天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a concise topic sentence that directly answers the question, avoid unclear or incorrect word choices (e.g. “horrible temperature”), and limit to 2–3 clear sentences. Use linking words to add one specific detail about temperature or typical conditions.

示例: At the moment it's autumn in Korea, so the weather is mild. It isn't very cold or very hot, and we often have cool, crisp days with occasional wind.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific, connected reasons using linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Avoid repetitive phrasing.

示例: I prefer hot weather because I enjoy outdoor activities. For example, when it's warm I go hiking and play football more often.

建议: Answer clearly (dry or wet) in the first sentence, then explain with one or two specific examples. Check word choice and grammar (e.g. "dry" not "drive") and use linking words like "for example" appropriately.

示例: I prefer dry weather because it's better for outdoor activities. For example, I often hike with friends or play football on dry weekends.

建议: Use the present simple for habits (e.g. "I check") and give a clear frequency (always, often, sometimes). State when you check and why, using one linking word to connect reason.

示例: Yes, I check the weather forecast often, especially before I go hiking or plan outdoor activities on weekends. I do this because I want to know if it will rain or be too hot.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence about the main effects, then give two specific, supported details (use linking words like "for example" or "as a result"). Use correct grammar (e.g. "concerned about") and more precise vocabulary (e.g. "rising temperatures," "more extreme weather").

示例: Climate change has caused rising temperatures and more extreme weather. For example, summers are hotter than before and I've noticed more sudden storms recently, so I carry an umbrella more often.

建议: Answer directly and briefly (Yes/No + reason). Give one specific reason and a concrete example. Avoid confusing phrases like "the climate change is the most important thing"—instead say "the climate is an important factor when packing."

示例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates because I want new experiences. For instance, I want to visit a tropical city to see beaches and rainforests, so I would pack light clothes and a rain jacket.

× Now I live in Korea, the weather here is in the autumn seasons, so it's not that cold, but it's not that hot. It's between the horrible temperature and the high temperatures, so is chilling.

✓ I now live in Korea. The weather here is autumnal, so it is neither very cold nor very hot; the temperature is moderate and a bit chilly.

Errors: incorrect tense phrasing and awkward expressions. 'Now I live' is acceptable but 'I now live' is more natural. 'in the autumn seasons' is incorrect; use 'autumnal' or 'in autumn'. 'It's between the horrible temperature and the high temperatures' is unclear and ungrammatical; replace with 'neither very cold nor very hot' or 'moderate'. 'so is chilling' lacks a subject and uses informal 'chilling'; correct to 'a bit chilly'. Suggestion: use concise natural adjectives and ensure every clause has a subject and verb.

× I prefer the hot weather. I usually go out doing a lot of activities outside, so the hot weather is the good weather to do the activity outside.

✓ I prefer hot weather. I usually go out and do many activities outdoors, so hot weather is good for outdoor activities.

Errors: unnecessary progressive '-ing' after 'go out' and awkward articles/adjectives. 'go out doing' should be 'go out and do' or 'do many activities'. 'outside' is better as 'outdoors'. 'the hot weather is the good weather' has extra articles; use 'hot weather is good'. Suggestion: use simple verb forms for routines and choose proper adverb (outdoors) and plural for general activities.

× Personally I prefer drive with the is suitable for outdoor activities. For example, I usually go hiking with friends in weekend and playing football in the afternoon, so it's good.

✓ Personally, I prefer dry weather because it is suitable for outdoor activities. For example, I usually go hiking with friends on weekends and play football in the afternoon, so it is good.

Errors: 'prefer drive with the is suitable' is ungrammatical and mixes words. Use 'prefer dry weather because it is suitable'. 'in weekend' should be 'on weekends'. Parallel structure: 'I usually go hiking... and play football' (both base verbs). Suggestion: keep parallel verbs and use correct prepositions for time ('on weekends').

× I checked the weather forecast a lot when I go out and have time to go hiking with friends in the morning, afternoon and evening on weekend. I think it's important to do check the weather forecasting before go.

✓ I check the weather forecast often when I plan to go out or go hiking with friends in the morning, afternoon, or evening on weekends. I think it's important to check the weather forecast before you go.

Errors: mixed past and present: 'I checked' vs 'when I go out' — use present simple for habitual actions: 'I check'. 'have time to go hiking' -> 'plan to go hiking' is clearer. 'on weekend' -> 'on weekends'. 'do check the weather forecasting before go' has unnecessary 'do', wrong noun form and missing object: use 'check the weather forecast before you go'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense for habits, use correct noun forms, and include subjects in clauses.

× Well, the climate change is the problem that everyone should concerned. I feel the temperature is higher than in the past and I have to bring umbrella out outside more in the past 10 years.

✓ Well, climate change is a problem that everyone should be concerned about. I feel temperatures are higher than in the past, and I have had to bring an umbrella more often over the past ten years.

Errors: 'the climate change' — do not use 'the' before a general concept; use 'climate change'. 'is the problem that everyone should concerned' — missing 'be' and preposition: 'should be concerned about'. 'the temperature is higher' -> 'temperatures are higher' for general trend. 'bring umbrella out outside' incorrect article and redundancy; use 'bring an umbrella' and 'more often over the past ten years' to indicate duration. Suggestion: use correct articles with countable nouns, include necessary verbs, and avoid redundant words.

× Yes, of course, I love to see the world where difference from my country, the climate change is the most important thing and the most necessary factor to be concerned with your pack the bag before you go travel.

✓ Yes, of course. I love to see parts of the world that are different from my country. The climate is an important factor to consider when you pack your bag before you travel.

Errors: run-on sentence and incorrect relative clause: 'where difference from my country' should be 'that are different from my country' or 'parts of the world different from my country'. 'the climate change is the most important thing' is awkward; 'the climate' or 'climate differences' fits better. 'to be concerned with your pack the bag before you go travel' is ungrammatical; use 'to consider when you pack your bag before you travel'. Suggestion: break long sentences into clear sentences, use correct relative clauses, and use natural verb phrases like 'consider when you pack'.

× For example, I usually go hiking with friends in weekend and playing football in the afternoon, so it's good.

✓ For example, I usually go hiking with friends on weekends and play football in the afternoon, so it's good.

Errors: 'in weekend' should be plural 'on weekends' when referring to habitual actions. Also the verb forms must be parallel: 'go hiking' and 'play football'. Suggestion: use 'on weekends' for habitual weekend activities and maintain parallel verbs.