工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Говорите более уверенно и ясно, используйте простое и прямое предложение. Избегайте лишних слов и неопределённых фраз. Также дайте немного дополнительной информации — например, что вы изучаете и на каком курсе, чтобы ответ был содержательнее.

示例: I'm a student at the moment. I study international relations and I'm in my second year. I choose my subjects and exams each semester.

建议: Упростите ответ и говорите последовательно. Назовите одно или два места и кратко опишите обязанности. Избегайте смешения времен и лишних слов; используйте связующие слова для ясности.

示例: I sometimes work in a salon and in a café. In the salon I help customers and assist the stylist, and in the café I take orders and help with serving.

建议: Давайте прямой ответ сначала (Yes/No), затем одну-две причины с конкретными примерами. Избегайте повторов и неоконченных фраз.

示例: Yes, the salon is a good place to work because it is calm and relaxed. For example, customers are usually quiet and I can focus on helping them, which makes the work enjoyable.

建议: Отвечайте ясно и обоснуйте своё мнение. Избегайте повторов и запутанных фраз. Добавьте конкретную причину, почему вам нравится это место.

示例: Yes, I really like the place where I work because my colleagues are friendly and the atmosphere is pleasant. I feel comfortable there and I learn new skills.

建议: Формулируйте план чётко и кратко: начните с темы, затем укажите причину и, при возможности, конкретный шаг (например, учёба или опыт). Избегайте пауз и повторов; используйте связующие слова для логики.

示例: In the future I plan to work in diplomacy because I'm interested in international relations. To prepare for this, I want to study foreign policy and gain experience through internships at embassies or international organisations.

× At the moment I am a student and I choose my study and exams so.

✓ At the moment I am a student, and I have chosen my course of study and my exams.

The student uses 'choose' (simple present) although they refer to a current decision that affects the present; use present perfect 'have chosen' to show a completed decision with present relevance. Also 'study' should be 'course of study' or 'program' and 'exams' should be specified; include a conjunction and comma for clarity.

× I'm work on at in the salons and the cafes and the salon I work, I wear. I'm I was rock work in his administrator and in the cafe I work an office set.

✓ I work in salons and cafes. In the salon where I work, I serve customers. I used to work as an administrator, and in the cafe I worked in the office.

The original contains mixed prepositions and confused word order. Use simple present 'I work' for habitual actions. 'At/in/on' must be chosen correctly: use 'in salons and cafes'. 'I was rock work in his administrator' is unintelligible; likely intended 'I used to work as an administrator.' Keep sentences short and logical: state current job, describe role, and mention past jobs with 'used to' or past tense.

× Uh, salon, is it a good place to work because this is a calm and peaceful place to work where you can relax and enjoy this, enjoy the process of work and when I was work, when I work.

✓ Yes, the salon is a good place to work because it is calm and peaceful. You can relax and enjoy the work process when I work there.

Use consistent present tense for general statements: 'is' and 'can'. Avoid repeating phrases. 'When I was work' is incorrect; use 'when I work there' for present habitual actions. Keep clauses clear and use 'there' to specify the location.

× Yes, I really, I really like the place where I'm worked and I can't, I can't, I can't say that this I'm sorry to work and that's it.

✓ Yes, I really like the place where I work, and I can't say that I am sorry to work there.

'I'm worked' mixes present 'am' with past participle 'worked' incorrectly; use simple present 'I work' for current situation. 'I can't say that this I'm sorry to work' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'I can't say that I am sorry to work there.' Remove unnecessary repetitions.

× In the future, I, I'm plans work in diplomacy because I'm interested in, uh, international relationships and, uh, and uh, uh, relationships between, uh, other countries. And I really, I want to work in diplomacy.

✓ In the future, I plan to work in diplomacy because I am interested in international relations between other countries. I really want to work in diplomacy.

Use 'plan to' or 'I plan' for future intentions, not 'I'm plans'. 'International relationships' is better expressed as 'international relations'. Remove fillers 'uh' and repeated words. Keep verb forms: 'I plan to work' and 'I want to work' are correct for expressing future plans.