写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but can be more concise and structured. Avoid filler phrases like 'Let me think' and try to directly answer the question first. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct minor grammar errors, such as 'make list' should be 'make a list'.

示例: Yes, I write quite a lot. For instance, I usually write three to four pages every week for my assignments. Besides that, I also make a daily to-do list to organize my tasks efficiently.

建议: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words such as 'because' effectively and ensure subject-verb agreement, e.g., 'all the work is done more efficiently'. Also, be more specific about why you like making lists.

示例: I like to make lists of tasks I need to complete daily or weekly because it helps me stay organized. Consequently, I can finish my work more efficiently and on time.

建议: Reduce filler words and improve sentence fluency. Use consistent verb tenses, e.g., 'my writing was simpler' instead of 'is simpler'. Also, use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I believe the things I write will change over time because we all grow with experience. For example, when I was younger, my writing was simpler, but now I try to use more complex words to express my thoughts clearly and creatively.

建议: Avoid repeating ideas and improve sentence structure. For example, 'I tend to feel more easier' is incorrect; say 'I find typing easier'. Also, use linking words to connect your reasons smoothly.

示例: I prefer typing to handwriting because, as a software engineering student, I am more comfortable using computers. Therefore, I find typing easier and faster than writing by hand.

× I write a lot of things.

✓ I write a lot.

The phrase 'a lot of things' is unnecessary here and can be simplified to 'a lot' to sound more natural and grammatically correct in this context.

× all the work are done more efficient, efficiently and in timely manner.

✓ all the work is done more efficiently and in a timely manner.

'Work' is an uncountable noun and should be treated as singular, so 'are' should be 'is'. Also, 'efficient' should be the adverb 'efficiently' to modify the verb 'done'. Additionally, 'in timely manner' needs the article 'a' before 'timely manner'.

× my writing is simpler, but now I try to use, uh, more complex words to express my thoughts more clearly and creatively.

✓ my writing was simpler, but now I try to use more complex words to express my thoughts more clearly and creatively.

The sentence compares past and present, so 'my writing is simpler' should be 'my writing was simpler' to correctly reflect past tense.

× my writing is simpler, but now I try to use, uh, more complex words to express my thoughts more clearly and creatively.

✓ my writing was simpler, but now I try to use more complex words to express my thoughts more clearly and creatively.

The verb 'is' should be in past tense 'was' to match the time frame when referring to younger self.

× So typing I tend to feel more easier to do rather than handwriting.

✓ So I tend to find typing easier to do rather than handwriting.

The phrase 'feel more easier' is incorrect; 'easier' is a comparative adjective and does not need 'more'. Also, 'feel' is better replaced with 'find' to express opinion about difficulty. The sentence structure is improved by placing 'I tend to find' before 'typing'.