花— Part 1 评分报告

× They're beauty.

✓ They're beautiful.

The word 'beauty' is a noun, but the sentence requires an adjective to describe 'they'. 'Beautiful' is the correct adjective form to describe flowers.

× it it comes with different color and different shapes.

✓ they come with different colours and different shapes.

The subject 'flowers' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they' instead of 'it'. Also, 'color' should be plural 'colours' to match 'different' and 'shapes'.

× when you use them as a decoration outside of your house or as a as a gift to someone, like a celebration.

✓ when you use them as decoration outside your house or as a gift for someone, like for a celebration.

The phrase 'as a decoration' is better as 'as decoration' in this context. Also, 'gift to someone' should be 'gift for someone', and 'like a celebration' should be 'like for a celebration' to indicate purpose.

× she will bring it home and she will place it in her vase and would look for it every minute.

✓ she will bring them home and place them in her vase and look at them every minute.

'Flowers' is plural, so pronouns referring to them should be plural ('them'). Also, 'would look for it' is incorrect; 'look at them' fits the context better.

× Sometimes we go to market just to buy flowers for her because it makes her.

✓ Sometimes we go to the market just to buy flowers for her because it makes her happy.

'Market' requires the definite article 'the' here. Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'happy' completes the meaning.

× We do have different shade of flowers here.

✓ We do have different shades of flowers here.

'Shade' should be plural 'shades' to agree with 'different'.

× You will often see red, yellow, shade of green and bright red.

✓ You will often see red, yellow, shades of green, and bright red.

'Shade of green' should be plural 'shades of green' to match the list and 'of' is necessary here.

× We have a variety of flowers and fruits.

✓ We have a variety of flowers and fruit.

'Fruit' is often used as an uncountable noun when referring to types collectively, so 'fruit' is preferred over 'fruits'.

× Here you would see apple, oranges and berries.

✓ Here you would see apples, oranges, and berries.

'Apple' should be plural 'apples' to match 'oranges' and 'berries'. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× Sometimes I go to different places just to take pictures with my friends I would like to. In any lunch.

✓ Sometimes I go to different places just to take pictures with my friends. I would like to do that during lunch.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Splitting into two sentences and clarifying 'I would like to do that during lunch' improves clarity and grammar.

× In my country they don't usually do it, they send flowers to other people during celebration like your birthday, graduation, even that.

✓ In my country, they don't usually do it; they send flowers to other people during celebrations like birthdays, graduations, and so on.

Added commas and semicolon for sentence clarity. 'Celebration' should be plural 'celebrations'. 'Your birthday' is changed to 'birthdays' for generalization. 'Even that' is vague and replaced with 'and so on'.

× But here in Canada what I notice is they usually send flowers to each other even though there's no event or just a normal.

✓ But here in Canada, what I notice is they usually send flowers to each other even though there's no event or it's just a normal day.

Added commas for clarity. 'Just a normal' is incomplete; 'just a normal day' completes the meaning.