still studying. However, I plan to work after completing my degree in four to six years.'

示例: I don't work currently because I am still studying. However, I plan to work after completing my degree in four to six years.

建议: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Since you don't work yet, you can say that you are not sure but you hope to find a good workplace in the future. Keep it concise and relevant.

示例: I am not sure because I haven't worked yet, but I hope to find a good workplace in the future.

建议: Your answer is repetitive and a bit confusing. Try to answer directly and clearly. For example, say 'I cannot say now as I haven't started working yet, but I hope to like my workplace when I do.'

示例: I cannot say now as I haven't started working yet, but I hope to like my workplace when I do.

建议: Good answer with clear plans and specific details. To improve, you can use linking words to make it more coherent and slightly reduce redundancy. For example, start with your current status, then use 'after that' or 'then' to connect your plans.

示例: I am currently a 12th grade student in India. After completing my studies, I plan to get a degree in chemical engineering. Then, I want to specialize in cosmetic chemistry to become a formulation chemist in Riyadh, Saudi Arabia, where I plan to settle.

× No, I don't work in practically unemployment and I'm a student.

✓ No, I am practically unemployed and I'm a student.

The phrase 'work in practically unemployment' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'I am practically unemployed' to indicate the state of not having a job. The preposition 'in' is not used with 'unemployment' in this context.

× I study in a CBSE affirmative school in the L North Carolina district of Kerala.

✓ I study at a CBSE affiliated school in the L North Carolina district of Kerala.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to attending a school; 'at' is the correct preposition. Also, 'affirmative' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'affiliated' to describe the school.

× Well as I said, I'm unemployed and I'm 17 and I'm still studying so not working.

✓ Well, as I said, I'm unemployed, 17 years old, and still studying, so I'm not working.

The original sentence lacks proper punctuation and conjunctions, making it confusing. Adding commas and conjunctions improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I plan on working after almost four to six years since then only I would have a degree with me just needed for work.

✓ I plan on working after about four to six years because by then I will have a degree, which is needed for work.

The phrase 'after almost four to six years since then only I would have a degree with me just needed for work' is awkward and incorrect. Using 'after about four to six years' and restructuring the sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects preposition use.

× I don't know about that because an unemployed and I'm a student and I'm still studying and I'm trying hard to study so that I will gain a good job when I grow up.

✓ I don't know about that because I am unemployed, a student, and still studying. I'm trying hard so that I can get a good job when I grow up.

The original sentence is missing the pronoun 'I' before 'am unemployed' and is overly long and repetitive. Adding 'I am' and breaking the sentence improves grammar and clarity.

× Not sure about that because I will know that since I'm not working because I'm a student and once I start working I'll be able to share my opinion about the workplace.

✓ I'm not sure about that because I don't know yet. Since I'm not working and am a student, once I start working, I'll be able to share my opinion about the workplace.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper subject usage. Adding 'I' and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Well, right now I'm in 12th grade and I'm a 17 year old student studying in India.

✓ Well, right now I'm in 12th grade and I'm a 17-year-old student studying in India.

When using age as an adjective before a noun, hyphens are required to form a compound adjective: '17-year-old' instead of '17 year old'.