工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lặp từ và nói lắp. Hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể và dùng từ vựng phù hợp để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: I am a high school student in class 28. I enjoy going to school because my teachers are very friendly and my classmates are supportive.

建议: Câu trả lời không trả lời đúng câu hỏi và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp về nơi làm việc hiện tại hoặc trước đây, dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và giải thích rõ ràng hơn về công việc và lợi ích của nó.

示例: I started working part-time when I was 16 years old at a local bookstore. It helped me develop my skills and earn some money.

建议: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không được truyền đạt hiệu quả. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, giải thích rõ lý do tại sao nơi làm việc tốt và dùng từ vựng phù hợp.

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work because it helps me improve my communication skills and I have access to many useful books.

建议: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và thiếu sự mạch lạc. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và giải thích rõ lý do bạn thích nơi làm việc, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh nói lắp.

示例: Yes, I like the place where I work because it helps me improve my skills and the students are very friendly.

建议: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và không rõ ràng. Bạn nên nói rõ kế hoạch nghề nghiệp tương lai, lý do chọn nghề và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ không phù hợp.

示例: In the future, I plan to become a teacher because I love working with children and I want to help them learn and grow.

× I am a student in a class 28 at high school.

✓ I am a student in class 28 at high school.

In English, we do not use the definite article 'a' before 'class 28' when referring to a specific class number. The phrase 'class 28' is treated as a proper noun here, so the article is unnecessary.

× I uh really going to school because the teacher is very friendly and uh the people will willing have to me.

✓ I really like going to school because the teacher is very friendly and the people are willing to help me.

The original sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'am' before 'going' to form the present continuous tense. Also, 'will willing have to me' is incorrect; it should be 'are willing to help me' to express willingness properly.

× Yes, I start working when I was in 16 years old.

✓ Yes, I started working when I was 16 years old.

The sentence mixes present tense 'start' with past time 'when I was 16 years old'. The verb should be in the past tense 'started' to match the past time reference. Also, 'in 16 years old' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was 16 years old'.

× It helped me, uh. Develop school in a. I have money.

✓ It helped me develop at school. I earned money.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Develop school in a' is incorrect; it should be 'develop at school' to indicate improvement. Also, 'I have money' should be 'I earned money' to indicate past action.

× Yes, it is very good because uh it have you develop communication school and uh it umm, many books good, many book bit better.

✓ Yes, it is very good because it helps you develop communication skills and has many good books, which are a bit better.

'It have' should be 'it has' to agree with singular subject. 'Communication school' is incorrect; it should be 'communication skills'. Also, 'many books good, many book bit better' is ungrammatical; it should be 'many good books, which are a bit better'.

× Yes, I love the place because, uh, it is have me very better school and uh the pupil very, very friendly.

✓ Yes, I love the place because it has helped me improve a lot at school and the pupils are very, very friendly.

'It is have me' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it has helped me'. 'Very better' is incorrect; 'better' alone suffices. Also, 'the pupil very, very friendly' lacks a verb; it should be 'the pupils are very, very friendly'.

× In the future I plan to work at teacher because I love children and I learn very secure and improving. Camille.

✓ In the future, I plan to work as a teacher because I love children and I want to learn and improve a lot.

'Work at teacher' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'work as a teacher'. 'I learn very secure and improving' is ungrammatical; it should be 'I want to learn and improve a lot'. Also, 'Camille' seems out of context and is omitted.