工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it contains some hesitations and minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence fluency by using simpler, more natural phrasing. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar information.

示例: I am currently working full-time as an auditor at the Federal Board of Revenue. My job involves auditing various taxpayers and corporations to ensure compliance with tax laws.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains confusing phrases like 'last Expire Office' and 'FBI's office' which may not be accurate or natural. Be precise and clear about your workplace, and avoid unnecessary filler words. Also, try to provide a complete and coherent answer.

示例: I work at the Federal Board of Revenue office located in PRC Towers, Lalazar area, Karachi.

建议: Your answer is positive and relevant, but you can improve by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your response more coherent. Avoid repeating similar adjectives like 'good' and 'very good'.

示例: Yes, I think it's a great place to work because the people are very cooperative and supportive. Moreover, the friendly environment makes it enjoyable, and I feel proud to be part of this organization.

建议: Your answer shows enthusiasm but is affected by many hesitations and some unclear phrasing. Try to speak more fluently and organize your ideas clearly. Avoid filler words and redundancy, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I definitely like my workplace because I spend most of my day there. I believe everyone should enjoy their workplace since we spend more than half of our time at work.

建议: Your answer provides relevant information but contains grammatical errors and unclear expressions like 'I hard share'. Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer phrasing. Also, organize your ideas logically with linking words to improve coherence.

示例: I haven't planned my future in detail yet because I'm not a good planner. However, I intend to continue working here for at least one more year before moving abroad for new opportunities.

× Well, currently I'm a full time working individual.

✓ Well, currently I'm a full-time working individual.

The phrase 'full time' should be hyphenated as 'full-time' when used as a compound adjective before a noun to describe the individual.

× I work as an auditor at Federal Board of Revenue FPR uh, my nature of work includes auditing different kind of taxpayers and corporations.

✓ I work as an auditor at the Federal Board of Revenue (FBR). My nature of work includes auditing different kinds of taxpayers and corporations.

The name of the organization requires the definite article 'the' before it. Also, 'different kind' should be pluralized to 'different kinds' to agree with the plural noun 'taxpayers and corporations'.

× Well, I've worked at FBI's office which is named as last Expire Office Karachi.

✓ Well, I've worked at the FBR's office which is named the Last Expiry Office Karachi.

The organization acronym was incorrect ('FBI' instead of 'FBR'). The phrase 'named as' is incorrect; it should be 'named'. Also, 'Expire' should be 'Expiry' to correctly describe the office name. The definite article 'the' is needed before 'FBR's office' and before the office name.

× It is located at PRC Towers in Lalazar area.

✓ It is located in PRC Towers in the Lalazar area.

The preposition 'in' is more appropriate for buildings and areas. Also, 'the' is needed before 'Lalazar area' as it is a specific place.

× Yes, in my opinion it's really good workplace as people are super cooperative and helpful to each other.

✓ Yes, in my opinion it's a really good workplace as people are very cooperative and helpful to each other.

The article 'a' is needed before 'really good workplace'. 'Super' is informal and should be replaced with 'very' for formal speech.

× Also the environment is very friendly and good.

✓ Also, the environment is very friendly and pleasant.

The word 'good' is vague; 'pleasant' is a better adjective to describe an environment. A comma is needed after 'Also'.

× I feel very good to be part of this organization and working here.

✓ I feel very good to be part of this organization and to be working here.

Parallel structure requires 'to be' before both 'part of this organization' and 'working here' for clarity and correctness.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The question is about current preference, so 'Do you like' is more appropriate than 'Would you like', which implies a hypothetical or future preference.

× It is the place where I spend my most of the time of my day and I think uh, each one should like their workplace because they spend uh, like, uh, more than half, uh, of their time at workplace.

✓ It is the place where I spend most of my time during the day, and I think everyone should like their workplace because they spend more than half of their time at the workplace.

'My most of the time of my day' is incorrect; it should be 'most of my time during the day'. 'Each one' is better replaced with 'everyone' for naturalness. 'At workplace' needs the article 'the'.

× Well, as of now I didn't planned about my future because I'm not a good planner, but I think I'll be continue working here for at least one, one year and then I'll be switching to somewhere else because I'm planning to go abroad outside the country.

✓ Well, as of now I haven't planned about my future because I'm not a good planner, but I think I'll continue working here for at least one year and then I'll switch somewhere else because I'm planning to go abroad.

'Didn't planned' is incorrect; it should be 'haven't planned' (present perfect). 'I'll be continue' should be 'I'll continue'. 'I'll be switching' can be simplified to 'I'll switch'. 'Abroad outside the country' is redundant; 'abroad' alone suffices.

× Therefore I think one year is Max. I hard share.

✓ Therefore, I think one year is the maximum. I hardly share.

'Max' should be expanded to 'maximum' for clarity. 'I hard share' is incorrect; likely intended 'I hardly share', but the meaning is unclear and may need rephrasing or removal.