花— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your response more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I love flowers."), avoid redundancy, and keep it within 3–4 concise sentences. Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so").

示例: Yes, I love flowers. I especially enjoy roses because of their sweet fragrance, which always lifts my mood. For example, I often receive bouquets on special occasions and I keep them in my room to enjoy the scent.

建议: Improve grammar, pronouns and clarity. Begin with a simple topic sentence ("Yes, my mother loves flowers."). Use linking words ("for example", "so") and provide one or two clear specific details. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

示例: Yes, my mother loves flowers. For example, she buys fresh blooms every week to decorate our living room, which brightens the space and makes it feel more welcoming. Because of this, I also feel relaxed when I am at home.

建议: Use a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and organise supporting details logically. Use linking words ("because", "so", "for example") and provide specific examples of flower types or places. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live because our town has several parks and public gardens. For example, I often see roses, marigolds and jasmine in the central park, and I sometimes take photos of them to decorate my home.

建议: Be concise and avoid informal phrases like "click" repeatedly; use natural verbs such as "take photos" or "photograph". Start with a direct answer, add a reason and one specific detail. Finish sentences fully.

示例: Yes, I often photograph flowers with my phone because I enjoy nature photography. For instance, I have many photos of roses in different colours and several shots of the local park that I edit and share with friends.

建议: Clarify and correct details: use past tense correctly and avoid unrelated words like "booklet" if you mean bouquet. Start with a clear general statement, then give one specific example using a linking word ("for example").

示例: Yes, people in my country often give flowers on special occasions such as birthdays and weddings. For example, last year my friends gave me a bouquet on my birthday, which made me very happy because I love flowers.

× Will definitely adore flowers as a gift and I also love flowers because of the beautiful fragrance.

✓ I will definitely adore flowers as a gift, and I also love flowers because of their beautiful fragrance.

The original sentence begins with 'Will definitely adore' which lacks a subject; for future tense use 'I will' (future tense with subject). Also 'the beautiful fragrance' should be 'their beautiful fragrance' to refer to flowers (pronoun agreement). Suggest explicitly include the subject and use the plural possessive pronoun 'their'.

× I love the scent of roses and I received a lot of flowers as a gift.

✓ I love the scent of roses, and I have received a lot of flowers as gifts.

The sentence mixes present simple ('I love') with simple past ('I received') which can be acceptable but here the experience is better expressed with present perfect 'have received' to indicate experiences up to now. Also 'a lot of flowers as a gift' should be plural 'as gifts' or 'as a gift' with singular; use 'as gifts'.

× Yes, there are number of persons that I know who love flowers a lot like my mother's like like me.

✓ Yes, there are a number of people I know who love flowers a lot, like my mother and me.

Use the expression 'a number of' with 'a' before 'number'. 'Persons' is awkward; use 'people'. 'That I know' can be shortened to 'I know'. 'My mother's like like me' is ungrammatical: should be 'like my mother and me' (use object pronoun 'me' and connect correctly). Remove repeated 'like'.

× He also adored the flowers a lot.

✓ He also adores flowers a lot.

Context describes someone who loves flowers generally; present simple 'adores' is appropriate rather than past 'adored'. Also 'the flowers' implies specific flowers; 'flowers' without 'the' is more natural for general preference.

× He always purchased a lot of flowers to decorate the house which helps to brighten up the my rooms.

✓ He always purchases a lot of flowers to decorate the house, which helps brighten up my rooms.

Use present simple 'purchases' to match habitual action. Remove redundant 'the' before 'my rooms' and use infinitive/gerund form 'helps brighten up' (omit 'to'). Add a comma before 'which'.

× Their beauty increased the environment and these kind of environment helps me to relaxed and.

✓ Their beauty improves the environment, and this kind of environment helps me to relax.

'Their beauty increased the environment' is incorrect; use 'improves the environment' (present simple). 'These kind of' should be 'this kind of' or 'these kinds of'; here 'this kind of environment' (singular) fits. 'Helps me to relaxed' should be 'helps me to relax' (base form after 'helps') and remove trailing 'and'.

× Yes, I'm live in a small town but with the a lot of parks and gardens are there so the variety of flowers are in at and I also clicked a lot of picture of these flowers and collected some flowers to my to decorate my home.

✓ Yes, I live in a small town that has a lot of parks and gardens, so there is a wide variety of flowers, and I also take a lot of pictures of these flowers and collect some to decorate my home.

'I'm live' is wrong; use 'I live'. Remove extra articles 'the a lot'. Use 'that has' to describe the town. For existence use 'there is a wide variety of flowers' (singular 'variety' with 'a' and 'there is'). Use present simple 'take' for habitual action instead of 'clicked' (past). 'A lot of picture' should be 'a lot of pictures'. 'Collected some flowers to my to decorate' should be 'collect some to decorate'.

× So where I live there are number of different variety flowers that helps me to increase the beauty of town.

✓ So where I live there are a number of different varieties of flowers that help to increase the beauty of the town.

Include 'a' before 'number'. 'Different variety flowers' should be 'different varieties of flowers'. With plural 'varieties of flowers' the relative clause needs plural verb 'help' not 'helps'. Add article 'the' before 'town'.

× Yes, I usually click the picture of flowers in my mobile phone because I'm a good photographer and I love to click photos with connected with the nature.

✓ Yes, I usually take pictures of flowers on my mobile phone because I'm a good photographer and I love taking photos connected with nature.

Use 'take pictures' rather than 'click the picture'. 'On my mobile phone' is the correct preposition. 'Love to click photos with connected with the nature' is ungrammatical; use 'love taking photos connected with nature' (gerund after 'love' when expressing general preference). Remove extra 'with'.

× So I have a lot of pictures of roses with the different colors and I'm also click some pictures of parks and plants because it.

✓ So I have a lot of pictures of roses in different colors, and I also take some pictures of parks and plants because I enjoy it.

Use 'in different colors' not 'with the different colors'. 'I'm also click' is incorrect; use 'I also take' (present simple). The clause 'because it.' is incomplete; expand to 'because I enjoy it' or similar to complete the thought.

× Well, in my country it is a tradition to give flowers as a gift in the special occasions like birthday and ceremonies.

✓ Well, in my country it is a tradition to give flowers as gifts on special occasions like birthdays and ceremonies.

Use plural 'gifts' for general practice. Use preposition 'on special occasions' not 'in the special occasions'. 'Birthday' should be pluralized to 'birthdays' when speaking generally. Articles adjusted for generality.

× For example, on my birthday, there are a number of my friends gave me a booklet as a gift.

✓ For example, on my birthday, a number of my friends gave me a booklet as a gift.

Mixing 'there are' with past event is wrong. Remove 'there are' and use simple past 'gave' to describe what happened. 'A number of my friends gave me' is correct for that past event.

× That was a really good thing for me so because I love the flowers a lot.

✓ That was really nice because I love flowers a lot.

Remove redundant words 'a really good thing for me so because' which is awkward. 'Love the flowers a lot' should be 'love flowers a lot' for general preference. Simplify to a natural sentence: 'That was really nice because I love flowers a lot.'