天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Essayez d'utiliser des mots plus précis et évitez les hésitations pour rendre votre réponse plus naturelle. Par exemple, au lieu de "stroke", utilisez "hot" ou "very warm". Aussi, évitez les répétitions inutiles comme "uh".

示例: The weather where I live is very hot in summer and quite frosty in winter.

建议: Votre réponse est claire mais contient des répétitions et des phrases un peu longues. Essayez d'utiliser des mots de liaison pour améliorer la fluidité et évitez de répéter des mots comme "outside".

示例: I absolutely prefer hot weather because it allows me to do whatever I want during the day. However, when it's rainy, windy, or snowy, I face many restrictions, even for simple tasks like grocery shopping.

建议: La réponse est un peu confuse et contradictoire. Clarifiez votre opinion et évitez les répétitions comme "maintain my makeup" et "my my makeup". Expliquez clairement pourquoi vous préférez un type de temps.

示例: I prefer dry weather because wet weather can ruin my hairstyle and makeup, which I like to keep neat.

建议: Votre réponse est compréhensible mais manque de structure et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Utilisez des phrases complètes et des mots de liaison pour clarifier vos idées.

示例: I usually check the weather forecast the night before I go out. This helps me decide what to wear in the morning and whether I should bring an umbrella, coat, boots, or just shoes.

建议: La réponse manque de clarté et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Essayez de structurer votre réponse avec des phrases simples et précises, et utilisez un vocabulaire approprié pour parler du changement climatique.

示例: I think climate change has caused extreme weather. Before, we had four distinct seasons, but now it feels like there are only hot and cold periods, with hot weather becoming more common.

建议: Votre réponse est bonne mais pourrait être améliorée en évitant les répétitions et en utilisant des mots de liaison pour rendre la réponse plus fluide.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit European countries because they often have windy and snowy weather. Since snow is rare in my country, I would love to see and touch it; it would be a fascinating experience.

× Uh, where I live, the weather is uh, stroke in summer and uh, frosty in winter.

✓ Uh, where I live, the weather is hot in summer and frosty in winter.

The word 'stroke' is incorrectly used as an adjective to describe weather. The correct adjective to describe high temperature is 'hot'. Replace 'stroke' with 'hot' to correctly describe summer weather.

× I absolutely prefer hot weather because I can be freely doing whatever I want during the day.

✓ I absolutely prefer hot weather because I can freely do whatever I want during the day.

The phrase 'can be freely doing' is incorrect. Modal verbs like 'can' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'can be freely doing' should be corrected to 'can freely do'.

× I'd be surrounded by limits of going outside outside and doing even simple things like groceries or whatever.

✓ I'd be limited in going outside and doing even simple things like grocery shopping or whatever.

The phrase 'surrounded by limits of going outside' is awkward and incorrect. The correct expression is 'limited in going outside'. Also, 'groceries' should be 'grocery shopping' to indicate the activity.

× I prefer wet weather because I love to maintain my hairstyle, maintain my makeup, while wet weather can affect my hair and my my makeup.

✓ I prefer dry weather because I love to maintain my hairstyle and my makeup, while wet weather can affect both.

The sentence contradicts itself by saying 'I prefer wet weather' but then stating wet weather affects hair and makeup negatively. Also, 'my my makeup' is a repetition error. The pronouns and conjunctions are corrected for clarity and coherence.

× I usually check their weather forecasts before night before the day that I am going out.

✓ I usually check the weather forecast the night before the day I am going out.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrect when referring to weather forecasts in general; 'the' is appropriate. Also, 'before night before the day' is redundant and awkward; it should be 'the night before the day'.

× Do you know how what to wear the morning and to know what to bring with me?

✓ I check to know what to wear in the morning and what to bring with me.

The original sentence is a question but does not fit the context. It is better restructured as a statement explaining the purpose of checking the forecast. Also, 'how what to wear' is incorrect; it should be 'what to wear'.

× If I should bring umbrella or not or I should wear coats or boots enough or just shoes?

✓ Whether I should bring an umbrella or not, and whether I should wear coats, boots, or just shoes.

The sentence is a fragment and incorrectly structured as a question. It should be rephrased to express options clearly. Also, 'coats' should be singular or plural consistently, and 'enough' is unnecessary here.

× I think climate change effects lots overboard.

✓ I think climate change has many effects overall.

The phrase 'effects lots overboard' is incorrect and unclear. 'Lots' is an informal quantifier and 'overboard' is misused. The correct phrase is 'has many effects overall' to express the idea clearly.

× Previously weather was moderate.

✓ Previously, the weather was moderate.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'weather'. Also, a comma after 'Previously' improves readability.

× We have winter, we have summer, we have autumn, spring separately.

✓ We have winter, summer, autumn, and spring separately.

The sentence lists seasons; 'spring' should be included with a conjunction 'and' for correct list structure. Also, the repetition of 'we have' is unnecessary.

× But now we almost have two type of weather, hot or cold, but hot weather are almost one.

✓ But now we almost have two types of weather, hot or cold, but hot weather is almost the only one.

'Two type' should be 'two types' to agree in number. 'Hot weather are' should be 'hot weather is' to agree with singular subject 'weather'. The phrase 'almost one' is unclear and corrected to 'almost the only one'.

× Yes, I want to visit European countries because they have windy and snowy weather a lot.

✓ Yes, I want to visit European countries because they often have windy and snowy weather.

The phrase 'have windy and snowy weather a lot' is awkward. 'Often have' is a better expression to indicate frequency.

× So yeah, I want to see the snow and touch it and it will be really fascinating moment.

✓ So yeah, I want to see the snow and touch it; it will be a really fascinating moment.

The sentence is a run-on and missing an article before 'really fascinating moment'. Adding a semicolon and 'a' improves clarity and correctness.