工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng hơi dài và có một số phần lặp lại không cần thiết. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi trước, sau đó mới bổ sung thêm chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: I have been working as a developer in a city for four years. I chose this job because I find it very rewarding, and after gaining experience, I decided to continue in this field.

建议: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'you know' hay 'uh'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

示例: I work in a city located in central Vietnam, which is known for being one of the most beautiful and peaceful places in the country.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do tại sao nơi làm việc tốt.

示例: Yes, it is a great place to work because the company provides a safe and supportive environment, which makes me feel comfortable and motivated.

建议: Bạn nên tránh lặp lại và sử dụng các từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'uh'. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý đến cách dùng từ để diễn đạt chính xác hơn.

示例: Absolutely. My company offers many benefits, including a good salary and sports activities that support both my physical and mental health. Moreover, my coworkers are very friendly and interesting.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ, khiến ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: I haven't thought about it much, but I plan to continue working at this company for the next four to five years.

× Actually, I have been working as a developer in a city for four years and I chose this job because I think it's very rewarding and after a few years working in this environment, I decided to stick to it.

✓ Actually, I have been working as a developer in a city for four years and I chose this job because I think it's very rewarding and after a few years working in this environment, I have decided to stick to it.

The sentence mixes past tense 'decided' with present perfect 'have been working'. Since the speaker is still working there, 'have decided' is more appropriate to indicate a decision relevant to the present.

× As I told you before, I am working in the next city now and I love the city is in the middle side of Vietnam and is considered as the most, you know, uh, beautiful and peaceful city in Vietnam as well.

✓ As I told you before, I am working in the next city now and I love that the city is in the middle part of Vietnam and is considered the most, you know, uh, beautiful and peaceful city in Vietnam as well.

The phrase 'middle side' is incorrect; 'middle part' or 'central part' is the correct prepositional phrase to describe location. Also, 'considered as' should be 'considered' without 'as'.

× Yes, of course, uh, my company is located in the next city and for me, uh, after a few years working in this company, I feel is kind of like a safety and safe and wonderful place for me to work as it offers.

✓ Yes, of course, uh, my company is located in the next city and for me, uh, after a few years working in this company, I feel it is kind of a safe and wonderful place for me to work as it offers many benefits.

The sentence lacks the subject 'it' before 'is' and misuses 'safety and safe'; 'safe' is the correct adjective here. The sentence structure is incomplete and unclear, so it needs rephrasing for clarity.

× Absolutely, yes. As I told you before, uh, my company offers a lot of benefits relevant to salary and other sport activities that support me to crowd not only in physical but also in mental health.

✓ Absolutely, yes. As I told you before, uh, my company offers a lot of benefits related to salary and other sports activities that support me to grow not only physically but also in mental health.

The phrase 'relevant to salary' should be 'related to salary'. 'Sport activities' should be plural 'sports activities'. 'Support me to crowd' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'grow'. Also, 'in physical' should be 'physically'.

× And my coworker, uh, my coworkers are very friendly and fascinating people as well.

✓ And my coworkers are very friendly and fascinating people as well.

The phrase 'my coworker, uh, my coworkers' is redundant and confusing. It should be simply 'my coworkers' to indicate plural colleagues.

× Uh, it's hard questions in I have never thought about it before, but if I had to answer the question, umm, I, I, I think that I, I decided to stick to it.

✓ Uh, it's a hard question and I have never thought about it before, but if I had to answer the question, umm, I think that I have decided to stick to it.

The phrase 'hard questions in' is incorrect; it should be 'a hard question and'. The tense 'I decided' should be present perfect 'I have decided' to indicate a decision relevant to the present.

× I mean, I still working in this company for athletes 4 to five years in the years to come.

✓ I mean, I will still be working in this company for at least 4 to 5 years in the years to come.

The phrase 'I still working' is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' or should be changed to future tense 'will still be working' to match 'in the years to come'. Also, 'for athletes' is incorrect; likely intended 'at least'.