零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using proper sentence structures and linking words. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

示例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because I am at school then. I feel a bit hungry after studying for a long time, so having snacks is like a treat for me. Also, I enjoy sharing snacks with my friends during breaks.

建议: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and clearer linking words to connect your ideas. Be specific about why snacks are unhealthy and explain your habits clearly. Avoid vague phrases and keep your answer concise.

示例: I think snacks are generally unhealthy because they often contain a lot of oil, salt, and sugar. However, I still eat them once or twice a week because they taste good. Especially during long study sessions, I find snacks help me stay focused.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly with correct sentence structure. Use linking words to explain reasons and avoid confusing phrases. Keep your answer relevant and concise.

示例: When I was young, I often ate snacks instead of regular meals because they were convenient. I used to buy many snacks and store them at home for easy access.

建议: Focus on using correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid confusing phrases like 'perform them over' and 'say satisfy my craft'. Use linking words to compare your preferences clearly and keep your answer natural and concise.

示例: I really enjoy eating chips because they are full of flavour and have a nice salty taste. I prefer them over sweets like candies or jelly, although I also like strawberry-flavoured snacks. Chips satisfy my craving for something salty and crunchy.

× I often eat snacks in afternoon because in that time I usually at the school and snacks can cheers to friend and I have a little bit hungry in that time because during a long time to study and snacks was a like a treat for myself.

✓ I often eat snacks in the afternoon because at that time I am usually at school and snacks can cheer my friends up and I am a little bit hungry at that time because I study for a long time and snacks are like a treat for myself.

The preposition 'in' should be 'in the afternoon' to specify the time of day. 'In that time' should be 'at that time' to indicate a specific moment. 'At the school' should be 'at school' as the article is not needed here. 'Cheers to friend' is incorrect; it should be 'cheer my friends up' to express making friends happy. 'I have a little bit hungry' is incorrect; it should be 'I am a little bit hungry' because 'hungry' is an adjective describing a state, not something you 'have'. 'During a long time to study' should be 'I study for a long time' to express duration properly. 'Snacks was a like a treat' should be 'snacks are like a treat' to agree in number and tense.

× I think snacks is unhealthy because there is a lot of oil or salt and also will add a lot of sugar. But because it was so tasty so I will have it once or twice a week. Especially during a long term study I need it very.

✓ I think snacks are unhealthy because they contain a lot of oil and salt and also have a lot of sugar added. But because they are so tasty, I have them once or twice a week. Especially during long periods of study, I need them very much.

'Snacks is' should be 'snacks are' because 'snacks' is plural. 'There is a lot of oil or salt' should be 'they contain a lot of oil and salt' to refer correctly to snacks. 'Will add a lot of sugar' is incorrect; it should be 'have a lot of sugar added' to express passive addition. 'It was so tasty' should be 'they are so tasty' to agree with plural 'snacks' and present tense. 'I will have it' should be 'I have them' to match plural and habitual action. 'During a long term study I need it very' is unclear; corrected to 'during long periods of study, I need them very much' for clarity and correctness.

× When I was young I was really like trade snacks as a man meal because it was so convenient and usually I will buy a lot of snacks and storage in my dominant as.

✓ When I was young, I really liked trading snacks as a main meal because it was so convenient and usually I would buy a lot of snacks and store them in my dormitory.

'Was really like' should be 'really liked' to use past tense correctly. 'Trade snacks as a man meal' should be 'trading snacks as a main meal' for correct verb form and spelling. 'Usually I will buy' should be 'usually I would buy' to express habitual past action. 'Storage in my dominant as' is incorrect; it should be 'store them in my dormitory' for correct verb and noun usage.

× I really enjoy eating chips because they are full of flavor and have a nice salty taste. I perform them over sweets like candies or Jelly because I like strawberry snacks for more. Chips are definitely my favorite because they are say satisfy my craft for something salty and crunchy.

✓ I really enjoy eating chips because they are full of flavour and have a nice salty taste. I prefer them over sweets like candies or jelly because I like strawberry snacks more. Chips are definitely my favourite because they satisfy my craving for something salty and crunchy.

'Perform them over' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer them over' to express preference. 'Jelly' should not be capitalised. 'I like strawberry snacks for more' is unclear; corrected to 'I like strawberry snacks more' for clarity. 'They are say satisfy my craft' is incorrect; it should be 'they satisfy my craving' to use correct verbs and nouns. 'Flavour' and 'favourite' are spelled in British English as shown.