工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时时态混乱，表达不够自然，且信息组织不清晰。建议使用简单明了的句子，明确现在的工作状态，避免多余词汇。

示例: I am currently working as a management accountant in a healthcare company. I graduated from university six years ago and I really enjoy my job.

建议: 回答内容较完整，但句子结构稍显简单，缺少连接词使表达不够流畅。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并稍作细节补充。

示例: I work for TIME as a management accountant in a multinational pharmaceutical company. Our main products are medicines that help cure various illnesses.

建议: 表达不够清晰，语法和词汇使用有误，且缺少逻辑连接。建议简化句子，使用正确词汇，并用连接词使表达更自然。

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work. The company is very supportive, especially for women, and encourages us to share our ideas, which are often put into practice.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，且细节描述不够具体。建议注意语法，使用更自然的表达，并具体说明福利。

示例: Definitely, I like working at my company because it is very close to my apartment, which saves me a lot of commuting time. Also, the company provides free coffee to help employees stay refreshed.

建议: 回答表达混乱，语法错误较多，信息不明确。建议简化句子，明确表达未来计划，并使用正确词汇。

示例: In the future, I want to improve my financial skills and obtain a related degree. I also plan to pass the English proficiency exam to help with my career development.

× I worked as management accountant in healthcare company and I have graduated from university about six years and currently I really like my job.

✓ I have worked as a management accountant in a healthcare company and I graduated from university about six years ago, and currently I really like my job.

这里涉及过去时和现在完成时的使用错误。'worked' 应该用现在完成时 'have worked' 来表示从过去到现在的经历；'have graduated' 应该用一般过去时 'graduated'，并且需要加时间状语 'about six years ago'。此外，缺少冠词 'a' 和 'a healthcare company'。建议注意时态的正确使用和冠词的添加。

× I worked as management accountant in healthcare company and I have graduated from university about six years and currently I really like my job.

✓ I have worked as a management accountant in a healthcare company and I graduated from university about six years ago, and currently I really like my job.

'management accountant' 和 'healthcare company' 前缺少不定冠词 'a'，英语中职业和可数名词单数前通常需要冠词。建议在类似表达中注意冠词的使用。

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

句末多了一个 '>' 符号，应删除。

× I work for TIME as management accountant in a multinational pharmaceutical company and our main product is medicine that can cure the patient for their illness.

✓ I work for TIME as a management accountant in a multinational pharmaceutical company, and our main product is medicine that can cure patients of their illnesses.

'management accountant' 前缺少冠词 'a'。'the patient' 应改为复数 'patients'，因为指的是一般患者；'for their illness' 应改为 'of their illnesses'，介词使用错误。建议注意冠词和介词的正确使用。

× I work for TIME as management accountant in a multinational pharmaceutical company and our main product is medicine that can cure the patient for their illness.

✓ I work for TIME as a management accountant in a multinational pharmaceutical company, and our main product is medicine that can cure patients of their illnesses.

'cure the patient for their illness' 中介词 'for' 用法错误，正确应为 'cure patients of their illnesses'。

× And I think our company's control is very friendly, especially for the woman, and we can express our ideas and even our thoughts to the United community and it can take it to action.

✓ And I think our company's culture is very friendly, especially for women, and we can express our ideas and even our thoughts to the United community, and it can put them into action.

'company's control' 应为 'company's culture'；'the woman' 应为复数 'women'；'take it to action' 应为 'put them into action'，代词和短语使用错误。建议注意词汇选择和代词的一致性。

× Definitely, there are so many benefits to work in our company.

✓ Definitely, there are so many benefits to working in our company.

'benefits to work' 应改为 'benefits to working'，动词不定式应改为动名词形式。

× The first of all, it's very close to my apartment, it can help me save a lot of time on community life.

✓ First of all, it's very close to my apartment, which helps me save a lot of time on commuting.

'The first of all' 应为 'First of all'；'save a lot of time on community life' 表达不当，应为 'save a lot of time on commuting'。建议注意固定短语和介词搭配。

× And besides the company also provide the coffee to refresh.

✓ And besides, the company also provides coffee to refresh us.

主语 'the company' 是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加 's'，即 'provides'。

× In the future I want to develop my skills and degree yeah on the financial part.

✓ In the future, I want to develop my skills and degree in the financial field.

'degree yeah on the financial part' 表达不清，应改为 'degree in the financial field'。

× So I want to pass the examination for else speaking and it can help me submit.

✓ So I want to pass the English speaking examination, and it can help me get promoted.

'examination for else speaking' 表达错误，应为 'English speaking examination'；'help me submit' 不合适，应为 'help me get promoted' 或类似表达。建议注意词汇和短语的正确使用。