花— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达重复，句子结构不够清晰。建议简化句子，避免重复，并注意时态和语法的正确使用。

示例: Yes, I love flowers very much because I grew up in a home filled with fresh flowers. I enjoy their beautiful colors and pleasant fragrance.

建议: 回答中表达不够流畅，有重复和语法错误。建议使用连贯的句子，避免重复，并且注意时态和词汇的准确使用。

示例: Yes, my mother loves flowers a lot. On my last trip to Yunnan, which is famous for its roses, I bought some flowers and sent them to her as a gift.

建议: 回答中有较多语法错误和表达混乱，句子不连贯。建议简化表达，使用正确的语法结构，并且逻辑清晰地表达观点。

示例: There are no flowers in my dormitory because my roommates and I don't have time to take care of them. However, I miss the flowers at my home and might try to have some in the dormitory in the future.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达重复，句子结构不够清晰。建议简化句子，避免重复，并注意词汇的准确使用。

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of beautiful flowers near my dormitory because of their lovely colors and pleasant fragrance.

建议: 回答中有较多语法错误和表达不连贯，重复词汇较多。建议注意语法和句子连贯性，避免重复，并用更准确的词汇表达观点。

示例: Yes, in Chinese culture, people often send flowers as gifts because each flower has a unique meaning and symbolizes beautiful things.

× That's because since I was young, my parents were always kept some fresh flowers at home.

✓ That's because since I was young, my parents always kept some fresh flowers at home.

这里使用了过去时态，表示过去的习惯动作，动词 kept 不需要加 were，原句中 were kept 结构错误，应改为 always kept。

× So I just grew up with I was just growing up in the environment surrounded by a variety of flowers and I love the fragrance and the colors of the flowers.

✓ So I just grew up in an environment surrounded by a variety of flowers, and I love the fragrance and the colors of the flowers.

原句中出现了重复和结构混乱，'I was just growing up' 与前半句重复且语法不通顺，应简化为 'I just grew up in an environment...'。

× Yes, I know, my mother is just a person who likes flowers very much.

✓ Yes, I know. My mother is a person who likes flowers very much.

原句中逗号连接两个独立句子，应该用句号分开，且 'just' 在此处多余，影响表达清晰。

× I still remember that the last trip I went to Yunnan's province of community, which is famous for flowers, especially rose rose roses.

✓ I still remember that on my last trip to Yunnan province, which is famous for flowers, especially roses.

原句中 'I went to Yunnan's province of community' 结构不正确，应改为 'my last trip to Yunnan province'，且 'rose rose roses' 重复，应简化为 'roses'。

× My mother just told me to bring some, brought some to bring some flowers to her.

✓ My mother just told me to bring some flowers to her.

原句中 'brought some to bring some' 重复且语法错误，应简化为 'told me to bring some flowers to her'。

× So I just bought some flowers and sent to her as a gift.

✓ So I just bought some flowers and sent them to her as a gift.

动词 send 后需要宾语，且送给某人时应使用介词 to，缺少宾语 'them'。

× Well, there is no flowers in your play in the dormitory that I lived, because all my roommates and me do not like to spend too much time on taking care of these flowers.

✓ Well, there are no flowers in the dormitory where I live, because all my roommates and I do not like to spend too much time taking care of flowers.

'there is no flowers' 主谓不一致，应为 'there are no flowers'；'your play' 可能是误说，应改为 'the dormitory where I live'；'all my roommates and me' 主格应为 'all my roommates and I'；'on taking care' 中介词 on 多余，应直接用 'spend time taking care'。

× But I had to mate I I missed my house is full of the surrounded by the flowers very much so maybe in the future I will try to find some flowers at the dormitory.

✓ But I miss my house, which is surrounded by flowers, very much. So maybe in the future I will try to find some flowers for the dormitory.

原句语序混乱，'had to mate I I' 无意义，应改为 'I miss my house'；'is full of the surrounded by the flowers' 结构错误，应改为 'which is surrounded by flowers'；最后一句中 'at the dormitory' 应改为 'for the dormitory'。

× Yes, I am passionate with taking photos of these beautiful flowers.

✓ Yes, I am passionate about taking photos of these beautiful flowers.

形容词 passionate 后应接介词 about，而非 with。

× For example, there are some great flowers with a with a pretty colors and passionate and wonderful fragrance under my dormitories and I just take photos of it.

✓ For example, there are some great flowers with pretty colors and wonderful fragrance near my dormitory, and I just take photos of them.

'a with a pretty colors' 结构错误，应为 'pretty colors'；'passionate' 用于描述花的香味不合适，应去掉；'under my dormitories' 应改为 'near my dormitory'；'photos of it' 应为复数 'photos of them'。

× Yes, I think the people in Chinese always will always choose to send send the flowers as gifts to others.

✓ Yes, I think the people in China will always choose to send flowers as gifts to others.

'in Chinese' 应为 'in China'；'always will always' 重复，应去掉一个；'send send' 重复，应去掉一个；'the flowers' 不需要定冠词，应为 'send flowers'。

× That's because in Chinese culture, it's a flower. It means many beautiful things. And they are. And each flowers has its unique meanings.

✓ That's because in Chinese culture, flowers mean many beautiful things, and each flower has its unique meaning.

'it's a flower' 不合适，应直接说 'flowers'；'they are' 句子不完整，应删除；'each flowers' 主谓不一致，应为 'each flower'；'meanings' 应为单数 'meaning'。

× So people choose to buy different flowers to different peoples.

✓ So people choose to buy different flowers for different people.

'to different peoples' 用法错误，应为 'for different people'。