花— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is good but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, "flower" should be plural "flowers"; "The always bright up of my day" is incorrect; "I placed in front of me in my decks" is unclear; "I even give flour to my sister" has spelling mistakes and tense issues. Try to use clear and correct sentences, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I love flowers a lot because I enjoy their beautiful colors and pleasant fragrance. They always brighten up my day instantly and improve my mood. Therefore, I keep some flowers on my desk. I also often give flowers to my sister to make her feel happy.

建议: There are several grammar and vocabulary mistakes, such as "flour" instead of "flowers", and incorrect verb forms like "she like" instead of "she likes". Also, the sentence structure is sometimes unclear. Try to use correct verb agreement and vocabulary, and organize your answer with linking words to make it coherent.

示例: Yes, my younger sister loves flowers a lot, especially sunflowers, which are one of her favorites. Whenever I have the chance, I buy sunflowers from the vendor for her. She really likes their fragrance and bright color, and seeing her happy makes me feel good.

建议: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "lots of flower" instead of "lots of flowers", and "I even gift some of to my friends" which is incomplete. Also, avoid repetition like "I I". Try to use plural forms correctly and complete your sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, there are many flowers of different kinds and species around my house. Among them, I like sunflowers and rose plants the most. I water them daily to keep them healthy. Sometimes, I pick some flowers and give them to my friends and relatives because of their lovely fragrance.

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains awkward expressions and incomplete sentences, such as "I have not such behavior or." Try to use clearer and complete sentences. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy.

示例: No, I'm not very fond of taking photos in my daily life. However, if someone asks me to take pictures of a specific flower that I have, I usually do it to help them. But generally, I don't take photos of flowers regularly.

建议: Your answer has some hesitation sounds like "uh" and unclear phrasing such as "there is some culture of giving flowers to someone is welcoming." Try to avoid filler words and use clear, complete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific examples.

示例: Yes, in my country, it is common to give flowers as a welcoming gesture or as a sign of respect. Additionally, flowers are often offered during religious ceremonies as sacred offerings to God.

× Yes, I love flower a lot because I enjoy the beautiful colors and pleasant fragrance.

✓ Yes, I love flowers a lot because I enjoy the beautiful colors and pleasant fragrance.

The word 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to flowers in general, not a single flower. In English, when talking about things in general, the plural form is used.

× The always bright up of my day instantly and improve my mood.

✓ They always brighten up my day instantly and improve my mood.

The sentence lacks a proper subject and verb agreement. 'The' is incorrect here; it should be 'They' referring to flowers. Also, 'bright up' should be 'brighten up' as the correct verb form.

× So I placed in front of me in my decks.

✓ So I placed them in front of me on my desk.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect; it should be 'on' when referring to a surface like a desk. Also, 'decks' is a typo and should be 'desk'. The object 'them' is needed to clarify what is placed.

× I even give flour to my sister to make them feel happy.

✓ I even give flowers to my sister to make her feel happy.

'Flour' is a misspelling of 'flowers'. The pronoun 'them' is incorrect because it refers to plural, but 'my sister' is singular, so 'her' should be used.

× Yeah, my younger sister loves flour a lot, so I used to gift her Sunflower, which is one of the favorite one of her.

✓ Yeah, my younger sister loves flowers a lot, so I used to gift her sunflowers, which are some of her favorites.

'Flour' should be 'flowers'. 'Sunflower' should be plural 'sunflowers' because it refers to multiple flowers. 'One of the favorite one of her' is incorrect; it should be 'some of her favorites' to indicate multiple favorite flowers.

× Every time there is a possibility of buying it from the vendor, she like it very much.

✓ Every time there is a possibility of buying it from the vendor, she likes it very much.

The verb 'like' should be in third person singular form 'likes' to agree with the singular subject 'she'.

× She like the fragrance and color of it, so it makes me happy.

✓ She likes the fragrance and color of it, so it makes me happy.

The verb 'like' should be 'likes' to agree with the singular subject 'she'.

× Yes, there are lots of flower of different kind and species around my house.

✓ Yes, there are lots of flowers of different kinds and species around my house.

'Flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to many flowers. 'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' to match 'different' and 'species'.

× Among them I like sunflower and rose plant. I I used to water it daily.

✓ Among them, I like sunflowers and rose plants. I used to water them daily.

'Sunflower' and 'rose plant' should be plural to match the context of multiple plants. The pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to refer to multiple plants.

× I even gift some of to my friends and relatives the fragrance of it.

✓ I even gift some to my friends and relatives because of the fragrance.

The sentence is unclear and incorrectly structured. 'Some of to' is incorrect; it should be 'some'. 'The fragrance of it' is awkward here; rephrasing improves clarity.

× No, I'm not very fond of taking photos in my daily life.

✓ No, I'm not very fond of taking photos in my daily life.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× However, if someone asks me to capture photos and forward it to them about any specific flower that I have or they need, I tend to do it just to help them.

✓ However, if someone asks me to capture photos and forward them to them of any specific flower that I have or they need, I tend to do it just to help them.

The pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural noun 'photos'. Also, 'about' should be 'of' to correctly describe the photos of flowers.

× But I have not such behavior or.

✓ But I do not have such a habit.

The original sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. 'Behavior' is better replaced with 'habit' in this context, and the sentence needs to be completed properly.

× Yes, there is some culture of giving flowers to someone is welcoming or is a gesture of, uh, respect.

✓ Yes, there is a culture of giving flowers to someone as a welcoming gesture or as a sign of respect.

'Some culture' should be 'a culture'. The sentence structure is awkward; adding 'as' and rephrasing improves clarity.

× Additionally, there is also uh uh, offering in some religious ceremony to the God as one of the sacred things to do.

✓ Additionally, there is also the offering of flowers in some religious ceremonies to God as one of the sacred things to do.

The sentence is missing articles and proper structure. 'The offering of flowers' clarifies the subject. 'Ceremony' should be plural 'ceremonies' to generalize. 'To the God' should be 'to God'.