工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevap doğrudan ve anlaşılır fakat dilbilgisi hataları ve dolgu sözcükleri var. "It's been 4 years that I have been graduated" ifadesi yanlış; doğru kullanım "I graduated four years ago" veya "I've been working for four years" olmalı. Ayrıca gereksiz tekrarlar ve doldurucu sesler (uh, umm) azaltılmalı. Cümleleri daha doğal ve akıcı yapmak için konuyu kısa bir konu cümlesiyle başlatın, ardından bir veya iki destekleyici detay ekleyin ve maksimum 5 cümlede kalın.

示例: I'm a corporate lawyer at a law firm. I graduated four years ago and since then I've been handling corporate transactions and contracts. I mainly advise clients on mergers and compliance, which I find challenging but rewarding.

建议: Cevap net ve yeterince bilgilendirici ancak tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimeler mevcut. "Well known" ifadesi yerine "a well-known" yazılmalı ve sayı açıklaması akıcı bir cümle ile sunulmalı. Bazı cümleleri birleştirerek daha doğal bir akış elde edebilirsiniz. Ayrıca daha özgün bir detay (ör. ofisin konumu, sektör uzmanlığı) ekleyin.

示例: I work at a well-known law firm with about 25 staff. We have both litigation and corporate teams, and I'm part of the corporate department that focuses on commercial transactions.

建议: Cevap olumlu fakat dilbilgisi ve ifadede düzensizlikler var. "We have some spare times" yerine "we have some free time" veya "we get breaks" demelisiniz. "Big living room" ofis için uygunsuz olabilir; "common room" veya "break room" daha doğru. Ayrıca örneği daha kısa ve net verin, gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın.

示例: Yes, it's a great place to work. We get regular breaks and there's a large common room where people have lunch and relax or play board games during their breaks.

建议: Cevap samimi ama konuşma akışı dolgu sözcüklerle kesiliyor ve bazı ifadeler yanlış ("the people I work there" yerine "the people I work with"). "my employees" yanlış çünkü öğrenci muhtemelen çalışan değil; yerine "my colleagues" kullanılmalı. Cümleleri daha doğru gramerle ve bağlaçlarla organize ederek daha doğal olun.

示例: Yes, I like working there because my colleagues and managers have a great sense of humor. We often laugh and socialize together, which makes the long hours much more enjoyable.

建议: Cevap anlamı belli ama dilbilgisi ciddi hatalar ve tekrarlar içeriyor. "My future work plans is" yanlış; "My future plan is" veya "I plan to" kullanılmalı. "study in abroad" yanlış; doğru kullanım "study abroad". Ayrıca planların zaman çizelgesini ve nedenlerini kısaca ekleyin. Cümleleri net ve düzenli tutun.

示例: I plan to continue working at a law firm in the long term, but first I want to study abroad for a year to specialize in international corporate law and gain global experience.

× It's been 4 years that I have been, uh, graduated.

✓ I graduated four years ago.

The original mixes present perfect passive with an unnecessary form; 'have been graduated' is incorrect. Use simple past 'graduated' with a time expression 'four years ago' to indicate when the action happened. Use words 'four' instead of digit in formal speech and omit passive 'been'. Suggestions: say 'I graduated four years ago.' or 'I have been working for four years.' depending on intended meaning.

× I work in a well known law firm.

✓ I work in a well-known law firm.

Compound adjective 'well-known' needs a hyphen. Also 'a well-known law firm' is correct; ensure hyphenation for compound modifiers before a noun. In writing, include the hyphen to show the words function together.

× Uh, we are 25 people, uh, working there.

✓ There are 25 of us working there.

Native phrasing prefers 'There are 25 of us' rather than 'we are 25 people'. Use 'of us' to link number to the group. Also keep 'people' unnecessary after 'of us'.

× There are litigation lawyers and corporate lawyers.

✓ There are litigation lawyers and corporate lawyers there.

Original sentence is grammatically acceptable but sounds slightly incomplete in context; adding 'there' clarifies location. No article change needed; kept plural nouns. Alternative: 'There are litigation and corporate lawyers.'

× Uh, we have some spare times, uh, to do whatever we want.

✓ We have some spare time to do whatever we want.

The uncountable noun 'time' should be singular in this context. Use 'some spare time' not 'spare times'. Suggestion: 'We have some free time' is also natural.

× For example, we have a big living room, so that's in mid days.

✓ For example, we have a big living room, so that's for midday breaks.

Phrase 'in mid days' is incorrect. Use 'midday' or 'midday breaks' and preposition 'for' to indicate purpose. 'Midday' refers to noon; 'midday breaks' fits context of lunch/rest time.

× We have our lunch and then rest there or play some games.

✓ We have our lunch, then rest there or play some games.

Sentence is acceptable but comma improves flow. No -ing change needed; 'play some games' is correct. Suggestion: '...then relax there or play some games.' for naturalness.

× I like the place where I work because, uh, the people I work there, for example, my bosses, my employees, they all have a good uh, sense of humor.

✓ I like the place where I work because the people I work with there, for example my bosses and colleagues, all have a good sense of humor.

Use 'work with' when referring to coworkers. 'Employees' is wrong if the speaker is an employee; 'colleagues' is better. Remove extra pronoun 'they'. Streamline punctuation and articles.

× We all, uh, laugh together, play together even we work a lot umm.

✓ We all laugh and play together, even though we work a lot.

Original misses conjunction structure. Use 'even though' to show contrast. Combine verbs with 'and' for smoother coordination.

× My future work plans is still work in a law firm, uh, like the place I'm I've been working now, but before work, I want to go abroad and study in abroad, uh.

✓ My future work plans are to continue working in a law firm like the one I've been working at, but before that I want to go abroad to study.

'Plans' is plural so use 'are'. Use infinitive 'to continue working' rather than 'still work'. Correct 'the place I'm I've been working now' to 'like the one I've been working at' and avoid duplicated words. Use 'go abroad to study' not 'study in abroad'. Suggestions: 'My future plans are to continue working in a law firm, but before that I want to study abroad.'