工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答要更自然且语法更准确。可以把时态和句子连接处理好，避免多余词汇并提高流畅性。建议先用一句话直接回答身份与职业，然后用1–2句补充职责细节，使用连接词使句子更连贯。例如注意使用完整的时间表达和复数/单数形式（e.g., "six years ago", "responsible for submitting financial statements and performing analysis").

示例: I graduated from university six years ago, and I now work full-time as a management accountant at a multinational pharmaceutical company. I'm responsible for submitting financial statements and performing financial analysis to support management decisions.

建议: 回答要更简洁且结构更清晰，避免重复和填充词（uh）。先说明公司类型和名称，再说公司的主要业务部门。注意名词单复数和冠词使用，句子不要过长。

示例: I work for an international pharmaceutical company called Mark. It is a large firm with three main business divisions: laboratory sciences, healthcare, and electronics.

建议: 回答要具体说明为什么是好地方，给出一两点具体例子（如同事关系、管理风格、公司政策或福利），并用连接词组织句子。避免含糊词汇如 "whatever" 和冗长短语。

示例: Yes, it is. The colleagues are supportive and managers provide regular feedback, and the company offers good benefits and flexible policies, which create a pleasant working environment.

建议: 回答表达不清，语法和词汇使用错误较多。应直接说喜欢与否，并说明具体原因和例子（如学到的专业技能、语言能力或职业发展）。避免不完整句和重复。

示例: Yes, I like it because I have learned many professional skills that I can apply in practice, and my daily work has also helped me improve my English communication skills.

建议: 回答要更具体并注意语法。明确写出想学的专业和计划时间表，说明为什么要出国学习以及具体想学的技术或课程。使用连接词使句子更连贯，避免模糊短语如 "open my horizon"（改为 broaden my horizons）。

示例: In the next three years I plan to pursue a master's degree abroad in finance to broaden my horizons. I hope to study advanced technical skills such as financial modelling and risk management to advance my career.

× I graduated from university about six years.

✓ I graduated from university about six years ago.

句子缺少表示过去时间的副词“ago”。在英语中谈论过去发生并以具体时间间隔表示的动作时，通常在时间段后加上“ago”。建议在“six years”后加“ago”。（时态：一般过去时）

× Currently I work full time as a management accountant in Motel International Pharmaceutical Company.

✓ Currently I work full-time as a management accountant at Motel International Pharmaceutical Company.

“full time”应写作连字符形式“full-time”作形容词，表示全职；介词与机构搭配通常用“at”而不是“in”。建议使用“full-time”和“at”。（现在时）

× I'm mainly responsible for financial statement submission and to do some analysis.

✓ I'm mainly responsible for financial statement submission and doing some analysis.

并列结构中应保持形式一致。前半为名词短语“financial statement submission”，后半应使用动名词“doing”而不是不定式“to do”。建议并列时用相同的词类。

× I work for, uh, multiple international pharmaceutical company, uh, which named Mark, uh, and it's a big company, uh, and there are three business center in my company including the lab science, healthcare and electronic and all the employee.

✓ I work for a multinational pharmaceutical company called Mark. It's a big company and there are three business centers in my company: life sciences, healthcare and electronics, and all the employees ...

问题包括：1）单复数错误（company→company）与冠词缺失，应为“a multinational company”；2）用词不当“which named”应为“called”；3）“multiple international”建议用“multinational”；4）“business center”需复数“business centers”；5）“lab science”应为“life sciences”，“electronic”应为复数“electronics”；6）“all the employee”应为“all the employees”。建议纠正冠词、单复数和固定搭配。

× Yes, of course, there are so many benefits in my company, whatever with my colleagues and the manager and the policy, I felt all of them are benefit for employee to have a good environment to stay at there.

✓ Yes, of course. There are many benefits in my company, whether from my colleagues, the managers, or the company policies. I feel they all benefit employees and provide a good working environment.

问题包括：1）“so many”在正式陈述中可改为“many”；2）“whatever with”应为“whether from”；3）“the manager”若泛指应为“the managers”或“my manager(s)”；4）“the policy”改为“company policies”；5）“I felt”与当前状况时态不符，应为“I feel”；6）“are benefit for employee”语法错误，应为“benefit employees”或“are beneficial to employees”；7）“stay at there”不正确，应为“work there”或“stay there”。建议调整冠词、复数、固定短语及动词时态。

× Yes, of course from the walk I loved many professional skills and apply them in my practical and besides that in the daily walk I have developed my language skills and to.

✓ Yes, of course. From the work I learned many professional skills and applied them in practice. Besides that, in my daily work I have developed my language skills too.

句中多处错误：1）“walk”应为“work”；2）“loved”应为“learned”或“have learned”取决时态，这里改为过去式“learned”；3）“apply them in my practical”应改为“applied them in practice”；4）并列句中保持时态一致；5）句尾“and to”不完整，应为“too”。建议注意动词选择、时态一致性和拼写。

× In next three years I would like to get the master degree in.

✓ In the next three years I would like to get a master's degree.

需要定冠词“the”在表示具体将来时间段前；“master degree”应为“master's degree”；句末缺少专业或地点信息，若不补充可省略介词“in”。建议使用“In the next three years”并改为“a master's degree”。

× It's my dream and I also would like to study abroad.

✓ It's my dream, and I would also like to study abroad.

句子可保留但词序更自然：将“also”放在“would”之后或在“would”前都可，这里把“also”放在“would”之后更符合习惯。建议调整副词位置以使句子更自然。

× I would like to open my horizon and besides that I also would like to study more technical skills on financial field.

✓ I would like to broaden my horizons, and besides that I would like to study more technical skills in the financial field.

问题包括：1）“open my horizon”习惯用法应为“broaden my horizons”；2）“technical skills on financial field”介词应为“in the financial field”；3）“horizon”通常用复数“horizons”。建议使用习惯搭配并调整介词和复数形式。

× It will help me.

✓ This will help me.

句子小幅调整使指代更清晰。使用“This”指代前述学习计划更自然。