天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific details. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., "hot and dry in summer," "cold and dry in winter"). Use linking words like "generally" or "most of the year" to improve coherence.

示例: Generally, the climate in my city is hot and dry in summer and cold and dry in winter. Most of the year we have sunny weather, although we sometimes get a few windy days.

建议: State your preference clearly, then give two specific, natural reasons using linking words (e.g., "because" and "so"). Avoid repetition and past-tense mistakes. Keep it to 2–3 sentences without fillers.

示例: I prefer cold weather because I feel more energetic and I can concentrate better. In hot weather I get irritable and uncomfortable, so I don't enjoy being outside.

建议: Answer directly ("I prefer wet weather") and provide specific reasons with correct tense and clearer phrasing. Use linking words like "because" and "so". Avoid vague phrases like "I hated." Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer wet weather because my skin stays moisturized and I usually feel in a better mood. Rainy days also help me relax, so I enjoy them more than dry weather.

建议: Make a clear statement about frequency, then explain the reason and method. Use correct grammar: "I usually check" or "I check every morning on my smartphone." Avoid unnecessary words and finish the sentence with a reason.

示例: Yes, I usually check the weather every morning on my smartphone before leaving the house. I do this to decide what to wear and whether I need an umbrella.

建议: Begin with a concise topic sentence about the main effects, then give two specific examples (e.g., extreme temperatures, sea-level rise). Use linking words ("for example," "as a result") and complete your examples. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

示例: Climate change has caused more extreme weather and rising temperatures in recent years. For example, my city has experienced hotter summers and more frequent heatwaves, which affect health and agriculture.

建议: Answer directly ("Yes, I would") and give one or two clear reasons using linking words like "because" and "so." Avoid filler words and small grammar mistakes ("adapt to new situations"). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I'd like to visit cities with different climates because experiencing new weather helps me learn how to adapt to different conditions. It also broadens my perspective and is an enjoyable way to travel.

× The weather in my city, uh, is a hot and dry in summers and, uh, cold and, uh, dry in winter and uh, uh, most of the time in a year we have a, a sunny, uh, weather and we have also.

✓ The weather in my city is hot and dry in summer and cold and dry in winter, and most of the year we have sunny weather.

The sentence uses incorrect definite/indefinite articles ('a hot and dry', 'in summers', 'in winter', 'a sunny, uh, weather'). Remove unnecessary articles before uncountable nouns like 'weather' and use the correct singular time expressions ('in summer', 'in winter', 'most of the year'). Also simplify redundant fillers. Suggestion: omit articles before 'weather' and use 'summer'/'winter' without plural 's' when speaking generally.

× Actually, I prefer cold weather because in hot weather I, umm, I was very, uh, angry and uh, I easily, uh, was swearing and I don't like it.

✓ Actually, I prefer cold weather because in hot weather I get very angry and I easily start swearing, which I don't like.

The original uses past tense 'was' incorrectly when describing a habitual or general reaction; present tense is required. Also subject-verb form 'I get' expresses general tendency. Replace 'was swearing' with 'start swearing' to show typical reaction. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual states and simple verbs to describe reactions.

× But in cold weather, uh, I have more energy and I think better and.

✓ But in cold weather I have more energy and think more clearly.

The phrase 'I think better' is acceptable but 'think more clearly' is more natural. Remove the trailing conjunction and filler 'and'. Use present simple for habitual states. Suggestion: avoid incomplete endings and fillers.

× Actually, I prefer better, uh, weather, uh, because in dry weather, uh, my skin uh, became uh, so dry and I hated and uh, in wet weather we, I, I have a good mood and uh, I like it very much.

✓ Actually, I prefer wet weather because in dry weather my skin becomes very dry, which I dislike, and in wet weather I am in a better mood and I like it very much.

Pronoun and verb forms are mixed and inconsistent ('we, I, I have a good mood'). 'Became' is past; use present simple 'becomes' for general statements. 'I hated' is past and should be 'I dislike' or 'I don't like it'. Clarify subject 'I' throughout. Suggestion: keep subject consistent and use present simple for general facts.

× It's actually I used to checking the weather every morning when I wake up, I check the weather from my smartphone instantly and also because it is important to wear to know that what.

✓ Actually, I usually check the weather every morning when I wake up; I check it on my smartphone because it is important to know what to wear.

'Used to checking' is incorrect: 'used to' plus base verb refers to past habits, while 'used to + -ing' is not correct here. Use 'usually check' for habitual action. Also 'know what to wear' word order was wrong ('to wear to know that what'). Suggestion: use 'usually' or 'I check' for routines and the phrase 'know what to wear' for clothing decisions.

× I think that it is very important to care about climate change the in and nowadays, because climate change affected in our lives.

✓ I think that it is very important to care about climate change nowadays because climate change has affected our lives.

The original has misplaced words ('the in and nowadays') and incorrect preposition 'affected in our lives'. Use 'nowadays' for the time reference and the present perfect 'has affected' to show effects up to now. Remove unnecessary prepositions. Suggestion: use 'has affected our lives' and place 'nowadays' correctly.

× For example, the global warming is a bad issue that affected our lives and for example, in my city the weather.

✓ For example, global warming is a serious problem that has affected our lives. For example, in my city the weather has become more extreme.

Do not use the article 'the' with 'global warming' here; use present simple 'is' and present perfect 'has affected' to indicate ongoing impact. The fragment 'in my city the weather' was incomplete; complete it with a clause. Suggestion: use 'has become' to describe changes over time.

× Yes, I actually, I very interested to travel and see other cities and, uh, experience new weather, uh, because I think that it's a good way to, uh, learn how to adopt 2 new situations and, uh, it's makes us very strong and.

✓ Yes, I am actually very interested in traveling to see other cities and experience new weather because I think it's a good way to learn how to adapt to new situations and it makes us stronger.

Multiple issues: missing verb 'am' after 'I', incorrect preposition 'interested to' should be 'interested in', incorrect verb form 'traveling' (gerund after 'interested in'), 'adopt 2 new situations' should be 'adapt to new situations', and 'it's makes' should be 'it makes'. Replace numeral '2' with 'to'/'new'. Suggestion: use 'interested in' + gerund, 'adapt to', and ensure subject-verb agreement 'it makes'.