工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "startup company" → "startup").

示例: I work as a UX/UI designer at Finop Technologies, a startup in Kathmandu. I also run a small design agency that serves remote clients.

建议: Organize into a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details, and fix repetition and grammar. Use linking words (e.g., "however", "so") to make it coherent and avoid repeating phrases like "does not need".

示例: I work in Kathmandu, Nepal, but I usually work from home because my job doesn't require me to be in the office. However, we go to the office occasionally for important meetings or team events.

建议: Reduce fillers (uh, like I said) and correct grammar. Give one clear reason and a specific detail. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition ("studio working studio").

示例: Yes, it's a great place to work because I converted a small, cozy room into my home studio. It's tidy, decorated with my favourite items, and set up for productivity.

建议: Answer directly, avoid fillers and unclear phrases. Provide one or two specific reasons with correct grammar and vocabulary. Fix collocations ("studied at the same school") and unclear words ("fam friendlier").

示例: Yes, I love my workplace because my coworkers are very friendly — several of them studied with me at the same school, college and university. Our boss is also approachable and supportive.

建议: Make a clear, structured statement of plans and give a specific reason and example. Correct grammar and phraseology (e.g., "convert my design agency to include research", "digital applications need more work"). Avoid vague phrasing.

示例: I plan to expand my design agency to include UX research services, because many digital applications in Nepal need better user-centred design. By doing research, I hope to improve app usability and contribute to the country's digital products.

× Currently I'm working as a UX UI designer here at Finop Technologies which is one of the startup company in Kathmandu, Nepal and I also have my own startup company, a design agency where we work for remote clients.

✓ Currently I'm working as a UX UI designer here at Finop Technologies, which is one of the startup companies in Kathmandu, Nepal, and I also have my own startup, a design agency where we work for remote clients.

The phrase 'one of the startup company' uses singular 'company' after 'one of the', which requires a plural noun 'companies'. Also 'startup company' repeated is redundant; streamlining to 'startup' improves clarity. Use commas to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× OK, I work in Kathmandu, Nepal and most of the time I work from my home as my work does not need to be like does not need my physical presence at office.

✓ OK, I work in Kathmandu, Nepal, and most of the time I work from home as my work does not require my physical presence in the office.

Use 'work from home' not 'from my home' in natural speech, and 'does not require' is correct instead of 'does not need to be'. Also use 'in the office' rather than 'at office'. This fixes preposition and verb choice errors. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× So we usually go to office sometimes for some important meetings or party.

✓ So we usually go to the office sometimes for important meetings or parties.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'office' and make 'party' plural when referring to events in general. Also remove redundant 'some'. This fixes pronoun/article and number issues. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× And yes, it is really a good place to work since I have made my small cozy room into my studio working studio where I I keep a lot of my favorite things and very tidy and less furnitures.

✓ And yes, it is really a good place to work since I have turned my small cozy room into a working studio where I keep a lot of my favorite things; it is very tidy and has few pieces of furniture.

Use 'a working studio' instead of 'my studio working studio'; 'turned' is a better verb. 'Very tidy and less furnitures' is incorrect: 'few pieces of furniture' or 'less furniture' is correct; 'furniture' is uncountable. Remove duplicated 'I'. This addresses article and countability errors. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Yes, I really love the place that I work. Uh this is because my coworkers are very friendly and some of them are even my schoolmates.

✓ Yes, I really love the place where I work. This is because my coworkers are very friendly and some of them are even my schoolmates.

Change 'that I work' to 'where I work' for natural relative clause with place. Also remove filler 'Uh' in corrected sentence. No verb agreement change needed; this mainly improves relative pronoun use and fluency. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× We have studied on same school, then same college, then same university.

✓ We studied at the same school, then the same college, and then the same university.

Use simple past 'studied' for completed education, and the preposition 'at' with institutions. Add 'the' before 'same' and include commas and 'and' for clear sequence. This corrects preposition and sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× And yeah our boss is also fam friendlier.

✓ And yeah, our boss is also very friendly.

'Fam friendlier' is incorrect and likely a mistaken phrase. Use 'very friendly' or 'friendly' to convey the meaning. This fixes incorrect word choice and adjective form. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× I'm planning to convert my design agency into research too because in Nepal most of the applications digital applications needs very work with.

✓ I'm planning to expand my design agency to include research as well because in Nepal most digital applications need a lot of work.

'Convert ... into research' is unnatural; 'expand ... to include research' fits intent. Use 'need' (plural) to agree with 'applications'. Remove redundant 'applications' duplication and clarify 'a lot of work'. This corrects tense/phrase and subject-verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID: 7

× I can improve with my research and contribution to the country.

✓ I can contribute to improving applications in the country through my research and contributions.

Rephrase to use 'improving' as the present participle to indicate ongoing improvement. 'Improve with my research and contribution' is awkward; make the subject clear and restructure the sentence. This fixes incorrect verb form and clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 10