地理— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答缺乏连贯性和语法准确性，表达不自然且信息不完整。建议使用完整句子，直接回答问题，并补充具体细节，使表达更自然流畅。

示例: I didn't like geography when I was in middle school because I found it difficult. For example, I once scored only 10 out of 100 on a geography test, which was very disappointing.

建议: 回答内容较为混乱，缺少逻辑连接词，表达不够清晰。建议使用连贯的句子，明确表达观点，并用具体例子支持观点。

示例: I think geography is useful because it teaches us directions like north, south, east, and west. However, nowadays I rely more on my smartphone and apps like Google Maps to find my way.

建议: 回答不够清晰，语法错误较多，信息表达混乱。建议简洁明了地回答问题，使用正确语法，并提供具体细节。

示例: Yes, I have learned geography. For example, I took an exam where I had to identify different types of landforms in China. However, I found some topics, like the moon, confusing and hard to understand.

建议: 回答过于口语化且重复，表达不够正式。建议用简洁且有逻辑的句子表达观点，避免重复和夸张。

示例: No, I don't want to be a geography teacher because I am not good at the subject. I believe I wouldn't be able to help my students learn effectively.

建议: 回答中断且表达不流畅，缺少连贯性。建议直接回答问题，并用完整句子说明原因，保持表达自然。

示例: I don't think I will learn more about the geography of other countries because I am currently studying marketing at Fresno Business School, which is my main focus and interest.

× I hate geography when I was young in middle school I get 10 points off 100 in geography test.

✓ I hated geography when I was young in middle school. I got 10 points out of 100 in the geography test.

这里描述的是过去的事情，动词时态应该用过去式。hate 应该改为 hated，get 应该改为 got。

× Acquired a lot that day.

✓ I acquired a lot of knowledge that day.

句子缺少主语和完整结构，导致句子不完整。需要补充主语和宾语，使句子完整。

× I know it's useful, but every time I say it is that geography never worked for me 'cause for example in geography it teaches you like NSWE.

✓ I know it's useful, but every time I say that geography never worked for me because, for example, in geography it teaches you directions like N, S, W, E.

这里的连接词使用不当，'but every time I say it is that'不通顺，应改为'but every time I say that'。另外，'cause'应改为'because'，使表达更正式。

× But every time what I have, I have my cell phone, I just open cell phone, then open mine, then open my app, I will know oh this one is so go this way.

✓ But every time I have my cell phone, I just open it, then open my app, and I will know, oh, this one goes this way.

句子中多余和错误的介词使用导致表达混乱，应简化并正确使用代词和动词。

× I get 20 point and I remember that that that examination was about trying to identify different type of the land.

✓ I got 20 points and I remember that examination was about trying to identify different types of land.

point 应为复数 points，type 应为 types，land 前不需要定冠词 the。

× In China there are a lot of land then the other.

✓ In China there is a lot of land compared to others.

land 是不可数名词，不用复数形式，且定冠词 the 使用错误，应改为 others 表示其他地方。

× Then the other thing was to decide the the moon.

✓ Then the other thing was to decide about the moon.

句子中重复使用了定冠词 the，且表达不清楚，应加介词 about 使句子完整。

× If I be a teacher of geography, it must mean that I want to destroy other students life.

✓ If I were a geography teacher, it would mean that I want to destroy other students' lives.

虚拟语气中，be 动词应使用 were，且 students life 应为 students' lives，表示复数所有格。

× every of my students will get maybe 10 point.

✓ every one of my students will get maybe 10 points.

every 后面应加 one，point 应为复数 points。

× I perform learning marketing compared to something I don't have interest and I'm not good at it.

✓ I focus on learning marketing compared to something I have no interest in and I'm not good at.

perform learning 不合适，应改为 focus on learning；have interest 应为 have interest in。