工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to correct grammar mistakes and clarify your job role. Also, avoid confusing phrases like 'depends on the ship I was assigned to' which seems unrelated. Use clear and concise sentences to describe your work.

示例: I'm currently working as an operating room nurse in a private hospital in my hometown. I usually work 8 to 12 hours a day, depending on my assigned shifts.

建议: Improve sentence structure and remove unnecessary words like 'a one of'. Also, avoid filler words such as 'Uh'. Provide a complete and clear answer.

示例: I work in a private hospital located in Zamboanga City, Philippines, which is my hometown.

建议: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Avoid confusing phrases and repetition. Explain your opinion with specific reasons and use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: I think it is a good place to work sometimes, but the management can be very strict with healthcare workers, which makes the job stressful. Because of their strict rules, we often feel restricted in our work.

建议: Try to organize your answer with clear sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to connect ideas. Explain your feelings and efforts to adapt more clearly.

示例: It depends. Sometimes I don't feel motivated to go to work because I find it unproductive. However, I am trying my best to adapt to their style since I am still new and adjusting.

建议: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Avoid repeating words like 'for a for'. Provide specific reasons and use linking words to explain your plans logically.

示例: My future plan is to work abroad to continue my career because the situation in my country is not very good. I want to find better opportunities for the future of my kids and family.

× I'm a operator room nurse.

✓ I'm an operating room nurse.

The phrase 'a operator' is incorrect because 'operator' starts with a vowel sound, so 'an' should be used instead of 'a'. Also, the correct term is 'operating room nurse' not 'operator room nurse'. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I work in a one of the private hospital in my hometown.

✓ I work in one of the private hospitals in my hometown.

The phrase 'a one of the private hospital' is incorrect. 'One of the' already implies singular, so 'a' is unnecessary. Also, 'hospital' should be plural because 'one of the' refers to a member of a group. The correct phrase is 'one of the private hospitals'.

× It depends on the ship I was assigned to.

✓ It depends on the shift I was assigned to.

The word 'ship' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'shift' which refers to work periods. This is a vocabulary error affecting meaning and grammar.

× They are more strict with the health care workers and will be are very stressful 1 compared to to them.

✓ They are stricter with the health care workers and it is very stressful compared to them.

The phrase 'will be are very stressful 1' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. 'Will be are' is redundant and incorrect verb usage. Also, 'more strict' should be 'stricter' for comparative adjective. The phrase 'compared to to them' has a repeated preposition 'to'. The corrected sentence uses proper comparative form and correct prepositions.

× So we are like on a prison that has been banned to do this or do that.

✓ So we are like in a prison where we are banned from doing this or that.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in' when referring to being inside a prison. Also, 'has been banned to do' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'banned from doing'. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× Probably it depends because sometimes I hate I'm not in the mood to go to work I'm I find it not productive at all.

✓ It probably depends because sometimes I hate going to work when I'm not in the mood; I find it not productive at all.

The original sentence is fragmented and confusing. The phrase 'I hate I'm not in the mood to go to work I'm I find it not productive at all' lacks proper conjunctions and verb forms. The correction restructures the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness, using gerund form 'going' after 'hate' and proper conjunctions.

× But I'm trying my best to adapt their style because I am still new there so it is a lot of adjustment.

✓ But I'm trying my best to adapt to their style because I am still new there, so it is a lot of adjustment.

The verb 'adapt' requires the preposition 'to' when indicating what one is adapting to. Adding 'to' after 'adapt' is necessary for grammatical correctness.

× Nothing changes because I'm planning to go abroad to continue my career there because in my country nowadays it's not that good.

✓ Nothing has changed because I'm planning to go abroad to continue my career there since my country nowadays is not that good.

The phrase 'Nothing changes' is incorrect in this context; the present perfect 'Nothing has changed' is more appropriate to indicate a situation that remains the same up to now. Also, 'because' is repeated; replacing the second 'because' with 'since' improves sentence flow.

× So I need to find another career for a for the future of my kids and my family.

✓ So I need to find another career for the future of my kids and my family.

The phrase 'for a for the future' contains a repeated preposition 'for'. Removing the extra 'a for' corrects the sentence.