花— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答要更自然、简洁，先给出主题句，然后用一到两句具体细节支持。避免重复和语法错误（如 reserving → keeping/receiving，my my 重复）。可以提到具体花的类型或如何保存花以增强细节。

示例: Yes, I love flowers. I keep small bouquets from special occasions like birthdays and graduations in a photo album or dried- flower frame so they remind me of happy moments.

建议: 先直接回答，然后用一两句具体细节说明。注意主谓一致（likes, grows）和人称错误（gives me → gives her）。避免填充词 like 'uh' 和 'umm'。可补充具体花卉种类或养花习惯。

示例: Yes, my mother loves flowers. She grows roses, marigolds and orchids on our balcony and waters them every morning; caring for them clearly makes her proud and cheerful.

建议: 回答要简洁且逻辑清晰。注意时态一致（saw → see, feel → feel/feel happy → makes me happy）。可用连接词（for example, especially）并给出具体时段或花的种类，避免过多重复。

示例: Yes, there are many flowers at my home, especially on our balcony in spring and summer. Seeing them makes me happy, and they also help freshen the air around the apartment.

建议: 先直接回答，然后说明频率与原因。注意语法（like to take photos, I always take photos of flowers with my sister, took last week），并用更自然的表达（flowers were in bloom/opening → were in bloom）。控制句子数量并增加具体细节如相机类型或拍摄风格。

示例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because I'm a hobby photographer. Last week my sister and I went to a park where the flowers were in full bloom and I took close-up shots with my DSLR.

建议: 回答要更准确自然，注意复数和冠词（send → sending, others → others, Mother's Day, anniversaries）。用一到两句具体例子说明场合与花的象征意义，避免冗长和重复。

示例: Yes, people often send flowers on occasions like Mother's Day, anniversaries and graduations. Flowers are seen as a simple and beautiful way to express love and congratulations.

× Yes, I really like flowers because they are very beautiful and I really like reserving them in my special stage of my life like birthday or graduation which can help me remember my my meaningful moment.

✓ Yes, I really like flowers because they are very beautiful, and I really like to keep them during special times in my life, like birthdays or graduations, which can help me remember meaningful moments.

句中“reserving them in my special stage of my life”用词不当，应使用“keep them during special times”更自然；此外“my my meaningful moment”有重复且单复数不当，改为“meaningful moments”。建议用更自然的搭配并注意重复词的删除。

× My mom really like flowers, she grow many different flowers in our balcony and uh, watering them is her daily routine.

✓ My mom really likes flowers. She grows many different flowers on our balcony, and watering them is her daily routine.

主语是第三人称单数“My mom”，动词应加-s：like→likes，grow→grows；介词应为“on the balcony”而不是“in”。另外句子过长建议断句。

× Umm because growing them gives me a sense of achievement and once she saw the flower she will feel happy.

✓ Because growing them gives her a sense of achievement, and whenever she sees the flowers she feels happy.

时态和主语不一致：句首强调的是妈妈的感受，动词应与第三人称一致“gives”；“once she saw the flower she will feel happy”混用过去和将来时，应使用一般现在时表达经常性动作，且名词用复数“flowers”。建议把句子调整为一般现在时以表习惯性行为。

× Yes, because I live with my parents, so in our balcony you can see many beautiful flowers, especially during the spring and summer.

✓ Yes. Because I live with my parents, you can see many beautiful flowers on our balcony, especially during spring and summer.

句中“in our balcony”介词不当应为“on our balcony”；另外“the spring and summer”在泛指季节时通常不加定冠词。建议调整介词并省略冠词以符合自然表达。

× I really like it because when I saw them I feel very happy and I think it is a good way to refresh the air.

✓ I really like it because when I see them I feel very happy, and I think they are a good way to freshen the air.

“when I saw them I feel”时态混用，应全部使用一般现在时表示常态：saw→see。短语“refresh the air”不地道，改为“freshen the air”；“it”指代不明，改用“they”指代“flowers”。

× Yes, I really like take photo with flowers because I'm a photographer so I always take photo with my sister.

✓ Yes, I really like taking photos of flowers because I'm a photographer, so I always take photos with my sister.

动词后需用动名词：like take→like taking；名词复数“photos”更自然，介词搭配应为“take photos of”而不是“take photo with”（“with”用于一起拍照的人）。另外句子中多处需要复数形式和逗号分隔。

× Last week I take photo with her in the park because many flowers opening.

✓ Last week I took photos with her in the park because many flowers were opening.

叙述过去发生的动作，应使用一般过去时：take→took；“many flowers opening”缺少主谓结构，应改为“many flowers were opening”或更自然“many flowers were in bloom”。建议改为“many flowers were in bloom”。

× Yes, in my country people really like send flowers to other at the special moment like mothers days or anniversary because it is a good way to help them represent their love and the flower is very beautiful.

✓ Yes. In my country people really like to send flowers to others on special occasions like Mother's Day or anniversaries because it is a good way to express their love, and flowers are very beautiful.

动词不定式缺失：like send→like to send；“other”应为复数“others”；介词应为“on special occasions”；节日名词和复数形式要正确：Mother's Day, anniversaries；“represent their love”用词不当， 改为“express their love”；同时“the flower is very beautiful”泛指时用复数“flowers are very beautiful”。