花— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use correct singular/plural forms and more natural expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence clarity. For example, say 'I love flowers because they have delicate colours and a light fragrance. When I place them on the table, they brighten up my room and make me feel cheerful and relaxed.'

示例: I love flowers because they have delicate colours and a light fragrance. When I place them on the table, they brighten up my room and make me feel cheerful and relaxed.

建议: Clarify who you are talking about and use correct pronouns. Also, complete your sentences and use linking words for coherence. For example, 'Yes, my friend often buys flowers from the local store to decorate her home because she believes flowers create a welcoming atmosphere.'

示例: Yes, my friend often buys flowers from the local store to decorate her home because she believes flowers create a welcoming atmosphere.

建议: Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid confusion by simplifying your sentences. For example, 'Yes, there are many flowers where I live. Many people grow beautiful flowers in their front and backyards, so residents and visitors can enjoy the colourful plants.'

示例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. Many people grow beautiful flowers in their front and backyards, so residents and visitors can enjoy the colourful plants.

建议: Use natural expressions and correct grammar. For example, 'Yes, I often take photos of flowers when they are blossoming because it helps me capture precious moments. I also like to share these beautiful pictures with others.'

示例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers when they are blossoming because it helps me capture precious moments. I also like to share these beautiful pictures with others.

建议: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, 'Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others, especially during festivals, weddings, or birthdays, because they believe flowers express love and good wishes.'

示例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others, especially during festivals, weddings, or birthdays, because they believe flowers express love and good wishes.

× Yes, I love flower.

✓ Yes, I love flowers.

The noun 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because the student is talking about flowers in general, which is a plural concept.

× They have light colors and light smelling.

✓ They have light colours and a light smell.

'Light' is an adjective and should modify 'colours' and 'smell' correctly. 'Smelling' is a verb form and incorrect here; 'smell' as a noun is appropriate. Also, 'colours' is the Australian English spelling.

× When I paste on the table it can bite my room and make me feel cheerful and relax.

✓ When I place them on the table, they can brighten my room and make me feel cheerful and relaxed.

The verb 'paste' is incorrect; 'place' is appropriate. 'Bite my room' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'brighten my room'. 'Relax' should be 'relaxed' to match the adjective form describing the feeling.

× Yes, my phone call.

✓ Yes, my friend.

'Phone call' is not a person; the student likely meant 'friend' or 'someone I call'. Using 'phone call' as a pronoun is incorrect.

× You often buy flowers from the local store to decorate her home because she believe flowers can.

✓ She often buys flowers from the local store to decorate her home because she believes flowers can.

The subject should be 'she' to match the pronouns 'her' and 'she'. 'You' is incorrect here. Also, 'believe' should be 'believes' for third person singular.

× Impressed the welcoming atmosphere.

✓ They impress the welcoming atmosphere.

The sentence fragment lacks a subject and verb. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased to 'because she believes flowers can impress the welcoming atmosphere'.

× Yes, they have a lot of flowers.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of flowers.

'They have' is incorrect because 'they' refers to people or things previously mentioned. The correct expression to indicate existence is 'there are'.

× Where I live, many people paint their beautiful flowers in front of in their backyard.

✓ Where I live, many people plant their beautiful flowers in their front or backyard.

'Paint' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'plant' for flowers. 'In front of in their backyard' is confusing; it should be 'in their front or backyard'.

× So when people resident people walk through their house, they would see the beautiful plants.

✓ So when residents walk past their houses, they can see the beautiful plants.

'People resident people' is redundant and incorrect. 'Walk through their house' is incorrect; people walk past houses. 'Would see' is better as 'can see' for general truth.

× Yes, I would take picture photos of flowers in my life when the flowers blossoming.

✓ Yes, I would take pictures of flowers in my life when the flowers are blossoming.

'Picture photos' is redundant; 'pictures' is sufficient. 'Flowers' is plural, so 'are blossoming' is needed for correct verb agreement.

× Does make me capture the treasure moment in my life.

✓ It helps me capture the treasured moments in my life.

The sentence lacks a subject and proper verb form. 'Does make me capture' is awkward; 'It helps me capture' is clearer. 'Treasure moment' should be plural and adjective form 'treasured moments'.

× Also, I often serve the beautiful flower picture to show.

✓ Also, I often share beautiful pictures of flowers to show them.

'Serve' is incorrect; 'share' is appropriate. 'Flower picture' should be plural 'pictures of flowers'. The sentence needs an object to clarify what is being shown.

× Yes, people in our in my country often send flowers to others, especially in some festival or special occupation like a holidays, wedding or birthday.

✓ Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others, especially during festivals or special occasions like holidays, weddings or birthdays.

'In our in my country' is redundant. 'Festival' should be plural 'festivals'. 'Special occupation' is incorrect; 'special occasions' is correct. 'A holidays' is incorrect; 'holidays' is plural.

× People believe flowers can express this to sending love to others.

✓ People believe flowers can express love when sending it to others.

The sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'Express this to sending love' is incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning with proper verb forms and structure.