天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'um' to make your speech more fluent and natural. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly, for example, 'however' or 'but'. Additionally, be more specific about how the weather affects you or your surroundings to enrich your answer.

示例: I live in Port, WA, where the weather is highly unpredictable. For instance, it can be sunny one moment, but suddenly it starts raining. Although I prefer rainy weather, it sometimes spoils the plants in my garden, which is a bit disappointing.

建议: Avoid using filler words like 'uh' to improve fluency. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'therefore' to connect your ideas clearly. Also, try to provide more specific examples of activities you can do in hot weather that you cannot do in cold weather.

示例: I prefer hot weather because it allows me to move freely without wearing many layers. For example, I can go jogging or play outdoor sports comfortably, which is difficult during the cold season.

建议: Try to combine short sentences to improve coherence and avoid choppiness. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain reasons clearly. Also, be more specific about the types of sports or activities you enjoy during dry weather.

示例: Although I enjoy wet weather, I definitely prefer dry weather because it offers more options. For instance, during the dry season, I can go for walks in the park and play sports like cricket or football, which are difficult to enjoy when it's wet.

建议: Avoid filler words such as 'uh' to improve fluency. Complete your sentences fully to avoid confusion. Use linking words like 'especially' and 'because' to explain reasons clearly. For example, specify what you carry depending on the weather forecast.

示例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every day, especially before going outside or attending outdoor events. This helps me decide whether to carry an umbrella or wear suitable clothing.

建议: Complete your sentences fully and avoid abrupt endings. Use linking words like 'because' and 'as a result' to explain causes and effects clearly. Provide specific examples of climate change effects to enrich your answer.

示例: Due to rapid climate change in recent years, our planet has undergone significant transformations. For example, temperatures are rising because of human activities and globalization, which has led to more frequent extreme weather events like floods and droughts.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by combining sentences for better flow and using linking words like 'because' or 'so that'. Also, provide specific examples of cities or climates you want to visit to make your answer more vivid.

示例: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates, such as snowy places like Moscow or hot deserts like Dubai, so that I can experience the unique opportunities and challenges each climate offers.

× I live in port which is in WA and the weather here is highly unpredictable.

✓ I live in a port which is in WA and the weather here is highly unpredictable.

The word 'port' is a singular countable noun and requires an article before it. Here, 'a' is appropriate because the port is not specified previously. Omitting the article leads to incorrect grammar.

× I don't have to cover myself with a lot of layers as compared with the cold weather.

✓ I don't have to cover myself with a lot of layers as compared to cold weather.

The phrase 'as compared with' is less common and 'as compared to' is the correct prepositional phrase to compare two things. Also, 'cold weather' is uncountable here and does not need 'the'.

× I enjoy wet weather but I definitely prefer dry one as there are more options.

✓ I enjoy wet weather but I definitely prefer the dry one as there are more options.

When referring to a specific type previously mentioned, the definite article 'the' is required before 'dry one' to specify the particular kind of weather being compared.

× During dry season. You can step out in the ground, go for a walk in the park which is not possible during wet weather.

✓ During the dry season, you can step out on the ground and go for a walk in the park, which is not possible during wet weather.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper punctuation. 'During dry season.' is a sentence fragment and should be connected to the next sentence. Also, 'on the ground' is the correct preposition, and a comma is needed before 'which' to introduce the relative clause.

× You can step out in the ground, go for a walk in the park which is not possible during wet weather.

✓ You can step out on the ground, go for a walk in the park, which is not possible during wet weather.

The correct preposition with 'step out' in this context is 'on' rather than 'in'. Also, a comma is needed before 'which' to separate the relative clause.

× I make sure that I check the weather in case I need to carry something uh, for a particular.

✓ I make sure that I check the weather in case I need to carry something, uh, for a particular reason.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Adding 'reason' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Due to the rapid change in the climate over the years, I think there has been a great transformation on our planet.

✓ Due to the rapid changes in the climate over the years, I think there has been a great transformation on our planet.

'Change' in this context should be plural 'changes' because climate changes occur in multiple ways over time. This makes the sentence more accurate and grammatically correct.

× The temperatures are continuously rising due to human activity, globalization and. Climate change.

✓ The temperatures are continuously rising due to human activity, globalization, and climate change.

The original sentence has a misplaced period after 'and' which breaks the sentence incorrectly. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' in a list of three or more items (Oxford comma is optional but recommended for clarity).

× And I would like to have a first hand experience of what it feels like in extreme climate zones, such as too cold and too warm.

✓ I would like to have a firsthand experience of what it feels like in extreme climate zones, such as very cold and very warm ones.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal and should be avoided in formal speech. 'First hand' should be one word 'firsthand'. Also, 'too cold and too warm' is awkward; 'very cold and very warm ones' is clearer and grammatically correct.