天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and coherent by using correct linking words and avoiding redundancy. Also, correct grammar mistakes and use more precise vocabulary to describe the weather.

示例: The city I live in is near the sea, so the weather is mostly wet and unpredictable. It often rains unexpectedly, and we rarely have snow in winter. However, I enjoy this variety because it keeps things interesting.

建议: Improve your answer by avoiding repetition and adding linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Use more varied vocabulary to express your preferences clearly.

示例: I enjoy both hot and cold weather, but I prefer hot weather because cold often makes me sick. Besides, I find it more comfortable to wear light clothes like tops, so I generally dislike winter.

建议: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words and more natural phrasing. Try to avoid awkward expressions and make your sentences more concise.

示例: Since I have lived near the sea all my life, I prefer wet weather. When I visit dry cities, I often feel uncomfortable and don't enjoy the change.

建议: Work on grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. Use linking words and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. Also, be more specific about your routine.

示例: Because the weather here is unpredictable, I usually check the forecast every morning before school to decide whether I need to take an umbrella.

建议: Your answer is informative and relevant. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking phrases to enhance coherence and naturalness.

示例: In recent years, climate change has led to more extreme weather events like floods and heatwaves. This is largely due to global warming caused by human activities such as burning fossil fuels. For instance, many areas now experience hotter summers and irregular rainfall.

建议: Make your answer more fluent by using linking words and avoiding repetition. Also, try to express your feelings more naturally and clearly.

示例: Yes, I have visited other cities with different climates, and the change is quite noticeable. Since I'm used to wet weather, dry climates often make me feel uncomfortable.

× You can't really predict whenever it will rain or it will be sun.

✓ You can't really predict whether it will rain or be sunny.

The conjunction 'whenever' is incorrectly used here; 'whether' is the correct conjunction to express alternatives. Also, 'it will be sun' is incorrect; the adjective 'sunny' should be used instead of the noun 'sun'.

× And also there's not really snow in the winter.

✓ And also, there isn't really any snow in the winter.

The phrase 'there's not really snow' is incorrect; 'there isn't really any snow' correctly uses the quantifier 'any' with the uncountable noun 'snow' to express absence.

× You don't have only rains running some.

✓ You don't have only rain all the time.

The phrase 'rains running some' is incorrect and unclear. 'Rain' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized here. The corrected sentence uses 'rain' and clarifies the meaning.

× I like both hot and cold weather, but I prefer hot weather because whenever it's cold I get sick.

✓ I like both hot and cold weather, but I prefer hot weather because when it's cold, I get sick.

The conjunction 'whenever' is used incorrectly; 'when' is more appropriate to indicate a specific condition causing sickness.

× Also I like wearing more comfortable outfits like tops and I don't really really like winter so I prefer hot weather.

✓ Also, I like wearing more comfortable outfits like tops, and I don't really like winter, so I prefer hot weather.

The repetition 'really really' is informal and unnecessary. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× As a person who lives in a city which is near the sea, I prefer wet weather because I'm used to it since childhood and whenever I'm going to the city which isn't located near the sea and the weather is dry, I feel uncomfortable and I don't enjoy it.

✓ As a person who lives in a city near the sea, I prefer wet weather because I've been used to it since childhood, and whenever I go to a city that isn't near the sea and the weather is dry, I feel uncomfortable and don't enjoy it.

The phrase 'I'm used to it since childhood' should be in present perfect tense 'I've been used to it since childhood' to indicate a state from past to present. Also, 'whenever I'm going to the city' is incorrect; 'whenever I go to a city' is correct. 'Which isn't located near the sea' is better as 'that isn't near the sea' for clarity.

× As I already mentioned, the weather in my city is really unpredictable, so I check weather mostly every day.

✓ As I already mentioned, the weather in my city is really unpredictable, so I check the weather mostly every day.

The noun 'weather' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to specific weather conditions.

× Mostly I check weather in the morning be whenever I have to go to school to be prepared if I have to take umbrella or not.

✓ Mostly, I check the weather in the morning whenever I have to go to school to be prepared if I have to take an umbrella or not.

The phrase 'check weather' needs the definite article 'the'. The word 'be' is unnecessary and should be removed. Also, 'take umbrella' requires the indefinite article 'an' before 'umbrella'.

× For example, many regions have experienced usually hot summers and unpredictable rainfall patterns.

✓ For example, many regions have usually experienced hot summers and unpredictable rainfall patterns.

The adverb 'usually' should be placed before the main verb 'experienced' to correctly modify it.

× Of course, I have visited other cities and the weather change is really noticeable for me.

✓ Of course, I have visited other cities, and the weather change is really noticeable to me.

The phrase 'noticeable for me' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to' in this context.

× As a person who is used to living in the wet weather conditions, going to the city where the weather is dry is really uncomfortable and I don't really feel good.

✓ As a person who is used to living in wet weather conditions, going to a city where the weather is dry is really uncomfortable, and I don't really feel good.

The phrase 'the wet weather conditions' should be 'wet weather conditions' without 'the' for generalization. Also, 'the city' should be 'a city' as it refers to any city with dry weather. Adding commas improves clarity.