工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy and hesitations. Try to give a clear and concise response directly addressing the question, avoid repeating words, and use correct terminology. Also, limit your answer to about 3-4 sentences for clarity.

示例: I am currently working as a doctor at a public hospital in Hanoi called E Hospital. I work in the Department of Cultural Anthropology and Hepatology. I see patients there every day and gain valuable experience.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains many hesitations and unclear place names. Try to provide a clear and direct answer with specific location details, and avoid filler words like 'umm'.

示例: I work at a hospital located in the Cau Giay district of Hanoi. It is near the main road called Cau Giay Street, which makes it easy to access.

建议: Your answer is relevant but contains many hesitations and some grammatical errors. Try to speak more fluently and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work because it allows me to gain practical experience. Moreover, I can learn a lot from senior doctors, which helps me improve my skills.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical mistakes and hesitations. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and use correct grammar. Also, provide specific reasons why you like the place.

示例: Yes, I like the hospital where I work because it is spacious and has a friendly environment with many trees. Additionally, we usually have many patients, which keeps me busy and motivated.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and contains many hesitations. Try to give a clear and complete response with specific details about your future plans, using linking words to connect ideas.

示例: In the future, I plan to study abroad to further my education. This will help me gain more experience in research and improve my professional skills.

× At the moment, I am working at a doctor at a public hospital in Hanoi called E Hospital Hospital Umm, I am working in the Department of Cultural Anthrology and Hepatology, uh, everyday.

✓ At the moment, I am working as a doctor at a public hospital in Hanoi called E Hospital. Umm, I am working in the Department of Cultural Anthropology and Hepatology every day.

The phrase 'working at a doctor' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'as' when referring to a job role. Also, 'everyday' should be two words 'every day' when used as an adverb meaning 'each day'. Additionally, 'Anthrology' is likely a misspelling of 'Anthropology'.

× As a moment, I'm working at a hospital, that hospital located in Umm Causeway district in Hanoi Umm that's around and umm the road Cancun run besides.

✓ At the moment, I'm working at a hospital that is located in Umm Causeway district in Hanoi. Umm, it's around the area and the road Cancun runs beside it.

The phrase 'As a moment' should be 'At the moment' to indicate current time. Also, 'that hospital located' needs the verb 'is' to be grammatically correct. The phrase 'the road Cancun run besides' should be 'the road Cancun runs beside' to use the correct verb form and preposition.

× Yes, of course. Uh, in my part of it, I think, uh, a hospital, a hospital is, uh, are the place to practice because it's helped me to build my experience in my career and also I can, I can learn from the senior doctors there.

✓ Yes, of course. Uh, in my part, I think a hospital is the place to practice because it has helped me to build my experience in my career and also I can learn from the senior doctors there.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'are' instead of 'is' for the singular noun 'hospital'. Also, 'it's helped' should be 'it has helped' for clarity. The phrase 'in my part of it' is awkward and corrected to 'in my part'.

× I realize hospital where I work now because it's quite spacious and, uh, the environment is quite friendly with a lot of tree and, uh, we usually have a lot of patients that.

✓ I like the hospital where I work now because it's quite spacious and the environment is quite friendly with a lot of trees, and we usually have a lot of patients.

The word 'realize' is incorrect in this context; 'like' fits the intended meaning. 'A lot of tree' should be plural 'a lot of trees'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'patients that' which is incomplete; removing 'that' completes the sentence.

× In future, I have a plan to study abroad for further education. Umm, is help me to uh, build up the experience in the field of uh, research and also, uh, that can be umm, umm.

✓ In the future, I have a plan to study abroad for further education. Umm, it will help me to build up experience in the field of research and also, uh, that can be umm, umm.

The phrase 'is help me' is incorrect; it should be 'it will help me' to express future intention with a modal verb. Also, 'In future' should be 'In the future' for correct article usage.