花— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally good but try to avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'get up ****'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'very', use synonyms or restructure sentences for natural flow.

示例: Yes, I love flowers because they look beautiful and refreshing. Whenever I feel stressed from work, I usually go to the garden to see them, which helps improve my mood and makes my day better.

建议: Try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid repetition. For example, instead of repeating 'planted' and 'garden', use varied verbs and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

示例: My whole family loves flowers. We have a lovely garden at home where we grow various plants. My father especially enjoys gardening; he takes care of the flowers by planting and watering them regularly.

建议: Avoid repeating 'so' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about the flowers or nurseries to enrich your answer.

示例: I live in the countryside where there are many gardens and nurseries. This area is known as a hub for flowers, so I often enjoy seeing them when I go to work or return home.

建议: Work on grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words and avoid repetition of 'so' and 'love'. Also, be more specific about why you take photos and how you share them.

示例: I enjoy taking photographs of flowers because they look beautiful and smell wonderful. I usually get close to capture their details and share these photos with my friends on social media.

建议: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples of occasions when flowers are sent. Avoid vague phrases like 'Saints coming near'.

示例: In my country, it is traditional to send flowers during special occasions, especially festivals. For example, during festivals, people decorate their homes with flowers and often send them as gifts between family members, such as brothers and sisters.

× Whenever I get up **** or whenever I am too much stressed out from my work, I typically go to the garden to see the flowers.

✓ Whenever I get up early or whenever I am too stressed out from my work, I typically go to the garden to see the flowers.

The phrase 'too much stressed out' is incorrect because 'stressed' is an adjective here and should not be modified by 'too much'. Instead, 'too stressed out' is the correct form. Also, '****' seems to be a placeholder and should be replaced with a proper word like 'early'.

× My family entirely love flowers.

✓ My family entirely loves flowers.

The word 'family' is a collective noun and is treated as singular in American English, so the verb should be 'loves' instead of 'love'.

× He planted them, he basically garden them and he also curated these flowers by planting them as well as watering them.

✓ He planted them, he basically gardens them and he also takes care of these flowers by planting them as well as watering them.

The verb 'garden' is incorrectly used as a verb here; the correct form is 'gardens' (third person singular present). Also, 'curated' is not appropriate in this context; 'takes care of' or 'tends' is better to describe maintaining flowers.

× Typically it is in a spot where you can see multiple nurseries as well.

✓ Typically, it is a spot where you can see multiple nurseries as well.

The phrase 'it is in a spot' is awkward and incorrect. The correct structure is 'it is a spot' to indicate a place. Also, a comma after 'Typically' improves readability.

× So I enjoy taking photographs of flower.

✓ So I enjoy taking photographs of flowers.

The noun 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because photographs are taken of multiple flowers, not just one.

× I love sharing them in social medias to my friends so I love just clicking their photos.

✓ I love sharing them on social media with my friends, so I just love clicking their photos.

The phrase 'in social medias' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'on social media' (uncountable noun). Also, 'to my friends' should be 'with my friends' to indicate sharing.

× So in our country it is a tradition to send the flowers especially if there is occasion maybe the festival season such as the Saints coming near.

✓ So in our country, it is a tradition to send flowers especially if there is an occasion, maybe the festival season such as the Saints coming near.

The phrase 'send the flowers' is incorrect; 'send flowers' is correct because 'flowers' is general here. Also, 'if there is occasion' needs an article 'an occasion'. Commas improve clarity.

× So we use a lot of flowers to decorate our homes as well as the flower is also sent in the their festival from brothers to sisters and so on.

✓ So we use a lot of flowers to decorate our homes, and flowers are also sent during their festivals from brothers to sisters and so on.

The phrase 'the flower is also sent in the their festival' is incorrect. It should be 'flowers are also sent during their festivals'. 'Their' is the correct possessive pronoun, and plural 'flowers' matches the context.