工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答要更直接并按逻辑组织：先给出简短明确的主题句（我是学生/我曾工作但现在准备去留学），然后用一两句补充背景细节。句子要完整，避免口头停顿和重复。可以把“resigned”与“go abroad to study”合并成一句更自然的表达。

示例: I used to work as a photographer, but I resigned last year because I plan to go abroad to continue my studies. I’m currently preparing to enroll in a photography course overseas.

建议: 回答需完整流畅并直接回应时态（过去或现在）。先说工作地点和岗位，然后简要说明工作职责，避免停顿和不完整句子。用连接词（for, where, and）使句子连贯。

示例: I worked at an art studio in northern Beijing for two years where I assisted clients and organized their photo collections. I was responsible for editing and categorizing images for different projects.

建议: 回答要自然并解释原因。先给出明确立场，然后用一至两句具体说明其优点，避免语法错误和不连贯短句。不要出现模糊表达例如“helped me energy”。可以说明具体如何帮助你的职业发展。

示例: Yes, it was a great place to work because many experienced photographers mentored me and gave constructive feedback. Their guidance helped me improve my technical skills and creative vision.

建议: 此题重复前题内容应避免完全复述。先明确是否愿意继续工作，然后补充新的具体原因或例子（如团队氛围、成长机会）。修正语法错误（例如“helped me understand the photographer”不明确）。

示例: Yes, I would like to work there again because the team is supportive and I learned a lot from senior photographers. For example, my colleagues taught me studio lighting techniques that improved my portrait work.

建议: 回答清晰且有目标，需改进表达准确性和用词（例如“stationery brand about film”和“aesthetically placing”不明确）。先给出总体计划，再具体说明动机和目标客户，并用连接词使句子流畅。

示例: In the future I plan to start my own company and launch a stationery brand inspired by analog film. I want to design unique, functional and visually appealing products for students, such as notebooks and photo accessories that combine vintage style with modern usability.

× Actually, I resigned last year and because I decided to go abroad to study further and I used to be a photographer.

✓ Actually, I resigned last year because I decided to go abroad to study further, and I used to be a photographer.

句子中有多余的连词和标点问题，影响时态表达与句子流畅。该句使用了过去时（resigned, decided, used to），应把原因状语连成一个清晰的从句：用“because”引出原因，并用逗号连接并列分句。建议把“and because”合并为“because”，并在“further”和“and”之间加逗号以提高可读性。

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where did you work?

考官问的是过去的工作经历（学生已说“resigned last year”），因此应使用一般过去时。原句使用现在时与已提供的背景时态不一致。将助动词改为过去时“did”并将动词用原形“work”。（对应问题类型编号可归入“Sentence structure errors”或“Past tense issue”。）

× I worked at an art studio in northern Beijing for two years where I helped. MMM. Clients with. Classified those photos and.

✓ I worked at an art studio in northern Beijing for two years, where I helped clients and classified their photos.

原句被断断续续的停顿打断，导致句子成分不完整且结构混乱。应把分散的片段合并为完整的定语从句：使用“where I helped clients and classified their photos”。注意“classified those photos”改为“classified their photos”更符合上下文（指客户的照片）。

× Yes, it is a good place to work because there are many. Experienced people who helped me improve my photography skills and helped me energy.

✓ Yes, it was a good place to work because there were many experienced people who helped me improve my photography skills and gave me energy.

时态应与工作经历一致使用过去时（worked -> was/were）。句中“many. Experienced”被错误分句，应合并为“many experienced people”。“helped me energy”是不正确的搭配，应改为“gave me energy”或“motivated me”。因此调整为过去时并修正动词搭配。

× Yes, I'd like to work at this place because there are many experienced photographers who helped me improve my photography skills. Also, they, my colleagues, helped me understand the photographer.

✓ Yes, I'd like to work at this place because there are many experienced photographers who helped me improve my photography skills. Also, my colleagues helped me understand photography.

句末“understand the photographer”搭配不当，应为“understand photography”（理解摄影这门技术/艺术）。此外，“they, my colleagues,” 的插入语可以简化为“my colleagues”。保持时态和主谓一致，修正名词搭配错误。

× In the future, I plan to start my own company and launch a stationery brand about film because I want to create unique, functional and aesthetically placing designs for students.

✓ In the future, I plan to start my own company and launch a stationery brand about film because I want to create unique, functional and aesthetically pleasing designs for students.

原句“aesthetically placing”不是正确的词组，应该为“aesthetically pleasing”（美观的）。此外“stationery brand about film”可接受但若需更地道可改为“a stationery brand inspired by film”或“a stationery brand focused on film”。建议用正确的形容词搭配并保持句子结构清晰。