家乡— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Apni uttor ta bhalo kore organize korun. Prothome spostho kore bolun apnar hometown kothay, tarpor tar kichu biseshoto bolun. English e sentence gulo spostho o shothik bhabe gathan korun, jate shuney bujhte sohoj hoy.

示例: My hometown is Jaipur, which is located near the Magnum River. It is a beautiful city with lovely riverside views. I really like the natural beauty and peaceful environment there.

建议: Apnar uttor e spostho topic sentence thakbe, tarpor kichu specific details deben. English e shothik word babohar korun, ar sentence gulo logical vabe jorun. Apnar basha theke English e bhalo vocabulary use korun.

示例: I like the natural environment and the busy business areas in my hometown. The roads are well maintained and there are many impressive buildings that make the city lively.

建议: Apni proshner uttor spostho o shothik bhabe din. English sentence gulo shothik grammar o structure e hote hobe. Apni koto din apnar hometown e thaken ba thaksen, seta spostho kore bolun.

示例: I have lived in my hometown for most of my life. However, I have not been living there recently. I visited my hometown two years ago during my vacation.

建议: Apnar uttor e spostho opinion din, tarpor karon o kichu details din. English e sentence gulo shothik structure e rakhun, ar linking words babohar korun jate uttor ta logical hoy.

示例: In my opinion, my hometown is not the best place for young people. It can be difficult to find good opportunities, and the food options near the riverside are not very good.

× Uh, my hotel is Jaipur is located CWDB show.

✓ My hometown Jaipur is located near CWDB show.

The original sentence has a confusing structure and unclear meaning. The phrase 'my hotel is Jaipur' is incorrect; it should be 'my hometown Jaipur'. Also, 'located CWDB show' lacks a preposition. Correct sentence structure and preposition use improve clarity.

× Uh, my who's wrong?

✓ Uh, my hometown is beautiful.

The phrase 'my who's wrong?' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. It seems the student intended to say something about their hometown. Replacing it with a clear subject and verb corrects the sentence.

× Uh, invariants are beautiful and of beautiful and Riverside view.

✓ The environment is beautiful and has a riverside view.

The original sentence is confusing and contains incorrect word usage ('invariants'). Correcting the subject and adding proper description clarifies the meaning.

× Uh, also also like the nature and beauty.

✓ I also like the nature and beauty.

The sentence incorrectly repeats 'also' and lacks a subject. Adding the subject 'I' and removing the duplicate 'also' corrects the sentence.

× I like my hotel and fiscal nature and business.

✓ I like my hometown's natural beauty and business.

The phrase 'fiscal nature and business' is unclear and likely incorrect. Replacing 'hotel' with 'hometown' and clarifying 'natural beauty' improves meaning.

× Also I like the roads because of the news, like so shy.

✓ Also, I like the roads because they are new and clean.

The phrase 'because of the news, like so shy' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or mishearing. Correcting to 'new and clean' makes sense in context.

× And also I like, uh, buildings. There are so many buildings.

✓ I also like the buildings. There are many buildings.

The original sentence is mostly correct but 'so many buildings' can be simplified to 'many buildings' for better formality.

× MMM promoted existence because I gone and city will kill us and I'm not playing my hometown recently.

✓ I have lived in my hometown for a long time, but I have not been there recently.

The original sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Rewriting it with proper tense and structure clarifies the meaning.

× I go last week, two years in my vacation.

✓ I went there last week during my two-year vacation.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the time reference 'last week'. Also, 'two years in my vacation' is unclear; corrected to 'during my two-year vacation'.

× It was very debated, very difficult if I were to write and I in my opinion, uh, when people watch or go there because City side and food for river side is so bad.

✓ It is very dangerous and difficult to live there. In my opinion, when people visit, the city side and riverside food are very bad.

The original sentence misuses modal verbs and has unclear phrases. Correcting modal verb usage and clarifying the meaning improves the sentence.