智力游戏— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “sharing their time feel memorable”). Use linking words like “because” or “and” to connect ideas. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes. I often did puzzles with my mother when I was a child because I was too impatient to complete them alone. We usually worked on jigsaw puzzles in the evenings, which felt memorable and helped me concentrate. I also solved word puzzles to improve my vocabulary.

建议: Answer directly with present habits first, then past habits if necessary. Use correct tense and clearer linking phrases (e.g., “when I was a child,” “nowadays I rarely”). Avoid repetitive and confusing sentences. Give one clear reason for doing puzzles and one specific example of timing.

示例: I rarely do puzzles now, but when I was a child I did them mainly when I felt bored. For example, I would do word puzzles to learn new vocabulary and jigsaw puzzles over several evenings because they take a long time to finish.

建议: Clarify which type you prefer and state why, using correct vocabulary. Avoid unclear words (e.g., “rapazo”) and fragmented sentences. Use linking words like “because” and “however.” Limit to 2–3 sentences: preference and reason, then difficulty comparison.

示例: I prefer word puzzles because they help me learn vocabulary and improve my English. Number puzzles are more difficult for me — I tried to learn them but found them confusing and time-consuming.

建议: Give a direct opinion sentence, then two specific benefits with clear language. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid repetition of the same idea. Use linking words like “for example” and “as a result.”

示例: Yes — I think puzzles are very good for older people. For example, my mother completes the number puzzle in the newspaper every morning; it helps sharpen her thinking and fills her free time, keeping her mentally active.

× Yes, when I was a kid, I especially enjoyed doing a jigsaw puzzle with my mother because I was quite impatient and I couldn't finish it on my own.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I especially enjoyed doing jigsaw puzzles with my mother because I was quite impatient and couldn't finish them on my own.

Plural/singular consistency and past tense: 'a jigsaw puzzle' is fine, but later 'it' refers ambiguously; use plural 'jigsaw puzzles' and 'them' to match. Also omit redundant 'I' before 'couldn't' for natural past narration. Suggestion: keep items consistent in number and maintain past tense throughout.

× So we will work on them in the evening and sharing their time feel memorable and help me to concentrate.

✓ So we would work on them in the evenings; sharing that time felt memorable and helped me concentrate.

Tense and sentence structure: the context is past, so 'will' should be 'would' and 'sharing' requires a subject and past verb 'felt'; 'help' becomes 'helped'. Also use 'in the evenings' for habitual past. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use clear subjects for -ing clauses.

× Besides this, I also enjoy playing the work puzzle when I was a kid as a way to improve my vocabulary.

✓ Besides that, I also enjoyed doing word puzzles when I was a kid as a way to improve my vocabulary.

Tense mismatch: sentence mixes present 'enjoy' with past time phrase 'when I was a kid'; change to past 'enjoyed'. Word choice: 'work puzzle' should be 'word puzzles'. Suggestion: match verb tense to time markers and check word choice.

× I don't really do puzzle right now so but when I was a kid I usually do puzzle when I felt bored.

✓ I don't really do puzzles right now, but when I was a kid I usually did puzzles when I felt bored.

Tense and number: 'do puzzle' should be 'do puzzles' (plural) and past habit 'usually did' matches 'when I was a kid'; remove extra 'so'. Suggestion: use plural for countable nouns and match habitual past with 'used to' or 'usually did'.

× So whenever I feel bored I would like to do the work the word puzzle to 1st improve my vocabulary and also learn some English.

✓ So whenever I felt bored, I liked to do word puzzles to firstly improve my vocabulary and also learn some English.

Tense inconsistency and wording: 'would like to' is present/future preference; for past habit use 'liked to'. Remove duplicated words 'the work the word'. Use 'firstly' or 'to improve' and keep past tense 'felt'. Suggestion: simplify phrase and keep past tense for childhood habits.

× Or the jigsaw puzzle because it takes a long time to finish it if I finish it at once and several evening if I separate it.

✓ Or the jigsaw puzzle, because it took a long time to finish if I tried to do it all at once, so I would spread it over several evenings.

Tense and clarity: change 'takes' to past 'took' and avoid repeating 'finish it'. 'Several evening' should be plural 'evenings'. Use 'spread it over' for clearer meaning. Suggestion: break complex ideas into clearer clauses and match tense.

× Personally, I really like doing rapazo because I have no idea how to do the number puzzle.

✓ Personally, I really like doing word puzzles because I have no idea how to solve number puzzles.

Word choice and verb: 'rapazo' appears to be a mistake for 'word puzzle'. Use 'solve' with puzzles. Also change 'do the number puzzle' to 'solve number puzzles' for natural expression. Suggestion: use appropriate verbs for activities (solve a puzzle).

× I've tried to learn but I didn't.

✓ I've tried to learn, but I didn't succeed.

Incomplete sentence: 'I didn't' is vague; add 'succeed' to complete the idea. Tense is acceptable ('I've tried') but pairing with past 'didn't succeed' clarifies result. Suggestion: complete verbs to convey outcomes.

× I didn't success and it took me a lot of time and eventually now I'm not really good at our number puzzle.

✓ I wasn't successful and it took me a lot of time; eventually I wasn't good at number puzzles.

Incorrect verb form: 'success' is a noun; use adjective 'successful' or verb 'succeed'. 'Our number puzzle' likely wrong possessive; use 'number puzzles'. Maintain past tense consistency; avoid 'now' with past narrative. Suggestion: use correct adjective/verb forms and consistent tense.

× For the word puzzle, I would think it's more interesting because it was really a good way to learn vocabulary and improve English.

✓ For word puzzles, I think they are more interesting because they were a good way to learn vocabulary and improve my English.

Tense and agreement: mix of conditional 'would think' and past 'was'. Use present 'I think' if giving an opinion now, and adjust pronouns and tense: 'they were' (past habit) or 'they are' if general. Also 'improve English' needs possessive 'my English'. Suggestion: keep opinion tense consistent and use possessives.

× In my opinion, definitely yes.

✓ In my opinion, definitely yes.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; keeping it as is. No change needed. Suggestion: optional expansion to 'I definitely think so.'

× My mother enjoy doing number puzzle very much.

✓ My mother enjoys doing number puzzles very much.

Subject-verb agreement and plural: 'mother' (singular) needs 'enjoys'. 'Number puzzle' should be plural 'number puzzles'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject and use plural for habitual activities.

× So every morning she will her favorite thing to do is open the newspaper and there is a sessions for the number puzzle and then she will complete it every morning.

✓ Every morning her favorite thing to do is open the newspaper, where there is a section for number puzzles, and she completes it every morning.

Mixed future 'will' and present; simplify to present habitual 'is' and 'completes'. 'Sessions' should be 'section' and remove redundant 'will'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and correct noun choice.

× So I think it's nice because it can sharpen their thinking and also fill up their leisure time and also change their thinking.

✓ So I think it's nice because it can sharpen their thinking, fill their leisure time, and change how they think.

Repetition and parallelism: avoid repeating 'also' and 'thinking'; use parallel verbs 'sharpen, fill, change' and rephrase 'change their thinking' to 'change how they think' for clarity. Suggestion: use parallel structure and avoid repetition.