花— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. For example, start by stating whether you love flowers, then briefly explain why.

示例: Yes, I love flowers because they are beautiful and can brighten up any room. I especially enjoy receiving them as gifts since they show thoughtfulness and care.

建议: Your answer has good content but needs clearer structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct verb tenses. Also, avoid redundancy and be concise.

示例: Yes, I love flowers myself, and my mom really enjoys receiving them as gifts. She believes flowers show that she is valued, so after any disagreement, I often ask my dad to buy flowers for her.

建议: Your answer is relevant and informative but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, correct minor grammar mistakes and be more specific about the flowers and their uses.

示例: Yes, I live near a forest that is full of local flowers. Many people use these flowers for medicinal purposes, and I have even planted some, like violets, in my garden.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and grammar. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid awkward phrasing. Also, be concise and natural.

示例: Yes, I often take photos of local flowers because they are rare and beautiful. I share these pictures on my Instagram, and many people, including some famous ones, enjoy seeing them.

建议: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to clearly explain cultural differences regarding sending flowers, use correct grammar, and avoid unclear phrases.

示例: No, in my country, older generations are more traditional and do not often send flowers. However, younger people see flowers as a meaningful gift that can bring happiness.

× Yes, there are glamorous and so pictures girl.

✓ Yes, there are glamorous and very pretty girls.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'pictures' instead of 'pretty' to describe girls, and 'so' should be followed by an adjective or adverb, here 'very' is more appropriate. Also, 'girl' should be plural 'girls' to match 'there are'.

× Girls really like flowers, especially when someone gives them as a present.

✓ Girls really like flowers, especially when someone gives them as presents.

The word 'present' should be plural 'presents' because 'them' refers to multiple flowers given on multiple occasions.

× And I believe everybody who loves flower has a warm heart and nice person.

✓ And I believe everybody who loves flowers has a warm heart and is a nice person.

'Flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match 'everybody who loves'. Also, 'nice person' needs the verb 'is' to complete the sentence.

× Yes, first of all myself, but my mom really loves to receive a flower as the present.

✓ Yes, first of all myself, but my mom really loves to receive flowers as presents.

'A flower' should be plural 'flowers' and 'the present' should be plural 'presents' to generalize the idea of receiving flowers as gifts.

× She believed it shows that she is valuable to others and I every time I tell after a fight, I tell my dad to buy some flower for her.

✓ She believes it shows that she is valuable to others, and every time after a fight, I tell my dad to buy some flowers for her.

'Believed' should be present tense 'believes' to match the ongoing belief. 'I every time I tell after a fight' is awkward; corrected to 'every time after a fight, I tell'. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers'.

× Yes, the place that I have live is located in the forest and surrounded by so many local flowers.

✓ Yes, the place where I live is located in the forest and surrounded by many local flowers.

'The place that I have live' is incorrect; it should be 'the place where I live'. 'So many' is acceptable but 'many' is more natural here.

× People use them as their medicine and I have planted some of them, for example Violet, in our garden.

✓ People use them as their medicine, and I have planted some of them, for example violets, in our garden.

'Violet' should be plural 'violets' when referring to the flowers in general.

× Yes, as I told you local flowers are so rare and pictures, I have so many photos on them and even share on my Instagram.

✓ Yes, as I told you, local flowers are so rare and beautiful. I have many photos of them and even share them on my Instagram.

'Pictures' is incorrect as an adjective; 'beautiful' fits better. 'Photos on them' should be 'photos of them'. Added missing commas and corrected sentence flow.

× So many people like to like it and enjoy to see my photos, even famous people.

✓ So many people like it and enjoy seeing my photos, even famous people.

'Like to like it' is redundant; 'like it' suffices. 'Enjoy to see' should be 'enjoy seeing' because 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund.

× No, people of my country are so old and traditional, they can understand why people should be happy when they're aggressive.

✓ No, people in my country are so old and traditional, they cannot understand why people should be happy when they're aggressive.

'People of my country' should be 'people in my country'. The meaning suggests they do not understand, so 'can' should be 'cannot'.

× A flower as a present, it is something for modern generation and they can understand how valuable is sending the flower as a present.

✓ A flower as a present is something for the modern generation, and they can understand how valuable it is to send flowers as presents.

'For modern generation' needs the definite article 'the'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity. 'Sending the flower as a present' is better as 'to send flowers as presents'.

× But for our grandparents it can't brings any happiness.

✓ But for our grandparents, it can't bring any happiness.

'Can't brings' is incorrect; modal verbs like 'can't' are followed by the base form 'bring' without 's'.