工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence ("I'm a student") then add one or two specific supporting details. Remove fillers ("Umm", repeated words) and avoid vague timing like "maybe"; give definite or clearly qualified plans. Use linking words (e.g., "and", "so") to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I'm a student at Ribav University, and I plan to start working in February. I hope to find a teaching-related position because I want practical experience in education and to apply what I learn at university.

建议: Answer the question directly first ("I don't work at the moment") then give concise, relevant supporting detail about being a student. Avoid hesitations and unnecessary phrases like "the thing I want to say maybe". Use linking words to connect the two parts (e.g., "but", "and").

示例: I don't work at the moment, but I am a student at Ribav University studying International Relations.

建议: Start with a clear opinion sentence ("Yes, it's a good place to work") and then give two specific reasons using linking words ("because", "for example"). Make vocabulary more natural (e.g., "graduates" instead of "graduated diplomats", "networking opportunities" instead of "useful networking communication"). Keep sentences concise.

示例: Yes, I think it's a good place to work because graduates can often find positions at the Ministry of Foreign Affairs, and the job offers excellent experience and networking opportunities. For example, working there would help me meet professionals in diplomacy.

建议: If you don't understand, briefly ask for clarification but try to answer when repeated. A useful approach: request repetition succinctly ("Could you repeat that, please?") and then give a short, direct response. Avoid long apologies and be prepared to say whether you would like it, with one reason.

示例: Could you repeat the question, please? (after repetition) Yes, I would like to work there because it matches my studies and offers career development.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your plan ("I want to work at the Embassy of Poland") and follow with two specific reasons linked with words like "because" and "also". Replace vague words like "some" and "hopefully" with precise language, and keep it concise (max 4 sentences).

示例: I want to work at the Embassy of Poland because I love the Polish language and I am studying European studies at university. Working there would allow me to use my language skills and apply my academic knowledge in a diplomatic setting.

× Yes, I'm a student, but I'm also planning to work maybe starting from February.

✓ Yes, I'm a student, but I'm also planning to work, maybe starting in February.

Use of preposition: 'starting from February' is not wrong but 'starting in February' is more natural; also add a comma before 'maybe' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'starting in February' and include punctuation to separate modifiers.

× Umm I I need to find a work that is connected with teaching.

✓ Umm I need to find work that is connected with teaching.

'Work' as an uncountable noun does not take the article 'a' when referring to employment in general. Remove 'a'. Also remove the duplicate 'I'.

× Hopefully I will find it in two weeks.

✓ Hopefully I will find one in two weeks.

The pronoun 'it' is unclear; use 'one' to refer to 'a job' mentioned earlier. Tense 'will find' is appropriate for future intention, keep as is.

× Currently I don't have a job so the thing I want to say maybe is I am a student at Ribav University and I'm studying international relations.

✓ Currently I don't have a job, so what I want to say is that I am a student at Ribav University and I'm studying international relations.

Add comma before coordination; replace awkward phrase 'the thing I want to say maybe is' with 'what I want to say is that' for natural sentence structure; include 'that' after 'is' to introduce the clause.

× Usually graduated diplomats may find work at Ministry of International Affairs and considering this place, I think it is a really good opportunity to gain some experience and useful networking communication.

✓ Usually graduate diplomats may find work at the Ministry of International Affairs, and considering this, I think it is a really good opportunity to gain some experience and useful networking opportunities.

'Graduated diplomats' should be 'graduate diplomats' (diplomats who graduated are described as 'graduate' in this context). 'at Ministry' needs the definite article 'the Ministry'. 'Considering this place' is awkward; 'considering this' is clearer. 'Networking communication' is unnatural; use 'networking opportunities' or 'communication skills' depending on meaning.

× So yes, it's a good place to work and I also hope to work there.

✓ So yes, it's a good place to work, and I also hope to work there.

Add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' for clarity. Otherwise sentence is grammatical.

× I'm sorry, I think I didn't understand the question.

✓ I'm sorry, I don't think I understood the question.

In this context the speaker refers to a past moment just now; 'I don't think I understood' or 'I think I didn't understand' are both possible. 'I don't think I understood' is more natural in polite requests for repetition. Match tense and use natural reporting.

× May I ask you to repeat or explain it to me?

✓ Could you repeat or explain it to me, please?

'May I ask you to...' is formal and not wrong but awkward in spoken context. 'Could you' is a more natural polite request. Also add 'please' for politeness.

× I want to work at the Embassy of Poland because I love Polish language and currently I'm studying some European studies at my university and hopefully it will be beneficial for me to implement this knowledge at the embassy.

✓ I want to work at the Embassy of Poland because I love the Polish language, and currently I'm studying European studies at my university; hopefully it will be beneficial for me to apply this knowledge at the embassy.

Add definite article 'the' before 'Polish language'. 'Some European studies' is awkward—use 'European studies' without 'some'. Use 'apply' instead of 'implement' for knowledge. Use punctuation to break a long sentence into clearer parts.