天气— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
What's the weather like where you live?
考生
In my home country it's only divided into two kind of weather. It's sunny and rainy, but particularly most of the years rain is inevitable. So as an Indonesian we have to wear the umbrellas and jackets all the time.
考官
Do you prefer cold or hot weather?
考生
In my daily activities, I prefer the hot weather because it's provide us easiness to conduct our daily activities. But when it comes to a holiday season, I love being in a winter season because it's kinda a different experience for an Indonesian.
考官
Do you prefer dry or wet weather?
考生
I prefer dry because sometimes when it, uh, when it comes to a wet weather, the humidity is sometimes quite annoying for us to walk around for us to conduct our outdoor activities. So I just love being dried.
考官
Are you in the habit of checking the weather forecast? When and how often?
考生
And how often? Yes, I always check the weather forecast every time I want to go outside. Uh, actually I'm working at the office during weekdays and go to a shopping mall during weekends. I always, uh, see the the weather forecast in order for me to avoid the unnecessary, uh, condition.
考官
What do you think are the effects of climate change in recent years?
考生
The climate change has played a significant impacts during our, uh, life. Particularly it affects the heat wave, the droughts and also the unstable, uh, condition of water.
考官
Would you like to visit other cities that have different climates from where you live?
考生
Of course, I'll be very happy to visit other cities or even other countries that have a different weather because it's kind of like I'm experiencing the, the not and the not usual, uh, things not usual, uh, conditions. So yes.
评估
总分
Part 1
What's the weather like where you live?
分数: 70.0建议: Perbaiki penggunaan tata bahasa dan buat kalimat lebih alami serta efektif. Hindari pengulangan kata dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih ringkas dan jelas.
示例: In my country, we mainly have two types of weather: sunny and rainy. Most of the year, it rains frequently, so Indonesians often carry umbrellas and wear jackets.
Do you prefer cold or hot weather?
分数: 75.0建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kosakata yang lebih tepat. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan alami.
示例: I prefer hot weather for my daily activities because it makes things easier. However, during holidays, I enjoy winter since it's a unique experience for an Indonesian like me.
Do you prefer dry or wet weather?
分数: 65.0建议: Kurangi pengulangan dan filler seperti 'uh'. Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat kalimat lebih alami dan efektif.
示例: I prefer dry weather because the humidity during wet weather can be uncomfortable when doing outdoor activities.
Are you in the habit of checking the weather forecast? When and how often?
分数: 70.0建议: Hindari filler seperti 'uh' dan pengulangan kata. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih ringkas dan jelas dengan struktur yang baik.
示例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every time before going out. I work in an office on weekdays and visit shopping malls on weekends, so I want to avoid unexpected weather conditions.
What do you think are the effects of climate change in recent years?
分数: 68.0建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kosakata yang lebih tepat. Hindari filler dan buat kalimat lebih lengkap dan spesifik.
示例: Climate change has significantly affected our lives, causing heat waves, droughts, and unstable water conditions.
Would you like to visit other cities that have different climates from where you live?
分数: 60.0建议: Kurangi filler dan pengulangan, perbaiki tata bahasa, dan buat kalimat lebih jelas dan alami.
示例: Of course, I would love to visit cities or countries with different climates because it offers me a unique and new experience.
语法
× In my home country it's only divided into two kind of weather.
✓ In my home country it's only divided into two kinds of weather.
The noun 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' because it refers to more than one type of weather. When referring to multiple categories, the plural form is required.
× So as an Indonesian we have to wear the umbrellas and jackets all the time.
✓ So as Indonesians we have to carry umbrellas and wear jackets all the time.
'Umbrellas' is plural, so 'wear the umbrellas' is incorrect; we 'carry' umbrellas. Also, 'an Indonesian' refers to one person, but the sentence implies a general statement about people from Indonesia, so 'Indonesians' plural is appropriate.
× In my daily activities, I prefer the hot weather because it's provide us easiness to conduct our daily activities.
✓ In my daily activities, I prefer the hot weather because it provides us ease to conduct our daily activities.
The verb 'provide' must agree with the singular subject 'it' and be in third person singular form 'provides'. Also, 'easiness' is better replaced with 'ease' for natural usage.
× The climate change has played a significant impacts during our, uh, life.
✓ Climate change has played a significant impact during our life.
'Climate change' is uncountable and does not need 'the'. 'Impacts' should be singular 'impact' because of 'a significant'. Also, 'our life' is acceptable but 'our lives' might be better if referring to multiple people.
× I always, uh, see the the weather forecast in order for me to avoid the unnecessary, uh, condition.
✓ I always check the weather forecast in order to avoid unnecessary conditions.
The verb 'see' is not appropriate here; 'check' is better collocated with 'weather forecast'. Also, 'in order for me to' is better simplified to 'in order to'. 'Condition' should be plural 'conditions' to match 'unnecessary'.
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