家乡— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Apni answer e kichu grammar error ache, ar kichu sentence onek boro, jar fole answer ta natural lage na. Apni chesta korun sentence gulo ke chhoto r clear korte, ar 'crowded' er jaygay 'crowded places' ba 'crowds' use korun. E chara, linking words use korle answer ta aro fluent hobe.

示例: My hometown is Naranjo, a large city located near the Shitaloka River. It has many historical places, which I enjoy visiting in my free time. However, the city is often crowded, especially in popular areas.

建议: Apnar answer e kichu grammar mistake ache, jemon 'clean city' er jaygay 'a clean city' bola uchit. Apni linking words use korte paren, jate answer ta aro logical lage. Ar 'places for seating up' er bodole 'places to sit' bola bhalo hobe.

示例: I like that my hometown is a very clean and green city. Moreover, there are many parks and places to sit, which are perfect for morning walks. Additionally, young people have many job opportunities here.

建议: Apnar answer e tense use e problem ache, ar kichu sentence onek repetitive. Apni chesta korun present perfect tense use korte, ar sentence gulo ke concise r clear korte. 'I left the city very much' er mane clear na, eta avoid korun.

示例: I have lived in my hometown for over 21 years since it is my birthplace. It is a very popular city in my country, and I love living there.

建议: Apnar answer e kichu vocabulary error ache, jemon 'meals' er jaygay 'mills' hote pare. 'People get easily fight their job' er mane clear na, eta avoid korun. Apni chesta korun sentence gulo ke simple ar clear korte, ar linking words use korun.

示例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because there are many job opportunities. For example, there are lots of factories and industries where young people can easily find work.

× My hometown is Naranjo, it is a very big city and it is situated in nearby Shitaloka River.

✓ My hometown is Naranjo, it is a very big city and it is situated near the Shitaloka River.

The preposition 'in nearby' is incorrect here. The correct preposition to indicate proximity is 'near' or 'nearby' without 'in'. Also, 'the' is needed before 'Shitaloka River' because river names usually take the definite article.

× There are a lot of historical places in my hometown and in my free time I love to visit this historical places.

✓ There are a lot of historical places in my hometown and in my free time I love to visit these historical places.

The demonstrative pronoun 'this' is singular, but 'places' is plural. The correct plural form is 'these' to match the plural noun.

× There are so many crowded in my hometown.

✓ It is very crowded in my hometown.

'Crowded' is an adjective describing a state, not a noun. 'There are so many crowded' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'It is very crowded' to describe the condition.

× My hometown is very clean city and very green.

✓ My hometown is a very clean city and very green.

The noun 'city' requires an article 'a' before it when singular and countable. Missing the article causes grammatical error.

× There are a lot of parks and places for seating up and for morning walk.

✓ There are a lot of parks and places for sitting and for morning walks.

The phrase 'seating up' is incorrect; the correct gerund form is 'sitting'. Also, 'morning walk' should be pluralized to 'morning walks' to indicate habitual activity.

× There are lot of opportunities for young people for finding their jobs.

✓ There are lots of opportunities for young people to find their jobs.

The phrase 'There are lot of' is incorrect; it should be 'There are lots of' or 'There is a lot of'. Also, 'for finding' is better expressed as 'to find' in this context.

× Over 21 years I lived here because it is my birthplace.

✓ I have lived here for over 21 years because it is my birthplace.

The present perfect tense 'have lived' is appropriate to express an action continuing up to the present. Also, 'for' is needed to indicate duration.

× Since my birth, I lived there and I left the city very much.

✓ Since my birth, I have lived there and I have not left the city much.

'Since' requires present perfect tense 'have lived'. Also, 'I left the city very much' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'I have not left the city much'.

× There are so many opportunities for them.

✓ There are many opportunities for them.

'So many' is informal and can be replaced with 'many' for a more neutral tone.

× There are lots of factories, meals and industries are open for young people and people get easily fight their job.

✓ There are lots of factories, mills, and industries open for young people, and people can easily find their jobs.

'Meals' is incorrect; the correct word is 'mills'. Also, 'people get easily fight their job' is incorrect; it should be 'people can easily find their jobs'. The modal verb 'can' is needed, and 'find' is the correct verb.