写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误，如“written”应为“wrote”，且表达不够自然流畅。建议注意时态和动词形式的正确使用，同时避免冗余，简洁表达。

示例: I used to write a lot when I was younger, mainly keeping logs for my homework. However, now I mostly use my phone or computer to send messages and type because of technological advances.

建议: 回答内容不够具体且有语法和表达错误，如“daily Diaries”应为“daily diaries”，“maybe and some plans”表达不清。建议使用更准确的词汇和句子结构，明确表达写作内容和原因。

示例: When I was in kindergarten and primary school, I enjoyed writing daily diaries to record my feelings and plans for the weekend.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，如“when I was are not an adult”应为“when I was not an adult”，且内容不够具体。建议改进语法并提供更具体的例子说明写作内容的变化。

示例: Yes, definitely. When I was a child, I often wrote about things I didn't enjoy, but now I write about topics that interest me.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和不完整的句子，如“everyone has A and my is always with me too”表达不明。建议使用完整句子，清晰表达观点，并避免语法错误。

示例: I prefer typing because I can type faster than I can write by hand. Also, with technology advancing, I always have my phone with me, which makes typing more convenient.

× When I was young I usually written a log to deal with my homework and schoolwork.

✓ When I was young I usually wrote a log to deal with my homework and schoolwork.

这里的动词时态错误，'written' 是过去分词，应该用一般过去时 'wrote' 来表达过去的习惯动作。

× But now with the rapid development of technology, I always use my phone or computers to send messages or typing just.

✓ But now with the rapid development of technology, I always use my phone or computer to send messages or just type.

动词形式错误，'typing' 应该用动词原形 'type'，因为前面有助动词 'use'，后面接动词原形。

× I always use my phone or computers to send messages or typing just.

✓ I always use my phone or computer to send messages or just type.

名词单复数错误，'computers' 应该用单数 'computer'，因为前面是 'my phone or ...'，表示选择其中一个，需保持一致。

× I liked to write daily Diaries to record my feelings on Saturday and maybe and some plans that I need to do.

✓ I liked to write daily diaries to record my feelings on Saturdays and maybe some plans that I needed to do.

介词和时间表达错误，'on Saturday' 应该用复数 'on Saturdays' 表示习惯性动作；'and maybe and some plans' 结构混乱，去掉多余的 'and'。

× I liked to write daily Diaries to record my feelings on Saturday and maybe and some plans that I need to do.

✓ I liked to write daily diaries to record my feelings on Saturdays and maybe some plans that I needed to do.

时态不一致，前半句是过去时，后半句 'I need to do' 应改为过去时 'I needed to do'。

× Because when I was are not an adult, I usually write the things that I don't want, but now I can write the things I like to write.

✓ Because when I was not an adult, I usually wrote the things that I didn't want, but now I can write the things I like to write.

时态和语法错误，'was are' 是错误的，应该是 'was not'；同时，过去时态的动作 'usually write' 和 'don't want' 应改为过去时 'usually wrote' 和 'didn't want'。

× And with the rapid development of technology, everyone has A and my is always with me too.

✓ And with the rapid development of technology, everyone has a phone and mine is always with me too.

名词单复数和冠词错误，'A' 应该是 'a phone'，'my' 应该是 'mine' 表示代词所有格。