花— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Votre réponse manque de fluidité et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Essayez d'utiliser des phrases plus naturelles et évitez les répétitions. Par exemple, commencez par exprimer votre amour pour les fleurs, puis mentionnez vos fleurs préférées et une expérience liée aux fleurs, en utilisant des temps corrects et une structure claire.

示例: Yes, I love flowers very much. My favorite flowers are roses and sunflowers. When I was a student, I worked at a flower shop and really enjoyed preparing the shop for opening.

建议: Votre réponse contient des erreurs grammaticales et manque de cohérence. Utilisez des temps verbaux corrects et des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus naturelle et fluide. Par exemple, décrivez ce que votre grand-mère fait avec les fleurs et comment cela vous fait sentir.

示例: My grandma loves flowers too. She grows many flowers in her backyard and enjoys taking care of them. Whenever I visit her, I can always smell the lovely scent of flowers, which makes me very happy.

建议: Votre réponse est confuse et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Essayez de structurer votre réponse clairement en expliquant pourquoi il y a peu de fleurs dans votre région, en utilisant des phrases simples et correctes.

示例: No, there are not many flowers where I live because I live in a big city. The city is very crowded, so there is little space to plant flowers or other plants.

建议: Votre réponse contient des erreurs de grammaire et de vocabulaire. Utilisez des expressions plus naturelles et précises pour décrire votre habitude de prendre des photos de fleurs, en mentionnant vos préférences clairement.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy taking photos of flowers in my daily life. Most of the photos in my album are of flowers, especially roses and sunflowers, which are my favorites.

建议: Votre réponse est compréhensible mais contient des erreurs grammaticales et de structure. Essayez d'utiliser des phrases plus naturelles et d'ajouter des exemples précis avec des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence.

示例: Yes, in my country, people often send flowers to their lovers, family, or friends. There are many flower shops on the streets, and for special occasions like Valentine's Day or birthdays, giving flowers is very common.

× My favorite flower is rose and sunflower and I was worked at flower shop before when I was a student and very enjoyed the process of preparing to open flower shop.

✓ My favorite flowers are rose and sunflower. I worked at a flower shop before when I was a student and really enjoyed the process of preparing to open the flower shop.

The phrase 'My favorite flower is rose and sunflower' has a singular/plural mismatch; 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because two flowers are mentioned. 'I was worked' is incorrect; the past tense of 'work' is 'worked' without 'was'. Also, 'very enjoyed' is incorrect; it should be 'really enjoyed' or 'enjoyed very much'. Articles are missing before 'flower shop' and 'the flower shop'. Suggestions: use plural forms when referring to multiple items, use simple past tense correctly, and include appropriate articles.

× My grandma loves flowers too and she gathering many flowers at her backyard and she's very enjoyed.

✓ My grandma loves flowers too and she gathers many flowers in her backyard and she really enjoys it.

'She gathering' is incorrect; the verb should be in the simple present tense 'she gathers' to agree with the subject. 'She's very enjoyed' is incorrect; 'enjoyed' is past participle and cannot be used with 'is' here. It should be 'she really enjoys it'. Also, 'at her backyard' should be 'in her backyard' (preposition correction). Suggestions: use simple present tense for habitual actions, correct verb forms after 'is', and use correct prepositions.

× When I was come back to my grandma's house I always can smell a sense of flower, it's very joyful.

✓ When I came back to my grandma's house, I could always smell the scent of flowers; it was very joyful.

'When I was come back' is incorrect; the past tense 'came' should be used instead of 'was come back'. 'I always can smell' should be 'I could always smell' to match past tense context. 'A sense of flower' is awkward; 'the scent of flowers' is more natural. Suggestions: use simple past tense for completed actions, use correct modal verbs in past context, and use natural collocations.

× No, the place that I live in are not a lot of flowers because I live in a big city and they're always congested so they don't have place to plant flowers or another planet.

✓ No, the place where I live does not have a lot of flowers because I live in a big city and it's always congested, so there is no place to plant flowers or other plants.

'The place that I live in are not a lot of flowers' is incorrect; 'place' is singular so the verb should be 'does not have' and 'a lot of flowers' is the object. 'They're always congested' is unclear; 'it' refers to the city and should be singular. 'They don't have place' should be 'there is no place'. 'Another planet' is incorrect; likely meant 'another plant'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct pronouns, and correct vocabulary.

× Yes, I'm very enjoy to take photos of flowers in my daily life.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking photos of flowers in my daily life.

'I'm very enjoy' is incorrect; 'enjoy' is a verb and should not be used with 'am'. The correct form is 'I enjoy'. Also, 'to take photos' should be 'taking photos' after 'enjoy'. Suggestions: use correct verb forms after 'I', and use gerund after 'enjoy'.

× The genre of flowers photo is the most thing in my photo album and especially I tend to take the photo of rose and sunflower which is my favorite.

✓ The genre of flower photos is the main content in my photo album, and especially I tend to take photos of roses and sunflowers, which are my favorites.

'Flowers photo' should be 'flower photos' (plural noun). 'The most thing' is awkward; 'the main content' or 'the majority' is better. 'The photo of rose and sunflower' should be plural 'photos of roses and sunflowers'. 'Which is my favorite' should be 'which are my favorites' because multiple flowers are mentioned. Suggestions: use plural nouns correctly, use natural expressions, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, in my country people often send flowers to lover, family or friends.

✓ Yes, in my country people often send flowers to lovers, family, or friends.

'Lover' should be plural 'lovers' to match the plural 'family or friends'. Also, commas are needed to separate items in a list. Suggestions: use plural forms for general statements and proper punctuation.

× You can see there are many flower shops in the street and for example when there have special occasion like Valentine's Day birthday, people often give flowers.

✓ You can see many flower shops on the street. For example, when there is a special occasion like Valentine's Day or a birthday, people often give flowers.

The sentence is a run-on and lacks proper structure. 'In the street' should be 'on the street'. 'When there have special occasion' is incorrect; it should be 'when there is a special occasion'. 'Valentine's Day birthday' is confusing; it should be 'Valentine's Day or a birthday'. Suggestions: split sentences for clarity, use correct prepositions, and correct verb forms.