工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Start with a concise topic sentence and avoid repetition. Mention your job title and the course or field you are studying to give specific, relevant information. Keep it to one or two sentences.

示例: I both work and study. I work as a customer service representative at a commercial firm, and I am currently studying for a business management degree at a local institution.

建议: Use the correct subject pronoun and a clear, direct topic sentence. Be specific about the workplace and your main responsibilities, with one linking phrase for clarity. Avoid repeating words like 'complaint' and 'problems.'

示例: I work for a commercial company as a customer service representative. I handle customer inquiries and resolve complaints by diagnosing issues and offering practical solutions.

建议: Give a clear opinion plus two specific reasons, using linking words (because/so/therefore). Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing. Limit to two or three sentences.

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work because I learn to understand different people's perspectives. Also, I improve my communication skills daily by interacting with a variety of customers.

建议: Answer directly and give two concrete benefits you gained, using linking words like 'because' or 'as a result.' Avoid hesitations and filler phrases, and keep sentences concise.

示例: Yes, I enjoy working there because I have gained valuable experience and met many new people. As a result, I have improved my interpersonal skills and better understand how different customers think.

建议: State a clear, realistic future plan in one topic sentence, then add one specific goal and how you will achieve it. Remove hesitations and irrelevant phrases. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'so that'.

示例: In the near future I plan to start my own consultancy to help people solve personal and career problems. For example, I want to offer coaching sessions so that clients can discover their strengths and develop a clear career plan.

× I do both, I work and I'm currently studying in an institution for another degree.

✓ I do both: I work, and I'm currently studying at an institution for another degree.

The original sentence has punctuation and preposition problems. Use a colon or semicolon to join related independent clauses and include the conjunction 'and'. Also use the preposition 'at' with 'institution' to indicate place; this fits standard English collocation.

× They work at a commercial organization as a customer service representative where we attend the customer's complaint and provide solutions to their problems or related complaints.

✓ I work at a commercial organization as a customer service representative, where we handle customers' complaints and provide solutions to their problems.

The sentence used 'They work' while the speaker is 'I', creating a subject mismatch (subject-verb agreement/pronoun error). Use 'I work'. Also 'attend the customer's complaint' is incorrect collocation; use 'handle customers' complaints'. Use the plural possessive 'customers'' when speaking generally.

× Yes, it is. My organization is a is a good place to work. Reason being that you get to understand people's perspective and view about things and how you relate to people with people day by day and also also understand and learn from people.

✓ Yes, it is. My organization is a good place to work because you can understand people's perspectives and views about things, learn how to relate to others day by day, and learn from them.

Repeated words ('is a is a', 'also also') and awkward phrasing exist. Use 'perspectives and views' (plural) to match 'people'. Replace 'Reason being that' with 'because' to form a complete sentence. 'Relate to people with people' is incorrect; use 'relate to others'.

× Yes I do. I love the place I work. Reason being that I've had more experience and I've what am I thinking met new people. I've gotten more knowledge and more ideas about how to relate with people and how people think and people's level of understanding.

✓ Yes, I do. I love the place I work because I've gained a lot of experience and met many new people. I've gained knowledge and ideas about how to relate to people, how they think, and their different levels of understanding.

'Reason being that' creates a sentence fragment; replace with 'because' for clarity. Remove 'what am I thinking' which is an irrelevant spoken filler. Use 'met many new people' (simple past) and 'gained' consistently rather than mixing 'gotten' in informal contexts. Use 'relate to people' not 'relate with people'.

× So umm, in the nearest future I wouldn't mind having my own place where I tend to prefer solutions, people's problem, and then help people to know their purpose and their plan and then discover their talent as well.

✓ In the near future, I wouldn't mind having my own place where I offer solutions to people's problems and help them discover their purpose, plans, and talents.

Use 'in the near future' (standard phrase) rather than 'nearest'. 'Tend to prefer solutions' is unclear; use 'offer solutions'. 'People's problem' should be plural 'people's problems'. Simplify repetition 'help people to know their purpose and their plan and then discover their talent' to 'help them discover their purpose, plans, and talents' for clarity and parallel structure.

× You can go back now.

✓ You may go back now.

'You can go back now' is not ungrammatical but in this testing context 'You may go back now' is more appropriate and polite to indicate permission. Change of modal 'may' better expresses permission rather than ability.