工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cümlede çok fazla karışıklık ve dilbilgisi hatası var. Önce basit ve doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kurun (ör. "I am a student"), sonra gerekli ise bir veya iki destekleyici cümleyle detay verin. Bağlaçlar (because, so, but, and) kullanarak cümlelerinizi mantıklı şekilde bağlayın. Ek olarak sayılar ve zaman ifadelerini açık ve düzgün söyleyin (for two years, at half past eight gibi).

示例: I am a student. I am preparing for pilot exams, so I study for about two years. I usually have lessons at half past eight or nine in the morning.

建议: Cevabınız net değil ve karışık kelime sıralaması var. Soruyu doğrudan yanıtlayın (ör. "I don't work at the moment"), ardından eğer meşgul olduğunuz bir aktivite varsa basit bir cümleyle açıklayın. Gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu sözcüklerini (uh, listen to) azaltın.

示例: I don't work at the moment. I am a recent graduate and I plan to give lessons in the future.

建议: Cevap anlamca belirsiz ve akıcılık zayıf. Önce soruya net bir "Yes" veya "No" ile başlayın, ardından nedenini bir veya iki kısa cümleyle belirtin. Mantıklı bağlaçlar kullanın ve gereksiz kelime tekrarlarından kaçının. Eğer evde çalışmayı kastediyorsanız bunu açıkça söyleyin (I work from home).

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work because I can work from home comfortably. I can also spend time with my family while studying.

建议: Cevap çok kısa ve dilbilgisi hatalı. Doğrudan ve tam cümleyle yanıt verin ("No, I don't like it" veya "Yes, I like it"). Ardından sebebinizi ekleyin. Kısa destekleyici gerekçeler (working conditions, location, atmosphere) kullanın ve dolgu sözcüklerini azaltın.

示例: No, I don't like the place because it is not comfortable for studying. I prefer a quiet place with fewer distractions.

建议: Mesajınız anlaşılmak istenen fikri taşısa da dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi zayıf. Önce net bir plan cümlesi kurun ("I want to be a pilot"). Sonra adımları açıklayın ("first I need to pass exams, then I will train"). İngilizce pratik eksikliğini dürüstçe söyleyebilirsiniz ama bunu açık ve düzgün cümleyle ifade edin. Bağlaçlarla sıra belirtin (first, then, after that).

示例: I want to become a pilot. First, I need to prepare and pass the exams, and then I will attend flight training. I also plan to practise English more to improve my communication skills.

× I am student but grew aged a student correctly pilot exams get ready this for two and the day eight half or 9 or lesson working.

✓ I am a student, and I am preparing for my pilot exams; I have been studying for two years and sometimes attend lessons at eight thirty or nine o'clock.

The original sentence has many sentence structure and article errors and lacks proper verb forms and time expressions. Use the article 'a' with 'student'. Combine related ideas with conjunctions or punctuation. Use a clear verb phrase for preparation (am preparing / have been studying) and standard time expressions (eight thirty / nine o'clock).

× I am not work graduate at the moment. Listen to listen and uh, I am going to provided lesson.

✓ I am not working at the moment; I have graduated recently. I listen to lessons and I am going to provide lessons.

The phrase 'I am not work' is incorrect: use the present continuous 'I am not working'. 'Graduate' needs past participle form 'graduated' to show completed action. 'Listen to listen' seems repetitive; 'I listen to lessons' is clear. 'Going to provided' mixes forms; use 'going to provide' for future intention.

× Yes, that is I am to the suturing, uh home very comfortably, some home half, whereas mother, I am not going listen back wrong.

✓ Yes, I feel comfortable at home; sometimes I stay at my mother's house. I am not sure I understood the question.

The original sentence is confusing and contains incorrect word choices and order. 'That is I am to the suturing' is unintelligible; replace with a clear statement about comfort. 'Some home half' likely means 'sometimes at my mother's house'. 'I am not going listen back wrong' is unclear; a safe clarification is 'I am not sure I understood the question.'

× No, but. I am umm, working not.

✓ No. I am not working.

The negative is incorrectly formed 'working not'. In English use 'I am not working' for present continuous negatives. Remove unnecessary fillers and place 'not' after the auxiliary verb.

× I'm I will be plot, but first ago, uh, the exam I need to get ready, but I rarely speak English.

✓ I will be a pilot, but first I need to prepare for the exam; however, I rarely speak English.

The sentence mixes tenses and has word order issues. Use 'I will be a pilot' for future career. 'First ago' is incorrect; use 'first' or 'first of all'. 'The exam I need to get ready' should be 'I need to prepare for the exam'. Keep conjunctions clear ('however' or 'but') and maintain parallel structure.