花— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use correct grammar and more natural expressions. For example, say 'when I am free, I try to plant flowers' instead of 'when I free I try to plant a flower'. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

示例: Yes, I love flowers very much. Whenever I have free time, I like to plant flowers in my garden because it helps me relax and reduces my stress. The fragrance of flowers makes me feel refreshed and happy.

建议: Focus on correct grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'I know a number of people who love flowers, especially my friend Naid. He often plants flowers around his home, and I sometimes help him because I am also enthusiastic about flowers.'

示例: Yes, I know several people who love flowers. For instance, my friend Naid enjoys planting flowers around his house. I often help him because I share the same passion for flowers, and we find this activity very enjoyable.

建议: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say 'I live in Silat city in northern Bangladesh. There are many flower gardens nearby that I often visit. Since I am enthusiastic about plants, I try to collect different types of flowering trees and grow them in my garden, which I find fascinating.'

示例: I live in Silat city, located in the northern part of Bangladesh. There are many flower gardens around my area that I like to visit. Because I love plants, I collect various types of flowering trees and grow them in my garden, which I find very interesting.

建议: Use clearer sentence structure and correct grammar. For example, say 'One of my hobbies for relaxation is photography. I often take pictures of nature, especially flowers, whenever I see something interesting. I edit these photos and sometimes share them on my social media.'

示例: For relaxation, I enjoy photography. I often take pictures of flowers and other natural scenes when I find something beautiful. After editing the photos, I sometimes share them on my social media accounts.

建议: Improve grammar and clarity. Use linking words to organize ideas. For example, say 'In my country, people often send flowers as gifts to their girlfriends or boyfriends. They also send flowers on wedding occasions. Moreover, many people give flowers to their friends. This practice is popular among both young and older people.'

示例: In my country, it is common to send flowers as gifts to boyfriends or girlfriends. People also give flowers during weddings and to their friends. This tradition is popular among people of all ages.

× so when I free I try to plant a flower.

✓ so when I am free I try to plant flowers.

The phrase 'when I free' is missing the verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense 'when I am free'. Also, 'a flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match the general statement about planting flowers. In English, we use 'am' with 'I' to indicate the state of being free.

× whenever you take smell flower, you feel like more refreshment.

✓ whenever you smell flowers, you feel more refreshed.

The phrase 'take smell flower' is incorrect; the verb 'smell' should be used directly with the object 'flowers'. Also, 'feel like more refreshment' is unnatural; the correct expression is 'feel more refreshed'. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× So I usually prefer to cultivate flower in my garden.

✓ So I usually prefer to cultivate flowers in my garden.

The noun 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to multiple plants in the garden. Using plural form is appropriate when talking about general cultivation.

× I know number of people who are really love a flowers, especially, uh, one of my friend, his name is Naid.

✓ I know a number of people who really love flowers, especially one of my friends, his name is Naid.

The phrase 'number of people' needs the article 'a' to become 'a number of people'. Also, 'are really love' is incorrect; it should be 'really love'. 'One of my friend' should be 'one of my friends' to match plural form. 'A flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'flowers' without 'a'.

× He actually love flower whenever he free, He also tried to plant flower in, in their surrounding.

✓ He actually loves flowers whenever he is free. He also tries to plant flowers in his surroundings.

The verb 'love' needs an 's' for third person singular: 'loves'. 'Whenever he free' requires 'is' to form 'whenever he is free'. 'Tried' is past tense but the context suggests habitual action, so 'tries' is correct. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers'. 'Their surrounding' should be 'his surroundings' to match the subject.

× I also sometimes try to help them because, uh, as I mentioned, I, I'm also enthusiastic about flowers.

✓ I also sometimes try to help them because, as I mentioned, I am also enthusiastic about flowers.

The sentence is mostly correct but removing unnecessary commas improves clarity. 'I, I'm' is redundant; 'I am' is sufficient.

× I live in Silat city, which is located northern part of Bangladesh.

✓ I live in Silat city, which is located in the northern part of Bangladesh.

The phrase 'located northern part' is missing the preposition 'in' and the article 'the' before 'northern part'. This correction fixes the prepositional phrase.

× In my surrounding there are a number of flower gardens where I usually visit.

✓ In my surroundings, there are a number of flower gardens that I usually visit.

'Surrounding' should be plural 'surroundings' to refer to the area around. Also, 'where I usually visit' is incorrect; 'that I usually visit' is better because 'visit' requires an object.

× I'm already mentioned earlier that I'm really enthusiastic about plants.

✓ I already mentioned earlier that I'm really enthusiastic about plants.

'I'm already mentioned' is incorrect; it should be 'I already mentioned' because 'mentioned' is past tense and 'I am' does not fit here.

× So as much as possible I try to collect a different type of flower trees and I try to harvest on my garden.

✓ So as much as possible I try to collect different types of flower trees and I try to harvest in my garden.

'A different type' should be plural 'different types' to match 'flower trees'. 'Harvest on my garden' should be 'harvest in my garden' because 'in' is the correct preposition for location.

× It is a really fascinated for me and.

✓ It is really fascinating for me.

'Fascinated' is an adjective describing a feeling, but here the correct adjective is 'fascinating' to describe the thing. Also, the sentence is incomplete and should end properly.

× I do several kind of activity for for my refreshment, one of photography on every I try to take pictures especially for nature and when I saw interesting or captivating something as much as possible I tried to capture on my mobile phone and after that I tried to edit them and if I think it is good I will try to publish on my social platform.

✓ I do several kinds of activities for my refreshment. One of them is photography. Every day I try to take pictures, especially of nature, and when I see something interesting or captivating, I try to capture it on my mobile phone. After that, I try to edit them, and if I think they are good, I publish them on my social platform.

'Several kind of activity' should be 'several kinds of activities' to match plural. 'One of photography on every' is unclear; it should be 'One of them is photography. Every day...'. 'When I saw' should be 'when I see' for present tense habitual action. 'Capturing something' needs 'it' as object. 'I tried' changed to 'I try' for habitual action. 'Publish on my social platform' should be 'publish them on my social platform'.

× In my country, people often send a flower as a gift in their girlfriend or boyfriend.

✓ In my country, people often send flowers as gifts to their girlfriends or boyfriends.

'Send a flower as a gift in their girlfriend or boyfriend' is incorrect. The correct prepositions are 'send flowers as gifts to their girlfriends or boyfriends'. Also, plural forms are appropriate here.

× Sometimes they also send a gift for wedding occasions such as as well as a majority of people, they are easily sandflower as a gift in their friends.

✓ Sometimes they also send gifts for wedding occasions. As well, a majority of people easily send flowers as gifts to their friends.

The sentence is fragmented and has errors. 'Send a gift for wedding occasions such as' is incomplete. 'Sandflower' is a typo for 'send flowers'. 'As well as a majority of people' is awkward; better to say 'As well, a majority of people'. Prepositions corrected to 'send flowers as gifts to their friends'.

× Uh so yeah. It is really popular among young people as well as their aged people.

✓ So yeah, it is really popular among young people as well as older people.

'Their aged people' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'older people' or 'elderly people'. Also, unnecessary filler words can be reduced for clarity.