花— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. For example, say "Yes, I love flowers because I find different types fascinating. I enjoy planting them at home, which creates a relaxing atmosphere."

示例: Yes, I love flowers because I find different types fascinating. I enjoy planting them at home, which creates a relaxing atmosphere and makes my surroundings look beautiful.

建议: Improve sentence structure and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Be specific about where the flowers are planted and their effect. For example, "Yes, my mom loves flowers. She plants them in our kitchen garden and on the terrace, which creates a fresh and peaceful atmosphere."

示例: Yes, my mom loves flowers. She plants them in our kitchen garden and on the terrace, which creates a fresh and peaceful atmosphere that I really enjoy.

建议: Use clearer grammar and complete your sentences. Start with a direct answer, then add reasons and future plans using linking words. For example, "There are not many flowers where I live because few people love them. However, I plan to plant some in my room or nearby in the future."

示例: There are not many flowers where I live because few people love them. However, I plan to plant some in my room or nearby in the future to brighten up the space.

建议: Avoid incorrect words and improve clarity. Use linking words to explain your habits and feelings. For example, "Yes, I am fascinated by flowers. Whenever I see beautiful ones, I immediately take photos. This helps me create beautiful memories, which I enjoy sharing with friends on social media."

示例: Yes, I am fascinated by flowers. Whenever I see beautiful ones, I immediately take photos. This helps me create beautiful memories, which I enjoy sharing with friends on social media.

建议: Complete your sentences and use linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about occasions. For example, "Yes, people in my country often send flowers to loved ones on birthdays, weddings, anniversaries, and other ceremonies as a symbol of love and appreciation."

示例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to loved ones on birthdays, weddings, anniversaries, and other ceremonies as a symbol of love and appreciation.

× Yes, I love flower.

✓ Yes, I love flowers.

The noun 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to flowers in general, not a single flower.

× I always more fascinating about different types of flower

✓ I am always more fascinated by different types of flowers

The phrase 'more fascinating' is incorrect; it should be 'more fascinated' to express the feeling. Also, 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to multiple types.

× I used to, uh, planting the trees flower at my home

✓ I used to, uh, plant the flowering trees at my home

After 'used to', the base form of the verb 'plant' should be used, not the '-ing' form 'planting'. Also, 'trees flower' is awkward; 'flowering trees' is more natural.

× which makes it cool and it also gives me a, a kind of, uh, relaxation and it is just a way of.

✓ which makes it cool and also gives me a kind of relaxation; it is just a way of relaxing.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. Adding 'relaxing' clarifies the meaning and corrects the structure.

× She actually planting them at my home and the kitchen garden and the terrace also which where you can find everywhere.

✓ She actually plants them at my home, in the kitchen garden and on the terrace, where you can find them everywhere.

The verb 'planting' should be in the simple present 'plants' to agree with the third person singular subject 'she'. Also, prepositions are corrected for clarity.

× There are lots of flowers, variety of flowers that gives me that gives you lots of freshness and peaceful atmosphere.

✓ There are lots of flowers, a variety of flowers that give me and you lots of freshness and a peaceful atmosphere.

'Variety' is singular and should be preceded by 'a'. The verb 'gives' should be plural 'give' to agree with the plural subject 'flowers'. Also, 'a peaceful atmosphere' needs the article 'a'.

× there are not lot of flowers as I see there not any people who loves flower as I love.

✓ there are not a lot of flowers as I see; there are not any people who love flowers as I do.

'Lot' should be 'a lot' and 'people' is plural, so the verb should be 'love' not 'loves'. Also, 'flower' should be plural 'flowers'.

× in future I'd like to planting them on my room or beside the.

✓ in the future, I'd like to plant them in my room or beside it.

After 'would like to', the base form 'plant' should be used, not the '-ing' form 'planting'. Also, 'on my room' should be 'in my room' and the sentence is completed with 'beside it'.

× I'm vaccinating by the flowers

✓ I'm fascinated by the flowers

The word 'vaccinating' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'fascinated'. The preposition 'by' is correct with 'fascinated'.

× just a single photos are along with that.

✓ just a single photo along with that.

'Photos' is plural but 'a single' requires singular noun 'photo'.

× I'm also vibing with it which gives me a kind of beautiful memories

✓ I'm also vibing with it, which gives me a kind of beautiful memory

'Memories' is plural but 'a kind of' requires singular noun 'memory'.

× people often send flowers to their loved one or relatives

✓ people often send flowers to their loved ones or relatives

'Loved one' should be plural 'loved ones' to match 'people' and 'relatives'.

× especially when people have birthday or any ceremonies like marriage, anniversary or any rituals.

✓ especially when people have birthdays or any ceremonies like marriage, anniversaries, or any rituals.

'Birthday' and 'anniversary' should be plural to match 'people' and 'ceremonies'.