天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding filler words and improving sentence flow. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I live in Shiraz, which is mostly dry. The weather is very hot in spring and summer, but it becomes quite cold in fall and winter.

建议: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'actually' and try to make your reasoning clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

示例: I prefer cold weather because you can wear layers to stay warm, whereas in hot weather, it's harder to cool down.

建议: Be careful with pronunciation and word choice (e.g., 'driver' instead of 'dry weather'). Also, avoid filler words and repeat words. Try to use linking words and more precise vocabulary.

示例: I don't like dry weather because it makes my skin and hair dry and itchy. Therefore, I prefer wet weather.

建议: Reduce filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about your habits.

示例: I don't check the weather forecast regularly. However, I usually check it before traveling to another city or country.

建议: Avoid vague phrases like 'this kind of stuff' and use more precise vocabulary. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

示例: In recent years, air pollution and global warming have caused many animals and plants to die. Therefore, we need to protect our habitats more carefully.

建议: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

示例: Of course, I would love to visit cities with different climates to experience how they differ and enjoy new environments.

× I love to visit another cities and see how they're like and how they're better, like how they're climate is.

✓ I love to visit other cities and see what they're like and how they're better, like how their climate is.

The word 'another' is used with singular countable nouns, but 'cities' is plural, so 'other' should be used instead. Also, 'they're like' is more natural as 'what they're like' to describe characteristics. Additionally, 'they're climate' is incorrect; it should be 'their climate' because 'their' is the possessive pronoun.

× Actually I don't like driver because it affects on my skin and my hair and make my skin and hair umm so dry and umm itchy.

✓ Actually I don't like dry weather because it affects my skin and my hair and makes my skin and hair so dry and itchy.

The word 'driver' is a typo and should be 'dry weather'. The phrase 'affects on' is incorrect; the correct form is 'affects' without 'on'. Also, 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× Actually I don't like driver because it affects on my skin and my hair and make my skin and hair umm so dry and umm itchy.

✓ Actually I don't like dry weather because it affects my skin and my hair and makes my skin and hair so dry and itchy.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it' (referring to dry weather). This is a subject-verb agreement issue in the third person singular.

× Actually in recent years, because of the air pollution and global warming and this kind of stuff like animals and plants are dying.

✓ Actually in recent years, because of air pollution, global warming, and this kind of stuff, animals and plants are dying.

The phrase 'because of the air pollution' is acceptable, but 'the' is unnecessary before 'air pollution' and 'global warming' when speaking generally. Also, the sentence structure is improved by adding commas to separate items in the list and clarifying the sentence.

× I love to visit another cities and see how they're like and how they're better, like how they're climate is.

✓ I love to visit other cities and see what they're like and how they're better, like how their climate is.

The pronoun 'they're' is a contraction of 'they are' and is incorrectly used before 'climate'. The correct possessive pronoun is 'their' to indicate ownership of the climate by the cities.