零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit long and slightly unclear. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific details using linking words. Also, use the correct terms like 'fiber' instead of 'fib'.

示例: I usually eat snacks once or twice a week nowadays because I try to control my diet. For example, I prefer snacks that are high in fiber or protein to stay healthy.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Focus on giving a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Also, use correct vocabulary like 'fiber' and avoid confusing phrases.

示例: I think eating snacks can be healthy if I choose the right ones. For instance, I often pick snacks that are high in fiber, protein, and omega-3, rather than those with a lot of sugar, salt, or oil.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and better structured. Start with a direct answer, then add specific supporting details with linking words. Also, improve sentence flow and grammar.

示例: I didn't eat snacks often when I was young because my family didn't allow unhealthy ones. Instead, they gave me snacks rich in protein and fiber to keep me healthy.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to clearly state your preference first, then explain with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid informal phrases like 'wanna'.

示例: I like to try new snacks that are recently released, especially those that others haven't tried yet. For example, I often buy snacks recommended by influencers to discover new flavors.

× But I have been trying to control myself to not eat a lot of snacks during the day and nowadays just once or twice a week I want to eat some snacks and the snacks usually have a lot of fib or protein.

✓ But I have been trying to control myself from eating a lot of snacks during the day, and nowadays I only want to eat some snacks once or twice a week, and the snacks usually have a lot of fiber or protein.

The phrase 'control myself to not eat' is incorrect; the correct form is 'control myself from eating' because 'control' is followed by 'from' plus the gerund form of the verb. Also, 'fib' is a misspelling of 'fiber'. Additionally, the sentence was restructured for clarity and correct word order.

× Well, it depends on the in the Koreans of the snacks, I often choose high fib, high protein, and I have a lot of omega-3 and not just sugar and salty and a lot of oil.

✓ Well, it depends on the kinds of snacks in Korea; I often choose high-fiber, high-protein snacks that have a lot of omega-3 and not just sugar, salt, or a lot of oil.

The phrase 'depends on the in the Koreans of the snacks' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'depends on the kinds of snacks in Korea'. Also, 'fib' should be 'fiber', and 'salty' should be 'salt' to correctly refer to the substance. The sentence was rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Not quite actually, because my parents and my siblings didn't allow me to eat a lot of unhealthy snacks and they always give me a very healthy and a lot of good ingredients of protein, fiber.

✓ Not quite actually, because my parents and my siblings didn't allow me to eat a lot of unhealthy snacks and they always gave me very healthy snacks with a lot of good ingredients like protein and fiber.

The verb 'give' should be in the past tense 'gave' to match the past context indicated by 'didn't allow'. Also, 'a very healthy and a lot of good ingredients' is awkward; it was corrected to 'very healthy snacks with a lot of good ingredients like protein and fiber' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Well to be honest based on my shopping I usually buy a brand new snacks and the snacks which no one wanna try it and just like some influencer I buy them to understand the taste of it.

✓ Well, to be honest, based on my shopping, I usually buy brand new snacks and snacks that no one wants to try, and just like some influencers, I buy them to understand their taste.

'A brand new snacks' is incorrect because 'snacks' is plural and should not have the singular article 'a'. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be 'wants to'. The phrase 'the snacks which no one wanna try it' is redundant; 'it' is unnecessary. 'Some influencer' should be plural 'some influencers' to match the context. The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.