天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và độ mạch lạc: tránh lặp từ không cần thiết (ví dụ “it depends a lot”, “change a lot”), sửa lỗi thì (will become → will be), dùng liên từ để nối ý rõ ràng. Nên có câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, tiếp theo 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể (nhiệt độ trung bình, ví dụ về thời tiết gần đây).

示例: It varies throughout the year. At the moment it is hot and dry in my hometown, but next month it will become spring and temperatures will fluctuate more. For example, some days are warm and sunny while others are windy and cool.

建议: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ; nói rõ lý do cụ thể và ngắn gọn. Tránh dùng cụm từ không chính xác (“Christmas evil” → “Christmas Eve”); giới hạn câu trong tối đa 4 câu, thêm liên từ khi nêu lý do và ví dụ.

示例: I prefer cold weather because I enjoy wearing warm clothes and celebrating Christmas Eve with my family. The atmosphere feels cozy and festive, and I like going for walks in crisp, cool air.

建议: Cải thiện phát âm/cách viết từ và cấu trúc câu (drive → dry). Tránh câu dài lặp; đưa ra lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn về hoạt động dễ làm trong thời tiết khô để minh hoạ.

示例: I prefer dry weather because it feels more comfortable and makes daily activities easier. For instance, I can go for a run or hang laundry outside without worrying about rain.

建议: Cải thiện trật tự từ và dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên hơn; giảm từ thừa (that really functional and useful). Nên nói rõ tần suất (every morning, sometimes in evening) và nêu một ví dụ cụ thể về cách bạn chuẩn bị đồ dựa trên dự báo.

示例: Yes, I check the weather every morning so I can choose suitable clothes for the day. For example, if rain is predicted, I take an umbrella and wear waterproof shoes.

建议: Sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản (have → has), dùng từ vựng chính xác (eye muse? release their house? unclear). Nên nêu các tác động cụ thể và chính xác như: gia tăng thời tiết cực đoan, ảnh hưởng đến nông nghiệp, sức khỏe cộng đồng và kinh tế; đưa dẫn chứng ngắn (ví dụ: hạn hán, bão mạnh hơn, mất mùa).

示例: Climate change has caused more extreme weather, such as severe droughts and stronger storms, which damage crops and harm people’s health. For example, recent droughts have reduced harvests and rising sea levels have threatened coastal homes.

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự ý; tránh lặp từ và cụm từ rườm rà. Trả lời rõ ràng với 1 câu chủ đề và 1–2 câu viện dẫn lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: trải nghiệm hoạt động mới, học hỏi văn hoá khác).

示例: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates because I enjoy new experiences. For instance, I want to see snowy mountains and try winter sports, and I’m also curious about tropical cities with beaches and unique food.

× Well, it depends a lot. Uh, for instance, right now in my hometown the weather is quite hot and dry, but generally it change a lot. Next month is will become spring, therefore temperature will be change a lot.

✓ Well, it depends a lot. For instance, right now in my hometown the weather is quite hot and dry, but generally it changes a lot. Next month it will become spring, therefore the temperature will change a lot.

The verbs 'change' and the phrase 'is will become' are incorrect for present and future contexts. Use the third person singular present 'changes' for 'the weather' (subject-verb agreement) and form future with 'will' + base verb: 'will become' and 'will change'. Also add the definite article 'the' before 'temperature' for specificity. Suggestions: Use 'changes' for habitual present with singular subject, write 'it will become spring', and 'the temperature will change a lot.'

× Absolutely cold weather because when coming to winter I really excited and interested because I I can put on my warm clothes and I can experience Christmas evil with my family. That's make me feel excited.

✓ I absolutely prefer cold weather because when winter comes I get really excited and interested; I can put on my warm clothes and I can celebrate Christmas with my family. That makes me feel excited.

Errors: 'when coming to winter' is incorrect word order; use 'when winter comes'. 'I really excited' lacks the auxiliary verb 'am' for present state; use 'I get really excited' or 'I am really excited'. 'That's make' should be 'That makes' to agree with singular subject. 'Christmas evil' is likely a mischoice of word; use 'celebrate Christmas'. Suggestions: Use correct subject-verb agreement and natural collocations: 'when winter comes', 'I am/get excited', 'That makes me feel excited.'

× Well, I would say I really love drive weather because when the atmosphere is quite dry and that's bring to me sense of comfortable to make anything instead of wet weather because wet weather that's really annoyed and uncomfortable.

✓ Well, I would say I really love dry weather because when the atmosphere is quite dry it brings me a sense of comfort and makes it easier to do anything, unlike wet weather, which is really annoying and uncomfortable.

Errors: 'drive' should be 'dry' (spelling). 'that's bring to me sense of comfortable' has wrong verb form and noun/adjective use: use 'it brings me a sense of comfort' or 'it makes me feel comfortable'. 'that's really annoyed' uses adjective 'annoyed' (feeling) instead of 'annoying' (causing annoyance). Also improve sentence flow with 'unlike' and relative clause 'which is'. Suggestions: Use correct spelling 'dry', proper noun phrases 'a sense of comfort', and correct adjective 'annoying.'

× Personally, I maintain the habit of checking weather forecasts mostly after I wake up in the morning and that really functional and useful for me because it can make me ensure that the outfit in that day will suitable with the weather.

✓ Personally, I have a habit of checking the weather forecast mostly after I wake up in the morning, and that is really functional and useful for me because it helps me ensure that the outfit for that day will be suitable for the weather.

Errors: 'maintain the habit' is awkward; 'have a habit' is natural. Missing articles: 'the weather forecast'. 'that really functional' needs the verb 'is' and adjective 'functional'. 'it can make me ensure' is incorrect — use 'it helps me ensure'. 'the outfit in that day will suitable with the weather' needs 'for that day', auxiliary 'will be', and preposition 'suitable for'. Suggestions: Use natural collocations: 'have a habit', include articles, use 'helps me ensure', 'outfit for that day will be suitable for the weather.'

× Frankly speaking, nowadays climate change have a big impact on many fields in global. For instance, climate change can lead to eye muse in some areas or impact on economic of countries that can also bring to people poor health and release their house.

✓ Frankly speaking, nowadays climate change has a big impact on many areas globally. For instance, climate change can lead to droughts in some areas or impact the economies of countries, which can also bring poor health to people and displace them from their homes.

Errors: 'climate change have' should be 'has' (singular subject). 'many fields in global' is awkward — use 'many areas globally'. 'eye muse' seems to be a mistranscription; likely 'droughts'. 'impact on economic of countries' should be 'impact the economies of countries'. 'bring to people poor health and release their house' is incorrect—use 'bring poor health to people' and 'displace them from their homes'. Suggestions: Ensure subject-verb agreement ('climate change has'), use correct nouns ('droughts', 'economies'), and correct verb constructions ('displace people from their homes').

× Yeah, absolutely, because I am kind of person who really curious about everything about me, then I one I always want to try something new instead of instead of familiar things around my life. So I will I tend to visit all.

✓ Yeah, absolutely, because I am the kind of person who is really curious about everything around me, and I always want to try something new instead of familiar things in my life. So I tend to visit them all.

Errors: Missing article 'the' in 'the kind of person'. 'who really curious' needs verb 'is'. 'everything about me' should be 'everything around me'. Redundant words 'then I one I' and repeated 'instead of instead of' are wrong. 'visit all' needs an object—use 'visit them all' or 'visit all of them'. Suggestions: Use correct articles, include linking verbs ('is'), remove redundancies, and supply objects for verbs like 'visit'.