工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答有些语法错误和表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免冗长，并且注意冠词和时态的使用。例如，'I graduated from college last year with a bachelor's degree in supply chain management. Now, I work as a procurement assistant at a local company. This is my first formal job, and I have learned a lot, such as improving my communication skills.'

示例: I graduated from college last year with a bachelor's degree in supply chain management. Now, I work as a procurement assistant at a local company. This is my first formal job, and I have learned a lot, such as improving my communication skills.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不连贯的问题。建议使用连词使句子更流畅，并注意主谓一致。例如，'I work at a local company located close to my home, so I usually go to work by bike, which is very convenient. Although my company is not big yet, my boss treats us fairly and kindly, creating a friendly work environment.'

示例: I work at a local company located close to my home, so I usually go to work by bike, which is very convenient. Although my company is not big yet, my boss treats us fairly and kindly, creating a friendly work environment.

建议: 回答不完整且有语法错误。建议补充完整句子，使用适当的时态和连接词，使表达更自然。例如，'Absolutely. It's a great place to work because my colleagues are very friendly and patient. When I first met them, I was quite nervous, but they always smiled and taught me how to accomplish procurement tasks properly.'

示例: Absolutely. It's a great place to work because my colleagues are very friendly and patient. When I first met them, I was quite nervous, but they always smiled and taught me how to accomplish procurement tasks properly.

建议: 回答中表达不够清晰，且有语法错误。建议调整句子结构，使用更准确的词汇和连接词。例如，'Of course, I like the place where I work because the environment is very harmonious. Sometimes, my boss orders desserts like milk tea and cakes to reward our hard work, which motivates me to do my best every day.'

示例: Of course, I like the place where I work because the environment is very harmonious. Sometimes, my boss orders desserts like milk tea and cakes to reward our hard work, which motivates me to do my best every day.

建议: 回答表达基本清楚，但有语法和用词错误。建议使用更自然的表达和连接词，例如，'To be honest, I'm uncertain about my future work plans because I don't know which field truly interests me. At the moment, my goal is to complete my work efficiently and effectively to minimize mistakes.'

示例: To be honest, I'm uncertain about my future work plans because I don't know which field truly interests me. At the moment, my goal is to complete my work efficiently and effectively to minimize mistakes.

× I graduated from college last year and with a bachelor degree in supply chain management and now I'm working as a procurement assistant at a local company.

✓ I graduated from college last year with a bachelor's degree in supply chain management and now I'm working as a procurement assistant at a local company.

The phrase 'and with a bachelor degree' is incorrect because it lacks a verb and the article 'a' should be 'a bachelor's degree' to indicate possession. The sentence needs to connect the clauses properly and use the correct noun form for the degree.

× I work at a local company and which is located close to my home.

✓ I work at a local company which is located close to my home.

The conjunction 'and' is incorrectly used before 'which'. The relative clause should directly follow the noun it modifies without 'and' to maintain correct sentence structure.

× Shall I go to work by bike, which is very convenient.

✓ I go to work by bike, which is very convenient.

'Shall I go' is a question form and inappropriate here. The sentence should be a statement describing the usual mode of transport, so 'I go' is correct.

× Although my company is not big yet, my boss treat us fairly and kindly, creating a friendly work environment.

✓ Although my company is not big yet, my boss treats us fairly and kindly, creating a friendly work environment.

The subject 'my boss' is singular, so the verb should be 'treats' to agree in number.

× The moment I first meet them, I was quite nervous, but they always smiled and taught me how to accomplish the procurement tasks according to the.

✓ The moment I first met them, I was quite nervous, but they always smiled and taught me how to accomplish the procurement tasks accordingly.

The verb 'meet' should be in past tense 'met' to match the past context. Also, 'according to the' is incomplete and should be replaced with 'accordingly' to complete the meaning.

× Of course, because the environment is very harmonious where I work, sometimes my boss orders the different desserts such as milk tea and cakes to avoid our hard work, which I think also motivates me to do my best every day.

✓ Of course, because the environment is very harmonious where I work, sometimes my boss orders different desserts such as milk tea and cakes to reward our hard work, which I think also motivates me to do my best every day.

The phrase 'orders the different desserts' is incorrect; 'the' is unnecessary before 'different desserts'. Also, 'to avoid our hard work' is illogical; it should be 'to reward our hard work' to convey the intended meaning.

× To be honest, I'm uncertain about my future work plan because I don't know which domain I'm truly interested in.

✓ To be honest, I'm uncertain about my future work plans because I don't know which domain I'm truly interested in.

'Work plan' should be plural 'work plans' to indicate multiple possible plans, which is more natural in this context.

× So at this moment my goal is to finish my work in an efficient and effective way, reduce the chances I may make the mistakes.

✓ So at this moment my goal is to finish my work in an efficient and effective way and reduce the chances that I may make mistakes.

The phrase 'make the mistakes' is incorrect; 'make mistakes' without 'the' is the correct general expression. Also, the sentence needs 'and' to connect the two goals properly.